Topical Pembroke(1-0) vs Dave E.(1-0)

[Con]

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Topic: Propaganda against China

[DaVe E BuRnOuT]

Check In....

[Pembroke]

Spanish accent: Prepare to diiieeeee..

[DaVe E BuRnOuT]

Fuck Propaganda Against china, They Need To Worrie About population
CoMMin To AMerica Tax Free, To Take Are Job's, n can't Even Have A conversation
i understand Ina land Filled Wid CoMMuNisT,But Don't These people Got neCommonsense
Obviously it isn't seemn to bother Them,Cas On Every Corner What U See is A Zemin Monument
Like Seriously Praganda?They be heathens Theaven, gamblens there way of dreamen..If They Didn't they'd Prolly Have It All
Like is it a conveniounse? or there way of breathing?, but what does it take to make a genious?EATN CATS AND DOGS
Or Mabe "Thats" Just Propagana agaist them,u know.. eatn cats n Dogs...
Shit Last i heard they Have More Then 1 Kid they BET them Or it gets Sold Ina catalog
Is It all Propaganda,Myth's or the truth?We KNow the roots of The Words Crack** nigg**,n Jew,
all asians are considerd chinese or japanese i understand the chink shit but what the fuck isa Gooke
In China They Only Got Cops tryn To Find ya If U ina peacefull Meditation, thats how much hatred all of these people have conjugated
they at War Wid Peace,N Its Like A Secret Operation,But Peace Don't Fight,So They Beat There minds, Make them Work for life To see through there Thoughts n change them
Fuck Self Improvement... In China they'ed rather have laborcamp's as health solutions
they don't burn gas they buRn unwanted babys n Call It There Way to Help pollution..
Propaganda?Ya mabe on a Painted Portrait but nowadays China plays a part of Satan's fortris
pleged wid aids they should tourch it, how the fuck do they have rights to fame and fortune when they gave up there rights since trades were foreign
Shit Now We got Bush Even Fuckn wid there dictatoreal government But Bush Is A Moron You Should KNow
Propaganda?yeah mabe Just By Slander But fuck That They Put are country In Debt Wid Pokemon n Yugi Oh.............

[Pembroke]

香
港
特
别
行
政
Ahh..
China's population: 1,290,000,000 and climbing of course
The land of nine dimensions, communism a dominant force
Kids lucky to have a pot to piss in during the calm of a storm
Take shelter in fields of orchards to hide from the bondage of war
Man made achipilagos, Mr. Miaggi died for the cause
Rain on the stepping stones, when hunger goes from inch deep, to 6 feet
Little Chinese girl, black ink dripping down her left cheek
Foreign influence, impetent, the effect is instant persuasion
To this yellow skinned, narrow-minded, narrow eyed civilization..
Slaughter the panda bears, make fur coats, taste the defiance
Listen to nature in silence, billboards with the faces of tyrants
Pitchfork rebellions set fire to the ricefields, I'm shruggin' my shoulders
Citizens smuggling soldiers, turn a blind eye to the government posters
Parties of men are arguing over power, penis size, and Avian flu..
Wait for the moon, everythings made in China, from my shades to my shoes
Steam from the tea rises above the midnight air,
Sew the Beijing dragon festival beads, your missing all the action
Kamikaze captains using magnetic compasses to navigate the treachorous seas
Propaganda written in the blood of our ancestors, we're living a sin
Silk kimonos drift with the wind, oh, Pembroke, he did it again
Noodle soup by patterns of forest leaves and hardwood
The cure to all of that is: Add a little soy sauce and it's all good...


In the republic of China.

[Con]

dave has til tomorro to match pem coz it looks like he posted a nosho bar

[DaVe E BuRnOuT]

Chea I Just got Up...see He posted...So i posted the rest of my verse

[Pembroke]

Fuck Self Improvement... In China they'ed rather have laborcamp's as health solutions
^Whoa..

Thnx for the match Dave.. good luck.

[Ruck]

alright..Dave

Standouts:
Fuck Propaganda Against china, They Need To Worrie About population
CoMMin To AMerica Tax Free, To Take Are Job's, n can't Even Have A conversation
true..damn^

Fuck Self Improvement... In China they'ed rather have laborcamp's as health solutions
they don't burn gas they buRn unwanted babys n Call It There Way to Help pollution..
haha nice^

Shit Now We got Bush Even Fuckn wid there dictatoreal government But Bush Is A Moron You Should KNow
Propaganda?yeah mabe Just By Slander But fuck That They Put are country In Debt Wid Pokemon n Yugi Oh.............
that was ill^^

Pembroke:

Standouts:
Foreign influence, impetent, the effect is instant persuasion
To this yellow skinned, narrow-minded, narrow eyed civilization..
nice^

Pitchfork rebellions set fire to the ricefields, I'm shruggin' my shoulders
Citizens smuggling soldiers, turn a blind eye to the government posters
nice nice^^

Noodle soup by patterns of forest leaves and hardwood
The cure to all of that is: Add a little soy sauce and it's all good...
hahaha best bar of battle^^

Reason: both came real sick..i think pem has more WOW bars but dave had a lot better consistancy..so therefore

vote: Dave.E

yep.

[Mistuh Grippz]

I think Pems scheme kinda killed it for me. It was like i had to reread previous bars to catch up to the rhyme scheme. Both had good shit they talked about, Pem prolly had more facts in his shit but i think Dave was stronger with his opinion based verse.

jeah thats how i seen it. vote - lil D.E.B.'ie ;]~

[Vick Slate]

Fuck Propaganda Against china, They Need To Worrie About population
CoMMin To AMerica Tax Free, To Take Are Job's, n can't Even Have A conversation
i understand Ina land Filled Wid CoMMuNisT,But Don't These people Got neCommonsense
Obviously it isn't seemn to bother Them,Cas On Every Corner What U See is A Zemin Monument
Like Seriously Praganda?They be heathens Theaven, gamblens there way of dreamen..If They Didn't they'd Prolly Have It All
Like is it a conveniounse? or there way of breathing?, but what does it take to make a genious?EATN CATS AND DOGS
...muauahha word


Or Mabe "Thats" Just Propagana agaist them,u know.. eatn cats n Dogs...
Shit Last i heard they Have More Then 1 Kid they BET them Or it gets Sold Ina catalog
Is It all Propaganda,Myth's or the truth?We KNow the roots of The Words Crack** nigg**,n Jew,
all asians are considerd chinese or japanese i understand the chink shit but what the fuck isa Gooke
...hahha

In China They Only Got Cops tryn To Find ya If U ina peacefull Meditation, thats how much hatred all of these people have conjugated
they at War Wid Peace,N Its Like A Secret Operation,But Peace Don't Fight,So They Beat There minds, Make them Work for life To see through there Thoughts n change them
Fuck Self Improvement... In China they'ed rather have laborcamp's as health solutions
they don't burn gas they buRn unwanted babys n Call It There Way to Help pollution..
..dope

Propaganda?Ya mabe on a Painted Portrait but nowadays China plays a part of Satan's fortris
pleged wid aids they should tourch it, how the fuck do they have rights to fame and fortune when they gave up there rights since trades were foreign
Shit Now We got Bush Even Fuckn wid there dictatoreal government But Bush Is A Moron You Should KNow
Propaganda?yeah mabe Just By Slander But fuck That They Put are country In Debt Wid Pokemon n Yugi Oh.............
....lmao dope



Ahh..
China's population: 1,290,000,000 and climbing of course
The land of nine dimensions, communism a dominant force
Kids lucky to have a pot to piss in during the calm of a storm
Take shelter in fields of orchards to hide from the bondage of war
Man made achipilagos, Mr. Miaggi died for the cause
Rain on the stepping stones, when hunger goes from inch deep, to 6 feet
Little Chinese girl, black ink dripping down her left cheek
Foreign influence, impetent, the effect is instant persuasion
To this yellow skinned, narrow-minded, narrow eyed civilization..
Slaughter the panda bears, make fur coats, taste the defiance
...sick

Listen to nature in silence, billboards with the faces of tyrants
Pitchfork rebellions set fire to the ricefields, I'm shruggin' my shoulders
Citizens smuggling soldiers, turn a blind eye to the government posters
Parties of men are arguing over power, penis size, and Avian flu..
Wait for the moon, everythings made in China, from my shades to my shoes
Steam from the tea rises above the midnight air,
Sew the Beijing dragon festival beads, your missing all the action
Kamikaze captains using magnetic compasses to navigate the treachorous seas
Propaganda written in the blood of our ancestors, we're living a sin
Silk kimonos drift with the wind, oh, Pembroke, he did it again
Noodle soup by patterns of forest leaves and hardwood
The cure to all of that is: Add a little soy sauce and it's all good...
....haha ight

I'ma hafta vote dave..lil more entertainment both came correct tho

[DaVe E BuRnOuT]

good shit Pem...This Woulda Been A Dope Open Mic collab...Props....

[Pembroke]

Eh, doesn't seem like anyone really understood my verse.. the scheme works, you just have to catch it or the verse is ruined.

Hold on now - I want Fluent to vote.

[Fluent]

Dave: No offense but dude, PROOFREAD! Take are jobs? conveniounse? dictatoreal? The flow was hurt because I had to go back and read a bunch of your lines twice to decipher them. I think that, as a topical writer, you want to come off as intelligent and poor grammar hurt that and couple that with a weak rhyme scheme (look at the ender, the bar is REALLY long and without inner rhyming and a real basic multi at the end and that's fine in a text battle because flow isn't that important but it is for topicals to me) and it hurts the enjoyment factor.The whole you'd name a stereotype that can be considered propoganda and follow it up with a reason why they deserve to be stereotyped was good but it seemed kind of hard to get your own opinions like you don't really think they mostly burned the unwanted babies, do you? Obviously, I give you the benefit of the doubt but the style left questions unanswered. When I first read this, I thought it blew but after looking through it a few times, this was pretty nice really. This is probably the first thing I've read of yours really but I just liked Pembroke's approach a little more in the end. The ender was a really bad way to end it off because Pokemon and Yu Gi Oh are from Japan, not China. If you did know that, you shouldn't have ended with propoganda to close it out. I would've ended with an actual fact for why they deserve to be stereotyped by us. To get technical, Pembroke's flow and rhyme scheme was also better to me.

Pembroke: This verse flowed better than your last topical. I liked the direction it took, basically communism has left China in such a shitty state and a girl, basically viewed as unfortunate for her parents and likely disowned, rebels against a country that seems to hate her just because she wasn't born with a penis. You might as well slaughter distinct aspects of your heritage if your heritage has turned against you, basically been stabbed in the back. Others are rebelling against the communist tyrant leader that will address everything except what's dead in their face: their people live like shit. The ignorant people only recognize the colorful and proud parts of their culture (mr miagge ie karate or the dragon festivals) and the very worst (kamikaze and chinese/japanese, same shit right?) and when they first think of china, they'll think about some ninja's eating noodles or rice in some secluded forest practicing martial arts or something like that instead of the majority of people who don't have running water and are forced to abandon their female children. That's the main propoganda of china: not understanding the reality of most chinese citizens under communist oppression, people thinking how bad can it really be? Truth is, it's pretty fucking shit.

Vote: Pembroke

[DaVe E BuRnOuT]

no offence...idk if its hard feelns voten for me voten crit..But this shit is OVA.....3-0..So Pem..Take My Belt off..Thanks