Stoic vs. Lyrikal

[Kaeo.Seru]

Rules:
10-12 bars
NO- feeding, biting, recycling, dickriding, hateing or FREEPOSTING in battle threads
Check ins due FRIDAY verses due tuseday. Voting ends friday
1st to 7 votes wins 4-0 KO up 4 after 1-1 TKO
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[Stoic]

check.

[kallywood]

Check!!!!!!!!

[kallywood]

Now Rob just let go Never heard the vocals similar to techno
when i put the 9 to sto thats when the best damn tek show(text)
your pencil punchlines leave you stuck with eraser' like maria shriver*
Always see stoic with the belt buckle like a precautious driver
So does it Trouble you if i take this title from right under you
sudden clues that dudes gettin schooled alot but never has the HW
So you lose a battle leave then your right up back and at it
i, had it you cant take the belt from strong'arm like a heroin addict
so step up and tread slow cus your already apart of the living dead
after im done, imma direct this rob' zombie to death like devils rejects

[fire]hold up wait a sec. shit is too hot[/fire]

kal has the illest text you ever laid eyes upon kid sto is teflon
Imma text paddewon? please do you like vader did obi wan
your punches are sleepy and hollow mines leave ya head gone
Face it, only time you use knuckles is playin sonic the hedgehog
I know what force is and you see i use it remorseless be cautious
Only time you could get thorough bread on a track is racehorses
Either its a hobby or a passion but how could this have happen
I mean damn you a old read, beatchasto like uncle toms cabin!
(beacherstowe-author"uncle toms cabin")
So death's ya fixture Add some punches in the mixer
no elixer only time theres flight at the mouth is in ya picture

[Stoic]

Not bad young-one... your getting better.

... but this is a HW tourny ;)

ahem...
ahem...


yea the flow is great, but your punches leave your soul as bait for the choke-hold and fate...
So we might as well dress up "Biblical Legends as Super Heros"... Cuz your gonna find Noah's Cape/ No Escape

But seriously, you had a nice run...

Your style is warped.. and without lies or remorse I'll prove you can't rival my force....
Cuz your "Kid Knees get revealed" so fast, youdda sworn we had photo's of a child in shorts
your quest get's pummeled defenseless, huddles seem endless
Barbie Cues/Barbeques you at arrival. Without "Hasbro Dolls summoning your entrance" (whoa)
the pace is a race of steps that leave you traced to a wasted death... deflate your rep...
like orthodontists working on appearances for a funeral, you "better brace yourself for death"

Not over yet...

I'll bash this fool with tools and tactis of a brute... raps of acid, lead and fuel...
Yea you got some punches, But Nun' hittin me... like catholic school abuse...
My path of destruction is infamous, this reign will go down in history, rippin these quitters...
while Kals been trying to pick up a foot-note so long, he's leavin with a perscription for blisters...
Your brain activity is dismal... and it'll flat line once i shank ya spine...
Cuz i could be a "Psychic dealing with street fighters" still couldn't see a Blanka/Blanker Mind!
I'll scare the artist and tear his armor... one look and he'll get buried farther...
even when it comes to the basics...Kally's got "utter confusion" like rookie dairy farmers
trying to battle a legend with fear? your pen will get sheared... the text vengeance is here
you thought i was standing up for you??? not what i intended, but I'll Def. End your career.

HayMaker
Your face will pause when breathing from my hatred raw and seething...
Destroy your home...and make "Kal-Zone vanish faster" then Italian Food at a weight-watchers meeting.

[Criticize]

So you lose a battle leave then your right up back and at it
i, had it you cant take the belt from strong'arm like a heroin addict
so step up and tread slow cus your already apart of the living dead
after im done, imma direct this rob' zombie to death like devils rejects

Either its a hobby or a passion but how could this have happen
I mean damn you a old read, beatchasto like uncle toms cabin!
_____________________________
So we might as well dress up "Biblical Legends as Super Heros"... Cuz your gonna find Noah's Cape/
Your style is warped.. and without lies or remorse I'll prove you can't rival my force....
Cuz your "Kid Knees get revealed" so fast, youdda sworn we had photo's of a child in shorts
like orthodontists working on appearances for a funeral, you "better brace yourself for death"
Yea you got some punches, But Nun' hittin me... like catholic school abuse...
_________________________

ly came alright seen better, i duno this seemed rushed or forced had a few good punches, a few ok lines that didnt really connect,
stoic had a nice verse a cpl of concepts on the played side but some dope mets and wordplay and a lot of good punches, bars were stretched as a mother fucker u been reading to much hf style or sumshit fuck that off.

but stoic took this pretty easily with better punches

vote-sto

[Stoic]

Yea, i felt like my bars were a lil stretched, im not trying to go with the "HF Style".
The reason for that is didn't spend much time in the wording department, I had my concepts ready, but i wasn't in the mood to word things more concisely.
Personally i never felt structure should be a determing factor in a battle, although i agree i think it's kinda ugly having bars spilling to the next line. Good Punches are good, regardless of structure, imo.

But thanks for the vote, crit.

1-0

[Plot]

KAL
Now Rob just let go Never heard the vocals similar to techno
when i put the 9 to sto thats when the best damn tek show(text)
~NICE
your pencil punchlines leave you stuck with eraser' like maria shriver*
Always see stoic with the belt buckle like a precautious driver
~Ha, OK
So does it Trouble you if i take this title from right under you
sudden clues that dudes gettin schooled alot but never has the HW
~EH
So you lose a battle leave then your right up back and at it
i, had it you cant take the belt from strong'arm like a heroin addict
~DOPE!
so step up and tread slow cus your already apart of the living dead
after im done, imma direct this rob' zombie to death like devils rejects
~NICE
kal has the illest text you ever laid eyes upon kid sto is teflon
Imma text paddewon? please do you like vader did obi wan
~Eh, average.
your punches are sleepy and hollow mines leave ya head gone
Face it, only time you use knuckles is playin sonic the hedgehog
~NICE BAR!
I know what force is and you see i use it remorseless be cautious
Only time you could get thorough bread on a track is racehorses
~OK
Either its a hobby or a passion but how could this have happen
I mean damn you a old read, beatchasto like uncle toms cabin!
~DOPE
So death's ya fixture Add some punches in the mixer
no elixer only time theres flight at the mouth is in ya picture
~NICE.
Thats a tight drop. Best punches Ive ever seen U flow Kal.

STO
yea the flow is great, but your punches leave your soul as bait for the choke-hold and fate...
So we might as well dress up "Biblical Legends as Super Heros"... Cuz your gonna find Noah's Cape/ No Escape
~COOL
Your style is warped.. and without lies or remorse I'll prove you can't rival my force....
Cuz your "Kid Knees get revealed" so fast, youdda sworn we had photo's of a child in shorts
~Well worded, but kidneys wordplays are so played
your quest get's pummeled defenseless, huddles seem endless
Barbie Cues/Barbeques you at arrival. Without "Hasbro Dolls summoning your entrance"
~FUNNY SHIT >nutha dope wordplay
the pace is a race of steps that leave you traced to a wasted death... deflate your rep...
like orthodontists working on appearances for a funeral, you "better brace yourself for death"
~COOL
I'll bash this fool with tools and tactis of a brute... raps of acid, lead and fuel...
Yea you got some punches, But Nun' hittin me... like catholic school abuse...
~Yeah, simple wplay, made a good punch tho.
My path of destruction is infamous, this reign will go down in history, rippin these quitters...
while Kals been trying to pick up a foot-note so long, he's leavin with a perscription for blisters...
~HA, thats cool.
Your brain activity is dismal... and it'll flat line once i shank ya spine...
Cuz i could be a "Psychic dealing with street fighters" still couldn't see a Blanka/Blanker Mind!
~NICE!!!
I'll scare the artist and tear his armor... one look and he'll get buried farther...
even when it comes to the basics...Kally's got "utter confusion" like rookie dairy farmers
~Ha, not bad.
trying to battle a legend with fear? your pen will get sheared... the text vengeance is here
you thought i was standing up for you??? not what i intended, but I'll Def. End your career.
~COOL. tricky!
Your face will pause when breathing from my hatred raw and seething...
Destroy your home...and make "Kal-Zone vanish faster" then Italian Food at a weight-watchers meeting.
~LOL. thats a nice nameplay.

Kal, just had a couple of not hard-hitten bars at the start. finished so well that its such a pity
to see him lose this, but once again Stoic, thou very stretched showed his mastery of wordplay punches once again. I was thinkin I was gonna give it to Kal if Sto missed a bar,
but every bar punched well & he brought it personal in the end.
Dope battle!

[run]

Lyrikal

Now Rob just let go Never heard the vocals similar to techno
when i put the 9 to sto thats when the best damn tek show(text)

great opener

your pencil punchlines leave you stuck with eraser' like maria shriver*
Always see stoic with the belt buckle like a precautious driver

ehh, dont really like either punch, and the fact theres two lines both having similies with "like" doesnt work.

So does it Trouble you if i take this title from right under you
sudden clues that dudes gettin schooled alot but never has the HW

personal, great flow

So you lose a battle leave then your right up back and at it
i, had it you cant take the belt from strong'arm like a heroin addict

nice flow, okay concept

so step up and tread slow cus your already apart of the living dead
after im done, imma direct this rob' zombie to death like devils rejects

not feelin it

kal has the illest text you ever laid eyes upon kid sto is teflon
Imma text paddewon? please do you like vader did obi wan

not at all

your punches are sleepy and hollow mines leave ya head gone
Face it, only time you use knuckles is playin sonic the hedgehog

ehh..

I know what force is and you see i use it remorseless be cautious
Only time you could get thorough bread on a track is racehorses

nice wordplay

Either its a hobby or a passion but how could this have happen
I mean damn you a old read, beatchasto like uncle toms cabin!
(beacherstowe-author"uncle toms cabin")

dont like it

So death's ya fixture Add some punches in the mixer
no elixer only time theres flight at the mouth is in ya picture

nah, not really feelin it. good idea to end a verse with a personal though.


Stoic

yea the flow is great, but your punches leave your soul as bait for the choke-hold and fate...
So we might as well dress up "Biblical Legends as Super Heros"... Cuz your gonna find Noah's Cape/ No Escape

nice line, but "biblical legends as super heroes" ? seems kinda forced.

Your style is warped.. and without lies or remorse I'll prove you can't rival my force....
Cuz your "Kid Knees get revealed" so fast, youdda sworn we had photo's of a child in shorts

not really feelin it

your quest get's pummeled defenseless, huddles seem endless
Barbie Cues/Barbeques you at arrival. Without "Hasbro Dolls summoning your entrance"

great bar

the pace is a race of steps that leave you traced to a wasted death... deflate your rep...
like orthodontists working on appearances for a funeral, you "better brace yourself for death"

nah too forced

I'll bash this fool with tools and tactis of a brute... raps of acid, lead and fuel...
Yea you got some punches, But Nun' hittin me... like catholic school abuse...

nice concept, good punch

My path of destruction is infamous, this reign will go down in history, rippin these quitters...
while Kals been trying to pick up a foot-note so long, he's leavin with a perscription for blisters...

nice bar, i woulda worded it different but this works well

Your brain activity is dismal... and it'll flat line once i shank ya spine...
Cuz i could be a "Psychic dealing with street fighters" still couldn't see a Blanka/Blanker Mind!

kinda weak punch, and the concept is long and forced

I'll scare the artist and tear his armor... one look and he'll get buried farther...
even when it comes to the basics...Kally's got "utter confusion" like rookie dairy farmers

haha, nice

trying to battle a legend with fear? your pen will get sheared... the text vengeance is here
you thought i was standing up for you??? not what i intended, but I'll Def. End your career.

nice, like the concept

Your face will pause when breathing from my hatred raw and seething...
Destroy your home...and make "Kal-Zone vanish faster" then Italian Food at a weight-watchers meeting.

ehh, okay name play, but overall its not that great of a punch


OVERALL

Lyrikal came with some nice shit, i think your first half was much better worded than your second. Although you didnt have obvious hard hitting punches, you had a good flow mixed well with good personals. Kinda fell off with some lines in the second.
Sto as usual came with some really strong lines and overall had the consistancy to take it.

Vote : Stoic

[Stoic]

3-0, upping for a KO.

[kallywood]

you can take it its basically done. Good battle :)