Top ((Fluent)) 2-0 Vs Pure 2-0

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TOPIC: 24 HOURS TO LIVE

[PURE]

check, good luck, forgive me if i cant drop, im busy for most of the part today, tomorrow is my parents anniversary then sunday im at my cuz's, monday il be working at my mum's surgery and doing other stuff socially later but il try my best to get it up

[Fluent]

That's reassuring.

[PURE]

i found some time today, so ive done something and im dropping it in case i dont have time tomorrow and end up no-showing, good luck again man.

I'd impregnate some girls and smoke a cigar
Giving my seamen its last latitude before I depart
Life's a bitch so I figure I'd pay n' fuck for hours
As her clit implodes witness collapsing towers
Bust in a continuous shower without a tap
Then I'd rap and merge gaps with thick tree sap
Of course, I'd take revenge on things of the past
Leave the bitch that left me for a dildo in a body cast
For what it's worth, I'd phone God and have a chat
Making the cords refract, sneezing out my soul
Eat it in a tortilla roll then smoke weed above coal
Without a doubt, I'd pay a last visit to my crowd
Get donations; use it on alcohol before passing out
Call me selfish, I prefer to say I'm self-indulgent
For sake of pride, save my penis from being helpless
Buy a time machine and take a trip to medieval Italy
Smash Angelo’s penis, hit Landini* with a bitter beat
Go further back, bang Mary and pimp smack Jesus
Cover China in my feces and then Russia in leeches
God forbid the Sandmen come for us with a warrant
I'd zap with a cum gun n run, then get on the comp
Murk 'em with a Vanilla Ice song, courtesy of Bit Torrent
Lastly, I'd say goodbye to all things close to my heart
And as my spirit farts...I start leaping for the clouds

*Landini is a medieval Italien composer

[Fluent]

With 24 hours to live, I'd clutch one thin twelve gauge
Go on a killing spree in a rough drunken rampage
Never make an Atheist exempt from man's consequences
I could never come to your damn God's weak senses
The followers and I try to obey all the natural laws
But gimme a bible and I'll expose its factual flaws
Man's rules had caused me to never attack cattle
To avoid being near Cannibals shackled by manacles
Sheep oughta know the savior never got past danger
But I'll clear the air and shove them into gas chambers
Embark on 24 exciting hunting sprees
With a firing squad envied by downsizing companies
Maybe I'll take my time on each man of the hour
Torture religious leaders till they hand over power
Or even take the quick route, make heads spill
Free them from the dream world without a red pill
My 1 day quest'll be aided by those bored of living
Able to take one side whereas the Lord's just 'willing'
Unable to stop the Pope from being a sacrificial lamb
Avoidance is still your best tactic little man
Religious movements'll get wrecked by my best decrees
Crash and burn like stoners staying over unexpectedly
I'll go ahead and shout this at the loudest mass
Bitch I'm ready, go ahead and flip the hourglass

[Fluent]

oh, the site's back.

[PURE]

can we get some votes crakka's? my verse is whack...seriously

[Fluent]

.........

[1/2 Wit It]

[Pure]
I'd impregnate some girls and smoke a cigar
Giving my seamen its last latitude before I depart
**I liked this opener...nice wording too..**

Life's a bitch so I figure I'd pay n' fuck for hours
As her clit implodes witness collapsing towers
**Eh..this was alright...**

Bust in a continuous shower without a tap
Then I'd rap and merge gaps with thick tree sap
**Lol..this made me laugh..nice shit..**

Of course, I'd take revenge on things of the past
Leave the bitch that left me for a dildo in a body cast
**Hah..another funny line..**

For what it's worth, I'd phone God and have a chat
Making the cords refract, sneezing out my soul
Eat it in a tortilla roll then smoke weed above coal
**Eh..wasn't feeling this line..seemed like a buncha random shit..**

Without a doubt, I'd pay a last visit to my crowd
Get donations; use it on alcohol before passing out
**This was decent...a bit too simple though..**

Call me selfish, I prefer to say I'm self-indulgent
For sake of pride, save my penis from being helpless
**I don't like the rhyme scheme..**

Buy a time machine and take a trip to medieval Italy
Smash Angelo’s penis, hit Landini* with a bitter beat
**Hah..this one also made me chuckle..**

Go further back, bang Mary and pimp smack Jesus
Cover China in my feces and then Russia in leeches
**Eh..not really feeling this..**

God forbid the Sandmen come for us with a warrant
I'd zap with a cum gun n run, then get on the comp
Murk 'em with a Vanilla Ice song, courtesy of Bit Torrent
**Not feeling the rhyme scheme again..**

Lastly, I'd say goodbye to all things close to my heart
And as my spirit farts...I start leaping for the clouds
**Blah...bad way to close it out..**

[Fluent]
With 24 hours to live, I'd clutch one thin twelve gauge
Go on a killing spree in a rough drunken rampage
**Pretty cool opener..I like the wording..**

Never make an Atheist exempt from man's consequences
I could never come to your damn God's weak senses
**Eh..not feeling this bar..**

The followers and I try to obey all the natural laws
But gimme a bible and I'll expose its factual flaws
**Pretty slick..nice one..**

Man's rules had caused me to never attack cattle
To avoid being near Cannibals shackled by manacles
**Wording is nice..**

Sheep oughta know the savior never got past danger
But I'll clear the air and shove them into gas chambers
**Eh..not really feeling this one either..**

Embark on 24 exciting hunting sprees
With a firing squad envied by downsizing companies
**Lol..this made me laugh for some reason..**

Maybe I'll take my time on each man of the hour
Torture religious leaders till they hand over power
**Nice bar..**

Or even take the quick route, make heads spill
Free them from the dream world without a red pill
**Damn...very nice..**

My 1 day quest'll be aided by those bored of living
Able to take one side whereas the Lord's just 'willing'
**Slick...nice bar..**

Unable to stop the Pope from being a sacrificial lamb
Avoidance is still your best tactic little man
**Eh..not feeling this..**

Religious movements'll get wrecked by my best decrees
Crash and burn like stoners staying over unexpectedly
**Lol..funny shit..nice wording also..**

I'll go ahead and shout this at the loudest mass
Bitch I'm ready, go ahead and flip the hourglass
**Ok closer..**

Overall Vote: Fluent..Just a more enjoyable verse in my opinion...

[Pembroke]

Pure - Didn't start off that bad, the penis/sexual concepts got corny after the 2nd time.. but it kept going and going. Nothing else happened from the middle and on. You've gotten better, but I understand you were pressed for time. Next time make a surprise ending..

God forbid the Sandmen come for us with a warrant
^This is a dope thought. You should consider writing an open mic on it..

Fluent - Everything was solid and pertained to the topic. You've gotten good at these.. rhyming is more in line than usual and I'm seeing nice ideas being brought out more often from you.

"Maybe I'll take my time on each man of the hour
Torture religious leaders till they hand over power
Or even take the quick route, make heads spill
Free them from the dream world without a red pill
My 1 day quest'll be aided by those bored of living
Able to take one side whereas the Lord's just 'willing'
Unable to stop the Pope from being a sacrificial lamb
Avoidance is still your best tactic little man"

Excellent section..

v/ Fluent

Stay up.

[Plot]

Uppin for votes..

[Fluent]

You can drop one..

[Plot]

I really hate voting on topicals but since you requested...
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With 24 hours to live, I'd clutch one thin twelve gauge
Go on a killing spree in a rough drunken rampage
~feel like U forced the rhyme to have the perfect syllable thing..thin?
Never make an Atheist exempt from man's consequences
I could never come to your damn God's weak senses
The followers and I try to obey all the natural laws
But gimme a bible and I'll expose its factual flaws
Man's rules had caused me to never attack cattle
~dont quite see how this fits the topic
To avoid being near Cannibals shackled by manacles
Sheep oughta know the savior never got past danger
But I'll clear the air and shove them into gas chambers
~cool.
Embark on 24 exciting hunting sprees
With a firing squad envied by downsizing companies
~liked this
Maybe I'll take my time on each man of the hour
Torture religious leaders till they hand over power
Or even take the quick route, make heads spill
Free them from the dream world without a red pill
~dope, Matrix/Alice so fresh
My 1 day quest'll be aided by those bored of living
Able to take one side whereas the Lord's just 'willing'
Unable to stop the Pope from being a sacrificial lamb
Avoidance is still your best tactic little man
Religious movements'll get wrecked by my best decrees
Crash and burn like stoners staying over unexpectedly
~nutha nice punch
I'll go ahead and shout this at the loudest mass
Bitch I'm ready, go ahead and flip the hourglass
~cool close making for a tight structure.
So.. Ur like going around killing off all these religions on ya 24hrs. ok.

P
I'd impregnate some girls and smoke a cigar
Giving my seamen its last latitude before I depart
~nice opener even if Semen is a little played
Life's a bitch so I figure I'd pay n' fuck for hours
As her clit implodes witness collapsing towers
Bust in a continuous shower without a tap
Then I'd rap and merge gaps with thick tree sap
~good metas.
Of course, I'd take revenge on things of the past
Leave the bitch that left me for a dildo in a body cast
~good, if a little ego-bruising
For what it's worth, I'd phone God and have a chat
Making the cords refract, sneezing out my soul
~dont like this flow chop ur quite renowned for it tho..
Eat it in a tortilla roll then smoke weed above coal
Without a doubt, I'd pay a last visit to my crowd
Get donations; use it on alcohol before passing out
Call me selfish, I prefer to say I'm self-indulgent
For sake of pride, save my penis from being helpless
~not really feeling this, u'd pass out on ya last 24?
Buy a time machine and take a trip to medieval Italy
Smash Angelo’s penis, hit Landini* with a bitter beat
Go further back, bang Mary and pimp smack Jesus
Cover China in my feces and then Russia in leeches
~good things to do, but a time machine kinda makes the topic irrelevant
God forbid the Sandmen come for us with a warrant
I'd zap with a cum gun n run, then get on the comp
Murk 'em with a Vanilla Ice song, courtesy of Bit Torrent
~this is cool, but the flow chop/3 line bar annoys me again.
Lastly, I'd say goodbye to all things close to my heart
And as my spirit farts...I start leaping for the clouds
~where does cloud rhyme in? ok closer anyway

V-Fluent, I just prefered his flow...

[Fluent]

Cattle can be Sheep, sheep are people that follow others blindly because it's generally accepted, like god's existence in this case. The idea behind the line was why I waited until now, I didn't want to get thrown in jail for life but if I have 24 hours to live, I can do whatever I want and in this case, I can be the anti-christ and kill all the religious people haha.