Topical2: ((Power)) vs. Bingo

[Plot]

10-12 bars
Due Thursday
Please check & Pm your opponent
topic: 187 murder

[S.Caugh]

check just let me know what the topic is

[Kill POWER]

check... someone pm me when the topic is up..

[S.Caugh]

the topic is murder murder?

[Kill POWER]

yes... a topic im good at... good luck

[Plot]

I was thinking like a murder scene, like police tape & chalk lines...

[S.Caugh]

oh ok thats bet good looks on clearing that up plot

[Kill POWER]

well i couldnt think of 10 bars of caution tape and chalk lines...so i did this...11 bars...bingo no beef if you drop 12..





arrived on the scene at 12:34 it is now quarter too
kneel down infront of the body, "who you piss of dude?"
he was took out executiioner style 2 shots to the back of the head
mad pictures of famiy and friends stacked on the ledge
i hit the switch then pull out the flashlight
wishing i could chill with my family like i did last night.
the way the blood splatters sit seems a little fishy
like it was a red cloud thined out and hit the floor misty
putting my fingers in the wounds to see what angle the bullets went in
enjoying the fact that the body is not yet rot scented
shaky pulling out envolopes like im the quilty
tweazing the hairs from the carpet thats already filthy
gotta sit down my hearts racing for the lap 500
looking around i need to get this room dusted
opening the breifcase and pulling out the jar a brush
running around the room checking for finger prints in a rush
using a certain type of material picking them up
pulling out flashlights having the lightswitch shut
looking around making sure i got everything and more
making sure eveythings the way it was before i stepped in the door
cleaning off the gun almost to the point its clear
"i better fucking bounce before the cops get here"

*klinx*

[S.Caugh]

I'll match the 10


I arrived at the sceen,I seen somethen i could never dream
2 parents 4 kids with whole life's that they'll never see
The deputys, chalked the bodys atleast 1's they were able 2
The parents were on the ground right in the dinning table room
the kids hung from ceilings except the 2 sufacated
a note attatached to the fredge,"Im not 1 of the best serial killers,well i am but the greatest"
Check for Prints on this Take it back to the lab
There prolly won't be 1,but atleast we must give it a lucky stab
Hopefully we get somethen back and after we can run with that
Wait i got somethen the killer left his fucking mask,"How Dumb Was That"
Run That Back, See if we can find some hair folicols
"Sir the mothers been raped and the father looks fondeld to
Canvas the area see if there was any witnesses
we already did it sir ether everybodys blind or this fuckn neighborhood could honestly give a shit
Just great,Now all we got is the evadence
and if that don't pan out then all we seen today has no relavance
who could do this mercyless shooting "its prolly somebody close or better yet a relitive"
Nobody that knew these kids could do this shit so don't test my intellegance
Before we leave the scene i think a moment of silice for this violance or theres atleast a pause in order
I'll get the breafing back at the precict-This is yours truely Lenny Brisco from the hit show Law and Order

[Kill POWER]

i dropped 11 but ok...

[S.Caugh]

oh i must have read it wrong but its all good

[country boy]

power

the way the blood splatters sit seems a little fishy
like it was a red cloud thined out and hit the floor misty
putting my fingers in the wounds to see what angle the bullets went in
enjoying the fact that the body is not yet rot scented
THYS WAS ALRIGHT, i really liked that first bar

vs BiNgO

Run That Back, See if we can find some hair folicols
"Sir the mothers been raped and the father looks fondeld to
thys made me laugh

overall vote goes to power,reason, his verse just came out better, return the fav. in PHARM vs spookes plz

[S.Caugh]

saykridd don't waste your vote i see you reading it and anybody else in the 6 points don't waste your votes.Thanx

[Noggah]

this shit was really close, n i was digging both styles, so this gonne be a tough one to break down...

Power - came at it from a pretty unique perspective, imagery was sick, u had me at the scene

the way the blood splatters sit seems a little fishy
like it was a red cloud thined out and hit the floor misty

shaky pulling out envolopes like im the quilty
tweazing the hairs from the carpet thats already filthy

also i could picture the urgency of dusting for fingerprints n whatnot... then you threw in a pretty good twist at the end, cause for most of the beginning, i thought u were a cop, so i like when there are little tricks like that... one or two lines seemed a little quirky with wording, but aside from that, overall a pretty good topical verse... good imagery, rhyme scheme was pretty nice too, and the twist at the end got me...



Bingo - you also had a pretty good verse...ya imagery was pretty much just as nasty as powers, and u really got into the mind of a cop


Check for Prints on this Take it back to the lab
There prolly won't be 1,but atleast we must give it a lucky stab

Run That Back, See if we can find some hair folicols

Canvas the area see if there was any witnesses
we already did it sir ether everybodys blind or this fuckn neighborhood could honestly give a shit
^^this one just made me laugh so i figured id put it in here....


i was kinda expecting a mention of one of the crime scene shows, n u didnt really have a twist or anything, honestly, when u wrote this:


who could do this mercyless shooting "its prolly somebody close or better yet a relitive"
Nobody that knew these kids could do this shit so don't test my intellegance


i thought u were gonna have whoever said that be a crooked cop and the murderer... your wording was a little off in a couple places, and i think that took away from your verse a little...and the uneven bars were throwin me off a little bit for the whole rhyme scheme...


overall - shit was pretty close, but when it came down to it, i think power got this one...

V - power

[spookes]

Iight Power Lets See , , ,


arrived on the scene at 12:34 it is now quarter too
kneel down infront of the body, "who you piss of dude?"

Aiight

he was took out executiioner style 2 shots to the back of the head
mad pictures of famiy and friends stacked on the ledge
i hit the switch then pull out the flashlight
wishing i could chill with my family like i did last night.
the way the blood splatters sit seems a little fishy
like it was a red cloud thined out and hit the floor misty
putting my fingers in the wounds to see what angle the bullets went in
enjoying the fact that the body is not yet rot scented

I liked this man, , ,

shaky pulling out envolopes like im the quilty
tweazing the hairs from the carpet thats already filthy
gotta sit down my hearts racing for the lap 500
looking around i need to get this room dusted
opening the breifcase and pulling out the jar a brush
running around the room checking for finger prints in a rush
using a certain type of material picking them up
pulling out flashlights having the lightswitch shut

nice punches bud,

looking around making sure i got everything and more
making sure eveythings the way it was before i stepped in the door
cleaning off the gun almost to the point its clear
"i better fucking bounce before the cops get here"

Iight Man I liked the verse as a whole and the topic was a brilliant one, i have enjoyed reading ur verse, and looking through, nice punches in there too, gdgd man . . . . .

iight then bingo , , ,

I arrived at the sceen,I seen somethen i could never dream
2 parents 4 kids with whole life's that they'll never see

Liking the openin man, , ,

The deputys, chalked the bodys atleast 1's they were able 2
The parents were on the ground right in the dinning table room

liking but could of been harder, , ,

the kids hung from ceilings except the 2 sufacated
a note attatached to the fredge,"Im not 1 of the best serial killers,well i am but the greatest"
Check for Prints on this Take it back to the lab
There prolly won't be 1,but atleast we must give it a lucky stab
Hopefully we get somethen back and after we can run with that
Wait i got somethen the killer left his fucking mask,"How Dumb Was That"

Yeh Liking this man , feelin it

Run That Back, See if we can find some hair folicols
"Sir the mothers been raped and the father looks fondeld to
Canvas the area see if there was any witnesses
we already did it sir ether everybodys blind or this fuckn neighborhood could honestly give a shit

Shits gettin better , keepin up the punches and the flow is str8

Just great,Now all we got is the evadence
and if that don't pan out then all we seen today has no relavance
who could do this mercyless shooting "its prolly somebody close or better yet a relitive"
Nobody that knew these kids could do this shit so don't test my intellegance

Str8 man

Before we leave the scene i think a moment of silice for this violance or theres atleast a pause in order
I'll get the breafing back at the precict-This is yours truely Lenny Brisco from the hit show Law and Order

All in all i liked this verse, the flow was off the scales, and in all fairness it was a better read for me ,

V / Bingo