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Old 06-23-2006, 11:07 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Just a song I was messin' with.. might add an audio version later on
Verse I
God I know i've done some unthinkable things,
That was just because I wanted to realize my dreams/1
One day I thought i'd have the Cadaliac with the rims,
So to do that, I rob anyone for their cars, money, or timbs/2
I just wanna live well and prosper, all I need is a fresh start at life,
Please protect me god, I don't wanna always carry around my knife/3
I really need answers, so i'll ask of you again,what did I do to deserve this?
I mean, i've tried to please you, every Sunday i'm at the 10:30 service/4
I've done some regretable things in the past, like when I used to shoot-up my arms,
I'm an innocent kid I never meant to do wrong.. So I could never do any harm/5
I can't trust anyone my world has been darkened by all the deception,
in order to protect myself i'm always strapped like a horny lesbian/6
I'll do anything for a second chance, i'd hop all the fences, and swim through all the moats,
That's all I want, and to have equality among peers.. no more of me being your scapegoat/7
If you're gonna continue treating me like this, I wanna be exiled or make me vanished,
For years i've been hungery for remdemption, but because of you, i've been famished/8
You've such high-standards i'm sorry if I can't exceed them..after all i'm not prolific i'm a normal guy,
Though it may seem like it, i'm not flashy or fly all I want are answers, so please tell me/9(Tell me)
Chorus 2x

Why god? Did you make my life so terrible?
I know i've done wrong, but no one is perfect,
You look down on me so much, it makes me feel worthless/1
Please, God tell me what i've done to deserve this?
Is it because of my past? Why does that even have to resurface?/2
I've only spent fifteen years here,you've already put me through so much,
I know better than anyone your good guy,so stop holding a grudge/3
All this pain all this adversity isn't worth life it isn't worth anything I just wanna die,
All I want you to do is just listen to me, I just want some answers,so please God tell me why/4

My IQ isn't the greatest, so don't catagorize me with nerds,
I'm not prolific either.. and I apologize if I can't meet your standards/1
Right now, i'm at the end of my rope, suffering from fatigue I have nothing left,
So with my one final breathe, I have something to get off my chest like a bench-press/2

(Yeah, hear me out for a minute will ya?.. Yo)
Verse II
Now I know I didn't have that great of life Back Then like Mike Jones,
I'm like a boomerang though, I just keep comin' back despite blows/1
You've had a front row seat, first-hand you've seen all the strife,
Beyond that, i'm sly like a cat, but I feel like i'm on my ninth life/2
Quit having this raincloud of sorts follow me, it doesn't scare me,
I'm not trying to act tough I just don't want you to be an adversary/3
All this bullshit you've pulled is getting old, so let's make a truce,
Saying that you'll stop treating me like a third-wheel or a caboose/4
Quite frankly i'm getting sick of all of this pain and all the crying
All the odds, i'm defying.. you know i'm your son, so stop denying/5
Shelter me..keep me warm at night, I just want to know you'll keep me safe
And you'll stop tourting me with your deception as if i'm some kind of slave/6
All I want is for us to be together and happy, what will it take to repair the relationship?
Tell me..i'll act as a mercinary i'll do all of your dirty work, you don't deal with this shit/7
More than anything though, I want the truth..like is all of this pain supposed to be a blessing?
I'm tired of waiting, could you please answer my questions?/8(Answer them)

Chorus 2x
Why god? Did you make my life so terrible?
I know i've done wrong, but no one is perfect,
You look down on me so much, it makes me feel worthless/1
Please, God tell me what i've done to deserve this?
Is it because of my past? Why does that even have to resurface?/2
I've only spent fifteen years here,you've already put me through so much,
I know better than anyone your good guy,so stop holding a grudge/3
All this pain all this adversity isn't worth life it isn't worth anything I just wanna die,
All I want you to do is just listen to me, I just want some answers,so please God tell me why/4
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Old 06-24-2006, 01:14 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I just wanna live well and prosper, all I need is a fresh start at life,
Please protect me god, I don't wanna always carry around my knife/3
I really need answers, so i'll ask of you again,what did I do to deserve this?
I mean, i've tried to please you, every Sunday i'm at the 10:30 service/4


these were aight

overall too long cut your verses shorter no body wants to read a song just a snippet

but not badd work on wordplay, vocab and such
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Old 06-26-2006, 12:59 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Yeah I understand...
After I posted this, I skimmed through it,
and I then realized that some of my
lines were a little lenghthy..:(
Thanks for the feed anyway..
-One like Tom Green's nutsack.
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