Open Mic Belt: R.D. Famous vs. ((Exis))

[STRONGARM]

12 Bars Due Friday. Vote On Other Battles..!

[Exis]

check...

[R.D.]

[Exis]

for like a year and a half I've been rippin' this forum up...
my styles are for free , yet with it you kids can't afford to run...
let's injure an ignorant bitch who predicts I wouldn't win if I'm him...
and couldn't bring a nice delivery when it's pitched like I'm Warney son...
yeah that's a cricket terminology...
only threw it in there because most of the time idiots don't lyrically follow me , anyways...
I'm sorry for that , and definitely seek an apology exchanged for you bein' so horribly beaten...
by a warrior conquerin' from the bottom , to the tops of trees via swingin'...
instruments in various degrees 'til he's leadin' , and you wander to last...
I know a whole lot of fucks are gonna get at this shit preferrin' a topical match...
well that's on the horizon for Dave , plus Ex don't give two cocks about what you want or is gave...
nor the strivin' of ways in one's slidin' of anus , irrelevant is the percentage of faggots with boner to crack...
long in your ass , or a head gettin' blown off they stance...
for eyein' me walkin' wrongfully past , queer iris for a type straight leaves obvious damage...
digits flick opposite of on to the safety , then trigger fingers obnoxiously blast...
my posture is savage , when it's tossed an advantage...
cons I turn into positives , if about to be possibly handled...
I figure my disses got you disfigured and promptly popped on my mantle...
you aren't of the stock that owns standard...
if with individuals worthy and dope , the cream of the crop...
you'd have perfectly honed the reason you was , roamin' lost in my sandals...
stuck in some dream , tryna jump from beneath...
I'll plummet to where you is under me just for the fuck of it D , thru the newb levels I'll journey back...
in a contraption takin' me to a place I had passed , after done facin' this worthless cat...

[R.D.]

i see the fued gettin brewed so a frag is what i'm lookin to use..
im cookin the fuse..
and whoever this doesn't get to, the shrapnel it causes will include a few..

casualties of paralysis, plus gore equals abnormalities of the foulest shit..
bowels and piss..
released with no control, thats fear and large amounts of it..

fingers removed in battle so medics stitch and mend digits..
morphine these men gettin..
and for the sake of the image lets envision mass victims in pitch tent clinics..

lives passing every second, saved one or two means a dead six of seven..
soldiers pray with reverends..
what's a murder got to say for forgiveness, i'll beg to get in heaven..

deafened hearing war in effect, a small child's scream is heard..
and it seems absurd..
but the kid is more loud and clear than bombs and three round bursts..

men who have seen things that have and will haunt them in dreams..
crazy they're deemed..
but they have PTSD, a disability, makes it ok cause they're comp'ed indeed..

never mind endless nights toss and turn from their frights..
learn from their life..
that those they've killed will forever be there to emerge into sight..

blood covered the field and their wounds? its funny they never healed..
what could they feel..
waking in cold sweats crying about something that wasn't even real..

now they visits the graves where all their brothers have fallen and lay..
appalled and ashamed..
that they can not be with them in their final resting place..

God have mercy on these men because I am one of them..
and i know none of us..
that haven't seen enough to no longer fear the end..




i only dropped ten because i have rather extended bars so i figured it would even out about.. nice verse too your right flow is re-dic

[Exis]

vote up you malnourished ethiopians...

[1/2 Wit It]

Exis;

yeah that's a cricket terminology...
only threw it in there because most of the time idiots don't lyrically follow me , anyways...
I'm sorry for that , and definitely seek an apology exchanged for you bein' so horribly beaten...
by a warrior conquerin' from the bottom , to the tops of trees via swingin'...
instruments in various degrees 'til he's leadin' , and you wander to last...
I know a whole lot of fucks are gonna get at this shit preferrin' a topical match...

i thought this was pretty hot..wordings alittle sloppy in certain areas but i still liked what you were getting at, and how you got at it.

well that's on the horizon for Dave , plus Ex don't give two cocks about what you want or is gave...
nor the strivin' of ways in one's slidin' of anus , irrelevant is the percentage of faggots with boner to crack...
long in your ass , or a head gettin' blown off they stance...
for eyein' me walkin' wrongfully past , queer iris for a type straight leaves obvious damage...
digits flick opposite of on to the safety , then trigger fingers obnoxiously blast...
my posture is savage , when it's tossed an advantage...

at first glance, i thought this was all over the place..but after reading over it a few times i think this section is sick..rhyme scheme completely unpredictable and the wording itself is insane.

cons I turn into positives , if about to be possibly handled...
I figure my disses got you disfigured and promptly popped on my mantle...
you aren't of the stock that owns standard...
if with individuals worthy and dope , the cream of the crop...
you'd have perfectly honed the reason you was , roamin' lost in my sandals...

i feel the exactly the same way about this as the section above it..dope material, man.

Overall; although I wasn't feeling the ending too much, i thought you pretty much did your thing with this. beginning was okay but then you really turned it up and got intense. your ideas are completely original, as well as your rhyme scheme's and wording..really enjoyed this read.

R.D. Famous;

casualties of paralysis, plus gore equals abnormalities of the foulest shit..
bowels and piss..
released with no control, thats fear and large amounts of it..

the flow really makes me enjoy this bar..also liked how you worded the last line here

fingers removed in battle so medics stitch and mend digits..
morphine these men gettin..
and for the sake of the image lets envision mass victims in pitch tent clinics..

i think the wording can be tweaked a tad, but other than that i was feeling this..

lives passing every second, saved one or two means a dead six of seven..

i felt this line alone was hot..

never mind endless nights toss and turn from their frights..
learn from their life..
that those they've killed will forever be there to emerge into sight..

feeling this..

God have mercy on these men because I am one of them..
and i know none of us..
that haven't seen enough to no longer fear the end..

thought this closer fit the main idea of your verse perfectly..

Overall; your verse was pretty cool for the most part..felt like you were forcing the issue flow wise in certain areas, and i also thought a few of your concepts were a bit basic..not a bad read though.

Vote; Exis. In the end, his material simply impressed me more than R.D's..I felt his ideas were more complex and creative, and his was flow/rhyme scheme wasn't as predictable/repetitive...I enjoyed reading the battle. Peace

[Criticize]

casualties of paralysis, plus gore equals abnormalities of the foulest shit..
bowels and piss..
released with no control, thats fear and large amounts of it..
....................
my posture is savage , when it's tossed an advantage...
cons I turn into positives , if about to be possibly handled...
I figure my disses got you disfigured and promptly popped on my mantle...
you aren't of the stock that owns standard...
if with individuals worthy and dope , the cream of the crop...
you'd have perfectly honed the reason you was , roamin' lost in my sandals.




umm exis your strutucture STILL SUCKS. i liked get your warney line, i guess your from the uk then. delivery/pitch play no one will understand the cricket terminology here tho. it seems like you just keystyled this and it could be a lot better if you had actualy taking the time to sharpen the piece and iron out the flaws.

rd your verse was from a way different angle, it wasnt bad, but wasnt good. i dont know if thats just me though, i dont really like these sort of drops but you did a decent job at it, and got your story across pretty well. i wouldnt mind seeing you drop your bars together as verse rather than bar space bar, it just gives the feel of 1 bar then another rather than a combined verse, imo.

i have to vote for exis, pretty close battle because you came so differently from both sides, but i liked more of exis's verse and it appealed to me more, thats it.

vote-exis.

[Exis]

lol uk , my structure is fine...thanks for votin' man I'll get at your shit with Beyond soon.

...good looks also Half.

[STRONGARM]

Exis Wins..!