Week6 HWBelt: Beyond vs. ((Phorshadow)) 5-3

[Plot]

10-15 bars due on Monday.
Please check & match yur opponent.

[PhorShadow]

check in.
im going 20 lines, no more.

[Beyond²]

10 bars it is. Good luck.

[PhorShadow]

*some BB Guns use CO2 to fire...
*his user title is "Impossible Is Nothing"
the rest should be easy to get.

the kids the new champ..avoid a battle? ull never see me run
but after 2 voters, you'll 'See 0-2(co2)' like firring a Bee Bee gun!
u talk low, so the machette'll put ya head beside ya sneakers
then provide facts that ya verses are 'classless' like retired teachers!
i darkened ya eyes with the first one..so its no wonder why u failin to see
that i'll put holes in ur head, make sure u 'know the drill' like daily routines!
we all know u blow at text..shit..thats why your scared to show ya neck
battling me was a 'Grave mistake'..considering thats where your goin next!
im the hottest there is...not even the champ is toppin the kid...
so u beating me must be nothing...cause thats what u claim impossible is!

there's 10 lines, ill drop 10 more once u drop ur 20....g/l

[Beyond²]

Originally Posted by PhorShadow

fuck this, the "lets dick ride game"...
...ima have to say I RUN text...BITCHES!

Originally Posted by Legend

you're a LW Champ... you RUN nothing

Got a big ego, but your Pride? Ceased in secs, mayne.
Legend ‘Cut it off, to make you look like a Bitch’..
…… now you don’t even need a sex change!
Get ready for ‘a Tombstone’, you aint seeing the win in the distance.
Cuz ‘RIP is going to be your future’..
And I don’t mean Hamilton and the Pistons!
No one pays you mind, you’re not the badder guy.
When you drop, it’ll be lack of publicity…way no one’ll AdvertEyes!
They won’t ‘Honor u with a Title’, I suggest u just try keepin a gal dude.
Because we all know A Phor Dub’ll…only Cheapen the Value. (affordable)
I’m ‘Here to Remind you of your Place with Writtens’ ..
So winnin’ this, bastard?
…… Nah, simply put - ‘this Bookmarks the end of your Chapter!’

over.

[Kaeo.Seru]

Vote= beyond

stronger lines IMO. the opener killed it for me.

EDIT:

Phor's verse had One good punch. and that was the Drill bar. his 1st bar had potential to be a very hard punch but it failed to connect due to poor wording. so the wordplay was just off. and a couple of played punches like the Classless and grave mistake lines. then the ender was poorly executed for a personal. it would've been good a coule of years ago. but now you need to be more creaitve and polished. overall i felt that phor could've spent more time in preparation for this battle.

Beyond's verse had much more original and creative content. the opener I felt was the strongest line, cuz not only was it creative but it was a relevant and dope personal. nicely used. he does need to work on his word play as it borders the lines of forcing it. as was his affordable wordplay which was almost on old Con status with the forcing. and I liked the last bar although i had to read it 2x to catch the flow to find the rhyme. it was nice

vote= BEYOND

[PhorShadow]

^of course because it rode your dick!
no..im joking...but if ur gonna vote can u get more in depth with it?

[sycknin thaught]

the kids the new champ..avoid a battle? ull never see me run
but after 2 voters, you'll 'See 0-2(co2)' like firring a Bee Bee gun!
i actually kinda liked this 1
u talk low, so the machette'll put ya head beside ya sneakers
then provide facts that ya verses are 'classless' like retired teachers!
nah
i darkened ya eyes with the first one..so its no wonder why u failin to see
that i'll put holes in ur head, make sure u 'know the drill' like daily routines!
eh.. ok
we all know u blow at text..shit..thats why your scared to show ya neck
battling me was a 'Grave mistake'..considering thats where your goin next!
played concept
im the hottest there is...not even the champ is toppin the kid...
so u beating me must be nothing...cause thats what u claim impossible is!
filler

vs.


Got a big ego, but your Pride? Ceased in secs, mayne.
Legend ‘Cut it off, to make you look like a Bitch’..
…… now you don’t even need a sex change!
not feelin it
Get ready for ‘a Tombstone’, you aint seeing the win in the distance.
Cuz ‘RIP is going to be your future’..
And I don’t mean Hamilton and the Pistons!
eh
No one pays you mind, you’re not the badder guy.
When you drop, it’ll be lack of publicity…way no one’ll AdvertEyes!
lol ok
They won’t ‘Honor u with a Title’, I suggest u just try keepin a gal dude.
Because we all know A Phor Dub’ll…only Cheapen the Value. (affordable)
eh nah
I’m ‘Here to Remind you of your Place with Writtens’ ..
So winnin’ this, bastard?
…… Nah, simply put - ‘this Bookmarks the end of your Chapter!’
no

overall, i vote phorshadow, imo he came harder, but to me this was a kinda week battle iunno, vote Phorshadow

[PhorShadow]

how the fuck is my last bar a filler?...read his user title...
respect on the vote.

1-0(unless legend gets more indepth with it.)

ups.

[Plot]

Dopes Shadow
the kids the new champ..avoid a battle? ull never see me run
but after 2 voters, you'll 'See 0-2(co2)' like firring a Bee Bee gun!
~wordings off,
ok idea for a wplay but I woulda gone with something about carbon dioxode
u talk low, so the machette'll put ya head beside ya sneakers
then provide facts that ya verses are 'classless' like retired teachers!
~old
i darkened ya eyes with the first one..so its no wonder why u failin to see
that i'll put holes in ur head, make sure u 'know the drill' like daily routines!
~not bad
we all know u blow at text..shit..thats why your scared to show ya neck
battling me was a 'Grave mistake'..considering thats where your goin next!
~old
im the hottest there is...not even the champ is toppin the kid...
so u beating me must be nothing...cause thats what u claim impossible is!
~poor personal

Beyond
Got a big ego, but your Pride? Ceased in secs, mayne.
Legend ‘Cut it off, to make you look like a Bitch’..
…… now you don’t even need a sex change!
~dope
Get ready for ‘a Tombstone’, you aint seeing the win in the distance.
Cuz ‘RIP is going to be your future’..
And I don’t mean Hamilton and the Pistons!
~dope, RIP's fresh concept
No one pays you mind, you’re not the badder guy.
When you drop, it’ll be lack of publicity…way no one’ll AdvertEyes!
~nicw wp
They won’t ‘Honor u with a Title’, I suggest u just try keepin a gal dude.
Because we all know A Phor Dub’ll…only Cheapen the Value. (affordable)
~forced
I’m ‘Here to Remind you of your Place with Writtens’ ..
So winnin’ this, bastard?
…… Nah, simply put - ‘this Bookmarks the end of your Chapter!’
~dont see how it rhymes.

V-Beyond.
Fresher

[Hoodini]

the kids the new champ..avoid a battle? ull never see me run
but after 2 voters, you'll 'See 0-2(co2)' like firring a Bee Bee gun!
nice
u talk low, so the machette'll put ya head beside ya sneakers
then provide facts that ya verses are 'classless' like retired teachers!
kewl
i darkened ya eyes with the first one..so its no wonder why u failin to see
that i'll put holes in ur head, make sure u 'know the drill' like daily routines!
nah, heard sumthin like it this week
we all know u blow at text..shit..thats why your scared to show ya neck
battling me was a 'Grave mistake'..considering thats where your goin next!
gr8
im the hottest there is...not even the champ is toppin the kid...
so u beating me must be nothing...cause thats what u claim impossible is!
yes

Got a big ego, but your Pride? Ceased in secs, mayne.
Legend ‘Cut it off, to make you look like a Bitch’..
…… now you don’t even need a sex change!
played pls
Get ready for ‘a Tombstone’, you aint seeing the win in the distance.
Cuz ‘RIP is going to be your future’..
And I don’t mean Hamilton and the Pistons!
played pls
No one pays you mind, you’re not the badder guy.
When you drop, it’ll be lack of publicity…way no one’ll AdvertEyes!
nice
They won’t ‘Honor u with a Title’, I suggest u just try keepin a gal dude.
Because we all know A Phor Dub’ll…only Cheapen the Value. (affordable)
terribly forced
I’m ‘Here to Remind you of your Place with Writtens’ ..
So winnin’ this, bastard?
…… Nah, simply put - ‘this Bookmarks the end of your Chapter!’
gr8

vote- phorshadow, beyond came very wack

[Ruck]

sonny, you know that classless line is played. and that grave mistake.

keep it boogy.

[iQonoclast]

There's really nothing to break down.

Phorshadow,
See O-2 was kinda generic and pointless. Classless and grave mistake were no-no's, and the closer was a bad personal, if you wanna call it that.

Beyond,
First line had too much going on and doesn't translate easy, even in text. Rip line was about 5 years late and you didn't flip the context right. Advert-eyes? A Four Double? Not even close. Then the closer, I didn't really catch on to, but I'm assuming it's a personal. Looked like too much in one couplet, but it still came off as the better personal you both threw in.


Nothing special. Out of 2 total personals, Beyond's was sorta better. I guess Phorshadow had better wordplay.

Both were rather even, both had nothing that won it, but stretched wordplay is never good and Phorshadow's flowed better and even with bad metaphors, it was worded better than pretty much any Beyond couplet.

Vote. Phorshadow

[sycknin thaught]

i have this phorshadow 3 and beyond 2

[Byrdie]

Originally Posted by Beyond

Got a big ego, but your Pride? Ceased in secs, mayne.
Legend ‘Cut it off, to make you look like a Bitch’..
…… now you don’t even need a sex change!
This was ok wasnt that big of a hit....i'll give u 1 punch for it
Get ready for ‘a Tombstone’, you aint seeing the win in the distance.
Cuz ‘RIP is going to be your future’..
And I don’t mean Hamilton and the Pistons!
Good but bad...good becuz u got a nice flip on it...bad becuz its played i'll give u 1 punch 4 it
No one pays you mind, you’re not the badder guy.
When you drop, it’ll be lack of publicity…way no one’ll AdvertEyes!
ok nothing special 1 more punch
They won’t ‘Honor u with a Title’, I suggest u just try keepin a gal dude.
Because we all know A Phor Dub’ll…only Cheapen the Value. (affordable)
Good one really feelin it .... i'll give u 2 punches
I’m ‘Here to Remind you of your Place with Writtens’ ..
So winnin’ this, bastard?
…… Nah, simply put - ‘this Bookmarks the end of your Chapter!’
Closer coulda been hella better 1 punch
over.

6

the kids the new champ..avoid a battle? ull never see me run
but after 2 voters, you'll 'See 0-2(co2)' like firring a Bee Bee gun!
This was blah...nothing special....its worth 1 punch
u talk low, so the machette'll put ya head beside ya sneakers
then provide facts that ya verses are 'classless' like retired teachers!
HAHAHA i likes but wasnt hittin hard just humor to me 1 more punch
i darkened ya eyes with the first one..so its no wonder why u failin to see
that i'll put holes in ur head, make sure u 'know the drill' like daily routines!
Like aeo this was/is the best line.....this to me is worth 2 punches
we all know u blow at text..shit..thats why your scared to show ya neck
battling me was a 'Grave mistake'..considering thats where your goin next!
Filler at most to me....nothing..1 punch
im the hottest there is...not even the champ is toppin the kid...
so u beating me must be nothing...cause thats what u claim impossible is!
Nice nice nice.....gettin personal huh?......well since its a personal and it hit hard to me i'll bless it wit 2 punches

7

My vote goes to Phor becuz he came harder to me.....
while beyond came hard...but most of his stuff was jabs he really didnt have that moment where he just merked phor while phor he would start to merk em but then let up and so thats my vote.....