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Old 11-17-2007, 10:34 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Necessity
Was never a part of this.
The conflict of conception
infects my apathy with vibrant threats.
Its nothing short of everything
that to me
You mean the world-
Reckless and insecure.
Your seduction is awake in a song.
Sentient convulsions hit me like confetti
When I recite the words you spoke to me.
They can call it avarice unrivaled
I’ll just name it the genuflect unfound,
With my hands
I’ll build myself up
ingrained with claymores and nightmares-
I’ll be sure to let them know you were here.
Cellophane nirvana dawned on me
Every time I looked someone in the eyes.
I had to teach myself
what it means to be a man
so I don’t have the luxury of believing in god.
When shit gets tough I speak in bohemian tongues
Placing accents on revelations
And similes.
I live in a place where the tears collect
But never fall below expectations.
I am part of a dying breed.
And I don’t say this for sympathy
I say it as loud as a warning shot because you should save yourself the trouble
Of finding something that will feel secure inside of me;
Chances are, it’s a lifetime facade.
Inspired by a search of what it means to let go.
At this moment
I feel like I’ve given so much
In a humble attempt to make you smile without limits
And I’d be lying if I said that I don’t care
I do
It’s just that when you’re truly happy
I’ll have no reason to hold on.
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Old 11-19-2007, 12:51 PM   #2 (permalink)
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good to see you're back around... will feed when i get home offa work....
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Old 11-20-2007, 04:18 PM   #3 (permalink)
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you def have the voice down... and the textual presence...
you have it...

"Inspired by a search of what it means to let go.
At this moment
I feel like I’ve given so much"

the transition that takes place here... needs to be a lil smoother.... from a full voice that exudes hurt.... to a voice that is belittled and hurt by love.... experiment with it... but def keep doing you.... stay up
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Old 12-18-2007, 06:44 PM   #4 (permalink)
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It Was Cool.....I Like The Topic And What You Put Into The Verse.....Stay Up
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Old 01-31-2008, 10:15 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Nice. Its kind of like a Aseop Rock/ Andre 3000/ Sage Francis edge to it...

I enjoyed listening and reading through the peice...

"I live in a place where the tears collect
But never fall below expectations.
I am part of a dying breed.
And I don’t say this for sympathy
I say it as loud as a warning shot because you should save yourself the trouble
Of finding something that will feel secure inside of me"

That is fantastic.

Keep speaking.
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Old 03-06-2008, 08:17 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Man, That shit grabbed me and demanded that I listen!...That was sick yo. Definitely feeling the imagery, and use of vocab throughout the verse.

Keep it up
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Old 04-17-2008, 08:29 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Lovin' it I can feel the emotion in this one. Very good.
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Old 04-22-2008, 02:05 PM   #8 (permalink)
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i def heard a bit of aesop in there, for some reason i though the word claymores was out of place, very good none the less
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Old 06-25-2008, 09:06 AM   #9 (permalink)
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That was good man, keep it up
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Old 07-14-2008, 06:31 PM   #10 (permalink)
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Amazing, I envy those with this type of mindset.
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