((NOGGAH)) VS. 7th CRESENT -Topical

[Plot]

12 bars due Friday.
Please check, vote, play nice & all that Jazz.
If U have any problems, issues or complaints please PM Noggah (lol)

[7th Crescent]

so we meet again my friend..lol goood luck

check

[DAM]

Topic: Aim High

[Noggah]

chiddeck and goodluck, but just enough luck to lose...

[7th Crescent]

yo fam..i gotta show tonite..last minute..ill be posting late night...like after 2AM aight?????

[Noggah]

and here we go...


Amaso Nib Nedal became a leader of Adeaq La under the muslim faith...
who taught America disrupted their ways n were the ones to blame...
He grew up in a place where nothin was safe...
one wrong step and you'd combust into flames from mines rusted with age...
people died from remnants of a war that continued to exist from before...
supplied by the same country they spit at n swore had sin to its core...
infants in cribs sent gifts to rattle off war cries...
while kids shot guns and played hide n seek in battle trough gore sights...
in the land of sand, as soon as your face stubbled out of its peach fuzz...
your approached and told no longer will you stumble around as a beach bum...
"youve got what we need son" and they flash the cash...
and tell you all the good that comes if you kamikaze blast your ass...
He refused the offer cause he lived to kill...
his profile fit the bill, so he was set up for his enlisted skills...
enraged at naked pictures of prisoners cornered...
Amaso and his brethren responded by beheadin men they had tortured...
making his way to the top he lead the rebellion...
every now n then dressin civilian to mesh with the rest of the hellions....
he was thought a master of hidin... bombs caused disaster to find em...
while he walked amongst the gathered alliance without battin an eyelid...
Americans found them, and covered by air support, troops came marchin in...
many on the ground died, but Amaso aimed high and had his target lit...
as he fired he yelled "its all about whose reduced into ash first"...
then Amaso and all of Adeaq La got blown apart...cause his bazooka was backwards...

[7th Crescent]

An Angel, The Devil, & A Decision

Hear I am, at the edge of the ledge...
17 and about to be a father, I think I'm better off dead...
Can't believe what letter the said, how'd I live this long...
I'll never know, too much stress is bringing this on....
Look down 10 storys, rescue crews at full attention...
Not much left for me, mom please see this as a blessin...
Cause since dad split, its been some real tough times....
You've managed to stay strong, even when ive been weak-n-blind.
I need some advice now,cause I can't figure this out....
Contemplating suicide, your baby boy, is now a man with doubts....

(Someone come get me)....just then i hear a voice...

Angel:
Now think about it, before u trip and put ur faith in a step...
Yes, life can be filthy. but kid ur making a mess...
Facing this test of right and wrong, where the strong survives...
U cant provide a child with inner vision when ur gone from eyes...
Scorned for life, one sits and think if his pops really cared...
Plottin, he’s scared, hard to believe that ur not even there...
Solemnly sweard under oath that youd cope with the grief...
But bring ya life to an end, so emmotions are free?...
hope is the key, youll open doors with a change of heart...
Mind glidin thru horizons while ur playing with stars...
Ur playing a part to existence in the body of man...
Lifes a gift, u hold the charm in the palm of ur hands...
A promosing man, never quits and quitters don’t suceed...
sacrificed a days grief, to sit amongst the kings...
pitted on the peak of great destinys, you’ll flap angels wings...
and we’ll swing dance when the fat lady sings...

(someone come and save me)..just then i hear another voice...

Devil:
Known from the start ya weren’t condoned from the heart…
Remember dad? Your the reason moms blew him apart…
Your dome is harvest of coke and dope sold in the dark…
You gotta child? What of the kids you’ve thrown to the sharks?
For money folds & some narcs to roll, smoke in the park…
Family’s expendable, even your mom is controlled as a mark…
Rollin in Volkswagens & cold bragging of holding a block…
Down, ratted ya man bound to be poked when he’s locked…
The soul that you got, that you think is holy is not…
A vessel of pain delaying flames & brimstone to just rot..
So think no more & just walk to the ledge taking a pledge…
Take in a breath maybe reflect on babies youll be saving from death…
By your hands, you had no plans of paying those debts…
To the mob bosses making out checks to pay for ya neck…
Hades is next as the only option so step to your death duke…
& take that leap of faith, trust me, the Devil will catch you…

Voices tryin' to sell me, two different possibilities...
Angst, guilt, and torment, the pressures plain killin' me....
Look out below everyone, I'm about to be a child of the streets....
Moms cryin' at my feet, I can hear some Rakim, I'ma be dyin' to a beat....
Don't send up a ladder, this kids pretty good with his balance...
Arms out to God, why's life gotta be such a challenge?.....
Heaven here I come, ..will my seed know why..i can only wish
let me get back in the window and aim high, but wait.........
I slipped.......

[Don Dotta]

Masterpiece of a fuckin battle here,i mean both of you guys came out here and did your thing..



Nog's-I was feelin ya hole verse,plenty in there to quote,story was dope as fuck!.I was feelin the imagery in this piece alot.The twist at the end put the perfect ending to your piece and kinda had me laughin a little..

Originally Posted by Noggah

infants in cribs sent gifts to rattle off war cries...
while kids shot guns and played hide n seek in battle trough gore sights...
in the land of sand, as soon as your face stubbled out of its peach fuzz...
your approached and told no longer will you stumble around as a beach bum...
"youve got what we need son" and they flash the cash...
and tell you all the good that comes if you kamikaze blast your ass...
He refused the offer cause he lived to kill...
his profile fit the bill, so he was set up for his enlisted skills...

Fucking dopeness,bottom line,flow was crazy in there among other things...

Originally Posted by Noggah

Americans found them, and covered by air support, troops came marchin in...
many on the ground died, but Amaso aimed high and had his target lit...
as he fired he yelled "its all about whose reduced into ash first"...
then Amaso and all of Adeaq La got blown apart...cause his bazooka was backwards...

Real dope ending,how he blew him n his own people away was funny as fuck...


Outta 10................................................ ................................................8. 0






7th-This piece was dope as well,it reminded me of that track guilty conscience by eminem n dre.The idea wasnt original because of that but it was still a dope idea.I actually was attempting to put a piece together myself similar but never got around to finish.That dont matter cause yours is way better but neways..same as with nogs verse..mad quotable shit,flow was good throughout and your ending had that twist that just had you like ohh shit,thats fucked up..lol..i also see that you kinda let the devil in since dude still fell...

Originally Posted by 7th

Look down 10 storys, rescue crews at full attention...
Not much left for me, mom please see this as a blessin...
Cause since dad split, its been some real tough times....
You've managed to stay strong, even when ive been weak-n-blind.
I need some advice now,cause I can't figure this out....
Contemplating suicide, your baby boy, is now a man with doubts....

Feelin the emotion here..very good..

Originally Posted by 7th

Voices tryin' to sell me, two different possibilities...
Angst, guilt, and torment, the pressures plain killin' me....
Look out below everyone, I'm about to be a child of the streets....
Moms cryin' at my feet, I can hear some Rakim, I'ma be dyin' to a beat....
Don't send up a ladder, this kids pretty good with his balance...
Arms out to God, why's life gotta be such a challenge?.....
Heaven here I come, ..will my seed know why..i can only wish
let me get back in the window and aim high, but wait.........
I slipped.......

As well as nog..dope ending...you had alot of quotable's and your piece was just enjoyable to read but i noticed your shit was real long,im not positive but i think yor over bar limit..not sure tho...ne ways...


Outta 10................................................ .....................................8.0



This one was real hard to judge,honestly i wasnt even gonna vote cuz yall both my dude's..but someones gota do it..i enjoyed reading both piece's,when i read nogs verse i said to myself that 7th better have come real correct..and sure enough 7th came dope and made this one of the best ive read in a while...i really feel like because ive heard a similar song that was just like 7ths verse that it could have been a bit different bu at the same time it was a dope ass piece..i thought nogs ending was great and he killed it with that..both had serious flow..mad quotable's..i cant say enough and i hope my vote is exceptable..but mannn...



Enjoyment:tie
Flow:tie
Quotables:7th
Finisher:Nog





Vote:Draw..i dno man,honestly i cant settle with one piece




Props to both of you's..shit was dope

[Noggah]

wtf....you dropped a long ass verse man....

[7th Crescent]

my fault Nog....seriously i just got into the story and it just got extented longer than it shouldve...for the sake of finishing it..feel me..so ill take any penalty.DQ...deduction of votes..what ever...

[Noggah]

iono, i dont really like doin that shit... it woulda been cool if u woulda just let me know u was gonna go banzai on that shit tho, lol...

i guess we'll just see what Plot says or see how voting goes... a tie aint too bad, lol...

[DoN-MeGa]

Gosh DANG... Cresent, I could tell you were into your "zone" . DAMN that was f'in long, I counted like 30 bars. NICE lmao

[Criticize]

7th cresent, simple story song.
but effective.
it was clear what you where saying and you said it well, it wasnt something i found completly nice, but it at least wanted me to read on to see how you finished the verse off. decent piece. but you did it way to long bro. and the twist at the end wasnt that hot, it sort of finished of haphazardly in a rush, i think you could have ended it better.

noggah- i definatly liked your piece more, your writing is just at a level a little higher than 7ths!
your piece had more of the text elements in it, some nice multis the story went along pretty good as well, like 7th i didnt really dig your closer either i think it kinda of didnt do the first 11 bars justice, but thats just my opinion. a nice drop you took the topic from out of left field and did it well.


overall this is probably a tie, but only because 7th had more bars...i liked noggah's piece better, but the extra bars 7th dropped made it pretty even, but id probably give this to noggah, i enjoyed his verse more, and if it was even bars i think he would have taken it with a slight edge.

vote noggah.

[Beyond]

Noggah: Liked it all the way through. The multies and word choice in most of the verse was sick. The ending was exceptional as well, finding out that you had been talking about Osama Bin Laden and Al Qaeda all along was crazy, man.

7th Crescent: Didn't like how you started off. The first section just wasn't very appealing. The second section was good though and then the third section was flames. The last, however, fell off again and the ending was a bit too sudden.

Overall: I'm going to have to give my vote to Noggah. I felt he came more consistent, his whole verse as a whole was at a higher level. I feel he also ended much stronger and had a better twist. Lastly, I felt that 7th's approach to the topic has been done numerous times before all thanks to Guilty Conscience. Good battle fellas, it was a pleasure to read.

Vote: Noggah

[Plot]

Nog up 2-0, uppin for votes.