Open Mic Belt: Tyrant. vs. ((Schematic))

[STRONGARM]

12 Bars Due Friday 09/05/08. Vote on other Battles..!

[Schematic]

Check. Good Luck.

[Tyrant.]

gl fam

[Schematic]

'Smith Will Suffice.'

My lyrical limits Imperical, within its a spherical rhythm.
Before this miracles finished Ill show these kids how im spiritual with em.
Cause each creations blessed. Each piece is a sacred text.
The realness I mesh might even wake you from the Matrix next.
Yes, Im similar to Smith when I assimilate these kids,
Ty just joined MY league for a civil way to stimulate his clit.
You know I smoke rage 'n explode, plus broke faces with blows.
Matics the solo rogue agent who wrote pages in code.
When I stand the sun rises, as I walk horizons expand.
Where im going youd need alot more than four Verizon bands.
We can battle in trenches with burners, but before we venture furture...
Look deep inside and ask: Could you stand the stench of murder?
Since my permaline plates reflect the thermal heat waves
Ill be burning streets waiting for these fertile seeds to raise.
Plus I mastered the night trapped within the azurite dream.
Cause Matic spat the dark matter that shattered light beams.
When Im mad my cellular masses.. well they swell and expand
And You can tell by my stance that im hella advanced.
Matics genetic strands a triple helix. I spit, and you feel it.
Rip em to pieces, or I could even lay my hands and heal it.
Im not what you think I am, these words are enlightened.
This is what my service, my rights, and purpose in life is.

[Tyrant.]

Times of Random Illness

A Decision to make visions to realism is my mission
At All costs and conditions I am lost in ambitions
Spark the ignition the revolution will start in renditions
As a Phoenix is to fiction, calm is my disposition
Books from past and present hold keys to my beliefs in text
Dissention of gods with unholy intents vents to the Pyrex
Vile dialects have content unspeakable in context
Power of the vortex rests in the inanimate mind of Cortez
The Salvation of a nation’s formation is brought by dictations
If retaliation can save it... Here comes war to all congregations
Vaccination is needed before the manifestations of abrasions
Preoccupation of a brain in manipulation is in need of emancipation
Minds of people are feeble and there hearts are as equal
Flock to each sequel are we all in balance and coequal
The hierarchy of theories of a conspiracy are deep in the dreams of fiends
By all means its time to convene and intervene in more ways than our seen
A Mind so obscene it careens deep to the unseen
The well oiled machine breaths deep and controlled like figurines
Behold kings and queens thrones shatter by the bones of there drones
Folk lore and legends are remembered through whom they are told
The state of a psychopathic mind folds as nerves grows creeping and cold
There times of random illness is slowed but all unravelled it folds

[FranchisE]

gotta keep short ...typing on ps3 wit controller .... overall...at first i kinda felt like shem kinda crammed some lines...kinda overkilled..shit was qulity tho...just the basic issues text sometime has..cant spit it so...on text sometime its hard..tyrant..started off wit some nice flow..better structured multis in my opinion...but i would have to say... i enjoyed schems joint more ... no overwhelming strength..or glaring advantage ... just seemed to enjoy schems product more

[Schematic]

Thanks for voting.

Upping.

[R.D.]

My lyrical limits Imperical, within its a spherical rhythm.
Before this miracles finished Ill show these kids how im spiritual with em.
Cause each creations blessed. Each piece is a sacred text.
The realness I mesh might even wake you from the Matrix next.

incredible opening with a wonderfully structured multiple flow.. love it

Since my permaline plates reflect the thermal heat waves
Ill be burning streets waiting for these fertile seeds to raise.

my fav bar from this verse

Plus I mastered the night trapped within the azurite dream.
Cause Matic spat the dark matter that shattered light beams.

sick flow

When Im mad my cellular masses.. well they swell and expand
And You can tell by my stance that im hella advanced.

lol.. thats a sick bar, mind if i bite it.. i kid, kind of.. sounds like something royce wouldve spit on death is certain

Im not what you think I am, these words are enlightened.
This is what my service, my rights, and purpose in life is.

again re-dick flow my dude as usual

i don't exactly know what fran. was getting at or if he thinks 10 syllables and up is too much but at no point do i see a portion of your verse that is not a considerable audio possibility.. the flow was immaculate the whole time as it usually is the content again as usual was good.. a well put together verse as far as an open mic is concerned


A Decision to make visions to realism is my mission
At All costs and conditions I am lost in ambitions
Spark the ignition the revolution will start in renditions
As a Phoenix is to fiction, calm is my disposition

awesome flow but i feel you are using some rather large words completely out of context to make it rhyme and appear to be complex.. see what i mean, you had the concept but you used the words without support from adverbs and pronouns.. i don't know

The Salvation of a nation’s formation is brought by dictations
If retaliation can save it... Here comes war to all congregations

cool bar but taking your entire multiple syllable rhyme into consideration.. dictation and congregation don't compliment each other

ok im not going to pull any more from your verse im just going to explain what i think.. you are taking every reasonably large word you can think of that holds slight relevance to your idea and throwing it in.. you don't always have to have 4 or 5 multi's in one line in fact sometimes that makes your line like a run on sentence too much said in too little of time.. i would work on polishing down your lines cutting some of the filler like you said in one line i believe convene and intervene its a cool way to say get together and end this but it should be supported by something to keep a more steady flow like.. convene in the chamber of peace and intervene.. you see what i mean.. sorry if this is a lot to read i try to give constructive feed.. i honestly believe your writing is right there just needs a little growth

oh yeah vote schem

[STRONGARM]

2 - 0 Schematic..

[Exis]

Schem:

Cause each creations blessed. Each piece is a sacred text.
The realness I mesh might even wake you from the Matrix next.

^^flow is flames...

Ty just joined MY league for a civil way to stimulate his clit.

^^haha...

Matics the solo rogue agent who wrote pages in code.

^^hot line...

When I stand the sun rises, as I walk horizons expand.
Where im going youd need alot more than four Verizon bands.
We can battle in trenches with burners, but before we venture furture...
Look deep inside and ask: Could you stand the stench of murder?

^^first bar is ill , second seems Idk...would of liked sumthin' between the last two words in the third line to fit the 'trenches with burners' multie...I know you ended on a perfect syllable count that just comes across as a little unfluent imo...but whatever that's nitpickin' like aboriginals do scalps for snacks.

Plus I mastered the night trapped within the azurite dream.
Cause Matic spat the dark matter that shattered light beams.
When Im mad my cellular masses.. well they swell and expand
And You can tell by my stance that im hella advanced.

^^dope...

Im not what you think I am, these words are enlightened.
This is what my service, my rights, and purpose in life is.

^^ill on the closer...

great verse no doubt , some real hot shit here...flow for the main is tight and I thought content was not only well worded but execution of the concepts used be sick with it.Diction laced and some nice meta's made this a real enjoyable piece to read...very consistent spit my friend , chea.

Ty:

The Salvation of a nation’s formation is brought by dictations
If retaliation can save it... Here comes war to all congregations

^^I like this...

Vaccination is needed before the manifestations *of abrasions*

^^not feelin' where the asterisk be placed , nice is what's before them...

Minds of people are feeble and there hearts are as equal

^^great line...

hmm , firstly I hate how you ended rhymes with a couple bars - 'equal/coequal'...'seen/unseen'...I find it annoyin' when cats use the same shit or close to it (like what I just stated)...comes across as bland especially when it's text...I guess it's ok if audio but even then I feel it's wack.I second alot of what RD said also , not sure if you went with bigger words to make it appear complex or you actually thought they ill while writin' them...if you are not one with an upped vocab or it's somewhat limited work with that bro...I would rather read simple direct content instead of you tryna drop sumthin' that isn't your thing.Havin' said this though what I quoted I thought was good shit , you need to work on droppin' half a piece of material to quote or atleast more than what's currently on offer...this was decent man.

my suitcases are still in storage ;) ...thanks for the read fellas.

Vote - Schematic.

...stay up y'all.

[STRONGARM]

3 - 0 KO.. Schematic Wins..!