Topical Belt: ((xDAMx)) vs. Vulgar

[Plot]

10-20 bars due on Wednesday
Please check, match & vote
Topic: The Monolith

[DAM]

hmmmmmmmm

g/l

[Vulgar]

Have fun.

[DAM]

jus a heads up...I wont be home til late tonight, prolly 11:30ish, but I will post tonight..It may be a little late but I will post tonight definetely. Hopefully you can post as well, lata

Well, im pretty much done, got distracted by the playoffs so I wasn't completely focused...But i wanna make sure you showing or even postin tonight, so let me know whats good

[DAM]

^^Post tonight. I Don't wanna win like that.

I wont be home until late tonight because im going to a show, may perform. But once I get home I will post my verse, lata

[Vulgar]

"Mark your constellation grids, calendars, emancipation scorecards
We're approaching the North Star"



The brotherhood, the mothership.
The nebulus cumulus clouds stretching over the land of the coveted
On tornado watch, the guard tower, in it's galaxical central silence
Providing the living populations with a form of monumental guidance
Above the span of war zone it waits, in morning haze
By the EARTHDOME where the fallen machines once swarmed the gate
Biomega hovercraft winged being, gaseous air quality as it hovers past
The soldier's observe as the dust cloud arises from the Hubble crash
An assailant's peak is nothing, that's why we reach for something
All survivors bear witness to the D-Day beach construction
Still standing amongst the cycle of street corruption
The array of innovaters seeking purification from the sins of labor
When's the last time the cyber seed grew from it's own inner layer?
When the apocalyptic date becomes reality and it's the end of the place that you proclaim home
Earth in it's foam based dome, where the cold vein flows
Dead mangrove forests and mango groves -
You should have clinged to those
We're all drawn to the tower -
Drawn to it's power, drones at the wake
The nuclei ashen leaf that wilters from the core of the flower
Virus seagulls soar over the dome at the gates, the clones awakened
To be alone in this state, to follow the transient branches
Remember the gloom, the undead breadth of the moon
The system of crater facades connected by membranous tubes
Swords of virtuoso glowing as the beings enter the DATA CORE Element Dune
When you've been to the jungle, seen the rainforest
Reached the forsaken border and breached the main quarters
Recognized the forces, of the empire, of the monolith.
Winter front arrival into the outland's coast channel
The unknowing morning light shed unto the Titan oak panels
Cubism is dead to the signaling leviathan of sunset
Cubism is undead, released into the magnetite environment with one breath
The elemental tower location with the chosen trisodium carbonate
Learn that Ppower is nothing to the behemoths of Cyclopean origin
The time of humanity's beast marks the end of the artist
One who leads the sentries of carcass onto the battlefield
Eagle fighter units fire unto the sentinel starships
Breathe through the mist and see through the prism
Move towards the truth and exist in peace through a vision
THE MONOLITH

[DAM]

Sorry man...I just got home, im fucking tired as hell, I had to write like 3 more lines & this shyt was severly rushed, so yeah, im not even gonna spell check or read it thru, im going to bed, good luck, should be good,

“I've learned that everyone wants to live on top of the mountain, but all the happiness and growth occurs while you're climbing it.”


The civil war had concluded for these 6 confederate leaders
That banded to halt many groups & put an end to their freedom..
A campaign of assassination & murder, it had plagued an era
Their fiery flames that had ignited the skies in this reign of terror..
A meeting in nashville to propose leaders reporting to districts
The evil intentions were enough to make their corneas glisten..
It was a fateful december, those who were made into ember
Burned alive & were murdered by every raid of the members..
There were chaotic, unorganized, the future they longed to see
This multitude of white farmers, sadists & common thieves..
The courts put the burden to eliminate them in federal hands
The force act which was created by our own President Grant..
Then that one terrible massacre against the white leagues & knights..
After the sun had set, 280 were left dead on that easter night..
Decades of decline until mass media saw a resurgence awaited
Which sparked the catalyst of glorifying them in the birth of a nation..
The country could feel the tension & would tend to be so angst
Especially with the lynching of jewish factory manager Leo Frank..
Their political influence affected elections, more then a plenty
It caused backlash as they dropped the dime..nickel, quarter & penny..
They engaged in numerous rallies & it was plain, simple & clear
That the burning of the cross was made their prime symbol of fear..
Warning the minorities who were targeted in the damned affair
That they were kneeling in church, cuz they don't stand a prayer..
They knew they would face another decline & diminish in numbers
& needed more then a fall guy..but also spring, winter & summer..
Though they felt the voice of their reason was nothing less then the truth
As they clothed in full white, which matched their supremacy view..
Many were lynched, hung & killed by grand master to lower in ranks
& some couldn't take the sight of seeing a thousand ropes on a branch..
But that's what they stood for & the world knew their fury was certain
There were trials & protests as the people gave the jury the burden..
Wondering why they felt so highly of their movement's agenda
It can be traced back to the beginning, the roots of the members..
The day of it's second creation attended by the original renegades
Which has even spread into the atmosphere of our present day..
It was 1915, the date where the new wave had started the ride
Funding the confederate memorial that was carved on the side..
I finally figured out why they felt so high, never see their egos grounded
As WJS took his hood off, & began the KKK on stone mountain..........


*A side note: Stone Mountain is one of the 3 largest Monoliths in the world & the KKK was founded on it.........

[Don Dotta]

Well both had some pretty good verse's here,i like both style's and how both of you's have your different approaches on topics..ne ways..

Vulgar:Ya verse was pretty good,the only thing i wasnt feelin is that at times ya flow was off,not too many of ya lines was rhymin which made it harder for me to enjoy ya verse.I honestly spent more time going back to each bar trying to rhyme them but some of them were just completly off..ya opening lines were the most enjoyable for me ta read..

Originally Posted by Vulgar

The brotherhood, the mothership.
The nebulus cumulus clouds stretching over the land of the coveted
On tornado watch, the guard tower, in it's galaxical central silence
Providing the living populations with a form of monumental guidance
Above the span of war zone it waits, in morning haze
By the EARTHDOME where the fallen machines once swarmed the gate
Biomega hovercraft winged being, gaseous air quality as it hovers past
The soldier's observe as the dust cloud arises from the Hubble crash

Shit was ill right here^^..i was feelin these line's alot..

Dam:Ya verse had some pretty ill lines as well,i was feelin how ya appraoched the topic..flow was on point throughout most of ya verse.

Originally Posted by xDAMx

They engaged in numerous rallies & it was plain, simple & clear
That the burning of the cross was made their prime symbol of fear..
Warning the minorities who were targeted in the damned affair
That they were kneeling in church, cuz they don't stand a prayer..

I was feelin the kneelin in church line,shit was pretty ill..

Well overall this topical was pretty dope and honestly it was pretty close in my eye's,both came wit some good approach's on the topic,flows were both on besides a couple spots in v's verse n both had some pretty ill flips of lyrics in there verse..imma have to say that Dam took this one,i felt his verse was more enjoyable ta read and his flow was more consistan,like i said some of v's verse was off rhyme wise no disrespect,still came good..good verse's from both besides that
i was just feelin dams shit a bit more..keep battlin my dudes and mad props for even showin..

Vote/xDamx

[Likwid Sin]

On Topic - Tie...
Flow - xDamx..
Multies - xDamx...
Vocabulary - Vulgar...
Originality - Tie...
Depth - Vulgar...
Imagery - Vulgar...

Thoughts To Both...

Vulgar - I Like The Way You Went About The Topic, Concept Was Creative And Rather Interesting.. Nothing Really Seemed Out Of Place, The Story Set Up Was Fairly Clear, Only Problem Was The Flow Was A Bit Jumpy To Me While Reading At Parts.. The Depth You Went Into Wasn't What I Was Expecting After Viewing The Topic, Which Made Me Enjoy The Piece Even More.. With The Help Of Some Imagery You Used I Was Somewhat Drawn To It In A Sense You Could Say.. For Instance...

"An assailant's peak is nothing, that's why we reach for something
All survivors bear witness to the D-Day beach construction"

I Liked This Here, The Wording Was Nice And Creative, Easily Could Have Been Awful But You Made It A Good View On Things..

xDamx - Your Concept Was Creative As Well, The Flow Was Pretty Smooth But I Just Didn't See The Effort In The Metaphors.. Granted The Imagery Was There But I Wanted More Out Of The Lines, May Just Be My Outlook On It.. But None The Less I Liked Your Take On The Topic.. Refreshing From The Drops As Of Late In Most Places.. But, I Just Feel As If You Could've Placed In More Detailed Descriptions, Or Even Have Had A Dialogue Feel To A Verse Without It Being Dialogue You Know?.. But This Part I Was Feeling...

"The courts put the burden to eliminate them in federal hands
The force act which was created by our own President Grant.."

This Was A Good Detail Towards Your Story, Few More For 'Guidlines' You Could Say And It Would've Been Way More Enjoyable To Follow..

Overall - Good Battle, Topic Made For Some Good Thoughts, Props To Whoever Picked It.. Both Writers Were Talented, And This Wasn't A Clear Decision On A Winner, Both Had Their Shining Points But I Feel Vulgars Depth And Imagery Were Key Turning Points In This...

Vote - Vulgar...

[DAM]

=/ 1-1

I'd say the next vote should seal the deal so we can get next week started.

[Vulgar]

Thanks for voting.

[7th Crescent]

well after i read these verse multiple time i had to come to a conclusion and believe this was not an easy task...

Vulgar:

your opening was on fire, your imagery was superior..very fresh content and details that makes topical battles so appealing..on the other side tho some of the verse was choppy on flow and that definitely took away from an other wise ill verse...


Dam..
another ill verse my dude..you have a great sense of story telling...you content is always top notch..the flow was on point as well..all this together creates a well rounded verse


well all in all this was a very tight battle..verry very close...at the end the only thing to decide between the two for was the flow factor...had this been just a story telling contest my vote would be for Vulgar as far the detail goes but due to the fact this battle flow is a big part of this to me..so my vote goes to the champ..

Vote=Dam