The Khazak Legion!

[Phonix]

Oil perpetuates the mechanics of modern day and age..consider that if the same oil turned on humanity..do we question modern day..or pray for age to end?

Lets play a game of RISK..and
enter the metallic aura
where hispanic taurus, saw rust decapitate the fleshy pourus
Stalin prototype 7
parading the head of the gorgeous riding bicentennial walrus!
remain cautious as sunlight on silver aggresively draws dust
products of men slaying their creators..HAIL THE RISE OF THE ABORTIONS
backlash of black ash, coating sapian races
quoting favourite places, in backpacks in anthrax
lifes seems a bitch, period..simultaneously labelled the late drag queen
man against machine..half breeds maintained middle ground with fates caffeine
great maximes cutting peasants spleens, their erupting schemes maime ploys
despots depositing attacks through antennas on wooden gameboys
locals hardly vent their disturbance through corrosions in their garden fence
of more justified death than cannonballing catholics to defend the rump parliament
these hollow punching bags gutted, they won scars solemn
homage to the prince of waste management..junkyard golemns
alchemists with axe'es scrimmage, as the infested master the probe
pillaging 3rd world villages..the first two are out..leave a message after the tone
One man stood strong with a blood bong inhaling his ancestors pride
Moustache of innocent sattire covering his molestor side
A Baltic swastica burned into his aging veins on his forehead
King Arthur high fiving dragons as the sapphire gore spread
happy time cannibalism legalises harvest of the poor
the worlds no longer round..grab your slinkys from the floor
communism clawed the chalk board of grown cranium brains
enlightening regiments with evidence of Romanian pain
Pre-emptive strikes..the third reich even deserves light in an eclipse
Lord of the rings..a Kossack Jesus attempts to fight Brittany mist
propoganda pirating the Somme, a patch above the slander
with revolution spreading past aids and catching up with cancer
outside hotel Rwuanda..political presbyterianisms burn at the stake
sustaining iron infra-structure styling the a perm of a quake
Toxic mangnesium! what to do with the cores?
their blood fueled transport...a non-renewable source
courage overwhelmed sense, Captain on the scarlet carpet tried to harvest the conquest
upstepped the test..metals prime invention in the width of a quest
Robocop ripped a slip of his pulse and let it evaporate with his breath
computing "do you treasure your heart? is that why you keep it in a chest?"
violence of natures violins orchaestrating the shy prince
screaming "i'll see you in hell!" with a walking stick..and cerberus for guidance
the Eastern Cromwell convinced he had gods spree in this one
encscrpited the national anthem in his spine, killing him softly his song
as he choked on his blood
ancestors of the Ottomans so misunderstood..remained cloaked in the mood
expectation of television ressurrected the vision of desserts
holding the carbon-zinc massacre which shackled jargon extinct peasants
a savage iron heritage within malice of the necks bruise
left inbred sisters slowly whistling the next tune of the ballad of Neptune
more commandments needed since every fight spoils the bible
Water ethnic-clenses the blood..oil lights for survival
greed is free along with hebrew
RC rode on that night of the long knifes..leaving brick windows see through
so the Jew-bot let out a roar..after charging a leaving fee
False of hopes of happy time began to mount on the sane
if money grew on trees perhaps rainforests would sprout once again
untll then Adams snake dusts the applause..
in the funeral parlour with more rats to see the air
the best tribute available...
Borat the legionaire...." I MAKE LOVE TO YOUR CORPSE!!!! "


Links:

http://www.rapflava.com/forums/a-man...nd-116451.html (A man's best friend)

http://www.rapflava.com/forums/a-lea...wn-117408.html (A League Of Their Own)

[Plot]

refreshing to see that in some places it was reminiscent of the mumbo-jumbo style of 'Dinosaur semen', while in others perfect bars showed a coherent understanding of 'rap'
A few grammaticla mistakes throughout but these can be looked over.
The vocabualry & various excerpts of history & various cultures shows your well-read.
Nice piece overall. It seems to me that your works are evolving into a philiosophical style with nonsenscial sounds-like mulites to illustrate concepts. Perhaps the perfect Phonix piece when we finally see it will abandon the nonsense & all the multie/soundlike will have referential conherence to the lines? Who knows... In the words of Vulgar, keep doing you.

"remain cautious as sunlight on silver aggresively draws dust
products of men slaying their creators..HAIL THE RISE OF THE ABORTIONS"
..thats got a kinda nice doomish nice ring to, abortshuns

"these hollow punching bags gutted, they won scars solemn
homage to the prince of waste management..junkyard golemns"
..thats cool.

happy time cannibalism legalises harvest of the poor
the worlds no longer round..grab your slinkys from the floor
..I enjoyed this one too.
The ability to reference Popular culture is the poets gift to the common man.

Pre-emptive strikes..the third reich even deserves light in an eclipse
Lord of the rings..a Kossack Jesus attempts to fight Brittany mist
..dope. (might have punched better with the Nazi ref.)

outside hotel Rwuanda..political presbyterianisms burn at the stake
sustaining iron infra-structure styling the a perm of a quake
.. Rwandas all war torn, perm of a quake, wow. thats cool, nice visual.

Robocop ripped a slip of his pulse and let it evaporate with his breath
computing "do you treasure your heart? is that why you keep it in a chest?"
..Pretty dope man

greed is free along with hebrew
RC rode on that night of the long knifes..leaving brick windows see through
..Whut? thats crazy

in the funeral parlour with more rats to see the air
the best tribute available...
Borat the legionaire...." I MAKE LOVE TO YOUR CORPSE!!!! "
..funny ending.

[Phonix]

Thanks man

[Vick Slate]

products of men slaying their creators..HAIL THE RISE OF THE ABORTIONS
backlash of black ash, coating sapian races
quoting favourite places, in backpacks in anthrax
lifes seems a bitch, period..simultaneously labelled the late drag queen
man against machine..half breeds maintained middle ground with fates caffeine
...good stuff

alchemists with axe'es scrimmage, as the infested master the probe
pillaging 3rd world villages..the first two are out..leave a message after the tone
....hot..

propoganda pirating the Somme, a patch above the slander
with revolution spreading past aids and catching up with cancer
...liking that too...


glad you kept the flow up to par and had multi's to keep the vocabulary from making it boring!

nice drop phonix ...u get better everytime you write

[Randall T.]

matter fact i'm not gonna quote shit cause i'm in awe with the deep thought put into this rhyme. I'm not sure if it would have flowed that well verbally but it was most def nice on text!

[Chris The Man]

First off....

"backlash of black ash,"

Ingenius..

Your rhyming is gettin better, the multis n vocab is steadily improving.

The wordplay is just plain dope:

"pillaging 3rd world villages..the first two are out..leave a message after the tone

sustaining iron infra-structure styling the a perm of a quake"

Sick man.

Its shit like that which seperates writers from rappers, and you're steady making your claim.

Nice shit.

[Pembroke]

To the top until I get to it!

[Phonix]

I threw in the anthrax reference especially for you.

[Phonix]

*awaits Pem*

[Phonix]

I'm on the outside
I'm looking in..

[Vulgar]

Who would have thought that a one man diplomatic wrecking ball would find itself into your life form. I was never one to joke about things. Kazakh nomads rely on their animals for transportation, clothing, and food. "Humans make joke and laugh." The main characteristic of this open mic - homemade Central Asian ritual song. Agriculture, future, mining, pollution from the periodic table and traditional word selections like "anthrax, pourus, dust, organs, and sea mammals." A reason that members of music websites compare similarities of the living plants Vulgar and Phonix is because the cycle of it. We are here to consume time, and while consuming it, develop the knowledge we need to survive. Humor is a diversion from the real Earthly affairs most of us haven't experienced, and if we did, it still wouldn't matter. Power is limited - water, minerals, and language.

"Lets play a game of RISK..and
enter the metallic aura
where hispanic taurus, saw rust decapitate the fleshy pourus"

^The effect of emission per word produced is too much for the word Tyrannasaurus to follow. If you wish to overload - organize the planetary trunk space.

"remain cautious as sunlight on silver aggresively draws dust
products of men slaying their creators..HAIL THE RISE OF THE ABORTIONS"

^A sun shower can change everything.

"homage to the prince of waste management..junkyard golemns"

^Thanks. It's golems*

"One man stood strong with a blood bong inhaling his ancestors pride
Moustache of innocent sattire covering his molestor side"

^I would change the second line to: Moustache of innocence satire disguising his molestor side.

"Toxic mangnesium! what to do with the cores?
their blood fueled transport...a non-renewable source"

^These are free of emissions, open grassland.

"outside hotel Rwuanda..political presbyterianisms burn at the stake
sustaining iron infra-structure styling the a perm of a quake"

^Grammar errors: Rwanda* and Styling the perm*

"encscrpited the national anthem in his spine, killing him softly his song"
^Enscripted* and Killing him softly, he sung*

"Water ethnic-clenses the blood..oil lights for survival
greed is free along with hebrew
RC rode on that night of the long knifes..leaving brick windows see through"
^Cleanses* Free along with the Hebrews* Knives*

"False of hopes of happy time began to mount on the sane"
^False hope of happy times begin*

"If money grew on trees perhaps rainforests would sprout once again"
^Agreed to the extent. "We can all breathe happier."

You know that I know that you stole this from one of Sacha Cohen's dream journals. There is natural potential. The president waits at the core of the region. Aesop Rock's air supply declares his stance as sulfur oxide and otherworldly particles, impure, smeltering growth. The general has an ecosystem decision on his hands. He can write about humor or war, and you choose the outcome downpour.

Keep doing you

[Vick Slate]

to the top

[Phonix]

Thanks for the feed :)

[Methodikal]

jewber...
i left feed on a previous site, but i doubt you read it. if not it wasnt that detailed...and i would be enlightened to re-read it and give you some much more indepth feed. poetic, yet on point. abstract, yet still very blunt. a very nice balance of elements. lets embark....

the opening quote, caught the interest; and brings the serious notion early. the pic of Borat, was a good add...to make it a semi balanced read of different attitudes in reading this lengthy but well written piece.

then you continue the literary expedition with a good balance.... a ying-yang effect that worked to your benefit. the abstract still connected with a common theme through the whole entire piece that made it that much more interesting to read. excellent content, and it was illio.

Lets play a game of RISK..and
enter the metallic aura
where hispanic taurus, saw rust decapitate the fleshy pourus
Stalin prototype 7
parading the head of the gorgeous riding bicentennial walrus!
^flowed very well...good attention getter.

products of men slaying their creators..HAIL THE RISE OF THE ABORTIONS
^ill..... enough said. greatly worded

One man stood strong with a blood bong inhaling his ancestors pride
Moustache of innocent sattire covering his molestor side
A Baltic swastica burned into his aging veins on his forehead
King Arthur high fiving dragons as the sapphire gore spread
^crazy wording. quite disturbing actually.

if money grew on trees perhaps rainforests would sprout once again
untll then Adams snake dusts the applause..
in the funeral parlour with more rats to see the air
the best tribute available...
Borat the legionaire...." I MAKE LOVE TO YOUR CORPSE!!!! "
^lovely, lovely. excellent ender. how conclusive.

the world is a zombie, yet to realize we're already dead.

life is only a dream for the dead.

`1

ps. if you could return the favor on my poem, "a grievance of a snow angel' in the poetry section of RF, that would be appreciated totally. thx

[Kaeo.Seru]

peep the link in my sig