Inn DEPPTH vs. ((CRITICIZE)) -OpenMic

[Plot]

12 bars due Friday.
Please check, vote, play nice & all that Jazz.
If U have any problems, issues or complaints please PM Noggah (lol)

[Criticize]

sorry inndepth, i guess this match up sucks for you.

[Inn Deppth]

indeed

[Inn Deppth]

A rainbow colored prism reflects off the side mirror
The constellation of my worst nightmares made me fear her
I broke the flares open when the clock struck midnight
Chose my prayers, coastin' while blastin up in mid-flight
Im tryna be like Galileo, moldin the stars like play dough
Spiraling out of control, black matter forms a decayed hole
Hale Bopp's comet speeds past, I blast my thruster cannons
It's just me & myself, can't dare to trust the phantoms
The cold void surrounds me, no lifeforms in my vicinity
Green miles or purple hills, I'm stuck here for infinity
My small white capsules movin at the speed of light
Dropped the knife, realized my life comes at a heathen's price
A famous John Doe, I'm crater surfin on the cosmos
Sun bursts, dodgin a firey hell storm like diablo
A month into my trek, still speedin towards Saturn's rings
Hallucinations manifesting, I'm keepin a gat for fiends
One time into my mind? You'd think it was a sad glimpse
Supernovas being born while I pass out from the absinthe
No c-walkin' here, this is only one step for nick's kind
Can't fear the inevitable, no backin down with this thick spine
A dragon with a serpents tongue, I'm here to conquer the universe
I learned to become a master you gotta be a student first
Earths tryna contact, but I got voices in my head, so I can't hear you
My voyage hasn't ended though, I'm speedin off with the world in my rearview


To be continued..?

[Criticize]

The Difference Between Us.

-that old arrogant, asshole accapela criticize style joint.


Im world-wide..faggot you homo's stay in the villiage,
bfor i fuck your girl in front of you and make you pay the privilage/
crits the future of this rap game while dudes hang in the past,
gratuated school bully of my anger management class..with extravegent marks/
im known to strike on my turf, until your biting the earth,
coz im so far above you i should be sky writing my verse/
been exciting since birth; but im never acting my own age,
a veteran junkie! i was high of cocaine in the stone age/
im a sick asshole! steal your drink and then nut in your face,
now let me show the difference between us and cut to the chase/
1 punch will take out your legs until your limbs go under bitch,
the wonder kid! shit i set the bar...you just limbo under it/6
in a battle there is no point riding your luck just back peddal,
coz im a fucking machine your more like scrap metal/
the crack devil; your bland im some form of euphoria,
your dating rosie o donnel im fucking eva longoria/8
i was cut from a cloth that still has rising perfections,
i put this site on the map you still ask for directions/
so please just hop of it, criticize is hot gossip
im the 'talk of the town' while your 'just off topic'/
all these other mc's are luke warm with the vibrant strains,
while iv been spitting hot as fuck cause'n the climate change
crits making tidal waves when i leak this baddest flow,
im nearing legend 'status' your mainting the status quo/



yea could have been worded better in parts, but when you keystyle a few different idea's you have, this is the result.

[Pembroke]

Match of the week right here.. seeing two old RF battlers come out of hibernation to compete makes the butterflies in my stomach evolve into mothes. Both of you had well written verses possessing a quality I don't notice too often.. experience.

Inn Deppth - This felt like an inner journey into the color spectrum of the universe.. I'm liking the atmosphere that you keep hovering over the contents, shifting when you want to add an image or use a celestial reference to give it an ethereal quality. This is just an all around successful verse.. rhythmic credentials in line with the image accurately depicted.. reminds me of Pink Floyd's black void-themes at some parts, my cousin listens to that band.

Hale Bopp's comet speeds past, I blast my thruster cannons
It's just me & myself, can't dare to trust the phantoms
^Hah.

Supernovas being born while I pass out from the absinthe
^Amazing line..

Good job, dep.

Criticize - Now this is what I'm talking about, Skywalker. Energetic flow, nice punchlines with humorous vibes exuding off of this in smoke plumes. The praise concepts were surprisingly fresh ideas, and when I say fresh, I mean in the past, you usually used to flip on already used concepts or stray across the same one as another and give it a different twist. These weren't like that, they came through with hardened delivery and you did your thing fleshing them out.

im known to strike on my turf, until your biting the earth,
coz im so far above you i should be sky writing my verse/
been exciting since birth; but im never acting my own age,
a veteran junkie! i was high of cocaine in the stone age/
im a sick asshole! steal your drink and then nut in your face,
now let me show the difference between us and cut to the chase/
1 punch will take out your legs until your limbs go under bitch,
the wonder kid! shit i set the bar...you just limbo under it/6
in a battle there is no point riding your luck just back peddal,
coz im a fucking machine your more like scrap metal/
the crack devil; your bland im some form of euphoria,
your dating rosie o donnel im fucking eva longoria/8
^This entire section is probably the best bragging material I've seen you write.

Close battle, after reading depth's verse I wasn't expecting Crit to put up such resistance. If I could, I'd vote a tie and rally for a rematch.. but since that's not happenin, I'm voting for the verse that I found myself reading more closely.. less advanced, but still firmly on point.

v/ Criticize

Stay up

[Criticize]

thanks we need more please.

[HellRazor]

Wow....2 COMPLETELY DIFFERENT APPROACHES....


Nick: Flow was on point, content was hot throughout the piece. Imagery, fucking sickening, all astral pieces gain an imaginative edge over their opponent, due to the not knowing what is out there, and you flooded me with images that I tried disputing, but they were done so cleverly, it was impossible to deny.

Im tryna be like Galileo, moldin the stars like play dough
Spiraling out of control, black matter forms a decayed hole
^^Nice...imagery hah....multies def, good bar....flow was Nile...

A famous John Doe, I'm crater surfin on the cosmos
Sun bursts, dodgin a firey hell storm like diablo
^^Another Vivid bar, your desciptiveness gave your verse a competitive edge...

One time into my mind? You'd think it was a sad glimpse
Supernovas being born while I pass out from the absinthe
^^*deep Breath* beautiful....definitely a quotable...

Hot shit throughout......definitely a nice drop, consistency was there throughout....HOWEVER your ending let me down, it seems generic, like you really didn't know how to finish it off and just through something there.....



Chopper: I read Nicks verse and thought wow some sick deep shit here...Then I read crits verse and was blown back because it changed my whole mindset. Flow was impeccable...the opening was iffy , but was quickly made up by the next bar....verse was full of MetaPhors, and your imagery was of a different kind than nicks due to your humorous plight, but it still got the job done...

im known to strike on my turf, until your biting the earth,
coz im so far above you i should be sky writing my verse/
been exciting since birth; but im never acting my own age,
a veteran junkie! i was high of cocaine in the stone age/
^^Multies...Nice...flow....Nile....Humor, outstanding, and imagery nice...good bar...made up for the opener, by leaps and bounds...

1 punch will take out your legs until your limbs go under bitch,
the wonder kid! shit i set the bar...you just limbo under it/6
in a battle there is no point riding your luck just back peddal,
coz im a fucking machine your more like scrap metal/
^^hah...funny shit...very humorous, flow was sick once again, multi ridden first bar...braggy type ish....good bars...

i was cut from a cloth that still has rising perfections,
i put this site on the map you still ask for directions/
^^nice.

so please just hop of it, criticize is hot gossip
im the 'talk of the town' while your 'just off topic'/
all these other mc's are luke warm with the vibrant strains,
while iv been spitting hot as fuck cause'n the climate change
crits making tidal waves when i leak this baddest flow,
im nearing legend 'status' your mainting the status quo/
^^Hot Lines....Once again flow was nile, content was on point with the upmanship, and the ending was hot...

Overall NICE BATTLE

V/ Chopper...

He came with a happy go lucky braggy verse against nicks vivid imagery and wordplay, and crit wins because his verse was a humorous attempt embedded with imagery, metas and a nice flow... Great battle from both...can't wait to see you guys in action again next week against different opponents.......

[Plot]

2-0 Criticize, uppin

[Noggah]

interesting battle...

End Epth

you really came nice man... i was lovin this verse...shit made me wanna go smoke some weed, haha....i thought your storytelling was professional.... definately had some sweet imagery... and you used your references wisely...considering you havent written in a while then drop something of this caliber makes me think you've been moonlighting on another site (no pun intended with moonlighting and your topic for this piece).... shit was just nice man, it had a real trippy vibe to it... me thinks someone took a hit of acid, haha... but very solid... well written.... good shit... Favorite lines:


I broke the flares open when the clock struck midnight
Chose my prayers, coastin' while blastin up in mid-flight
Im tryna be like Galileo, moldin the stars like play dough
Spiraling out of control, black matter forms a decayed hole

good imagery here, wordplay coulda been a little better, but it makes the mind wander...

Hale Bopp's comet speeds past, I blast my thruster cannons
It's just me & myself, can't dare to trust the phantoms

haha... nice...

A famous John Doe, I'm crater surfin on the cosmos
Sun bursts, dodgin a firey hell storm like diablo

niceness...

One time into my mind? You'd think it was a sad glimpse
Supernovas being born while I pass out from the absinthe

amazing...

A dragon with a serpents tongue, I'm here to conquer the universe
I learned to become a master you gotta be a student first

i just liked that...


anyways, really good shit man, feelin damn near everything...




crit his eyes

nice braggy piece... had some witty punches in there... yeah coulda worded some stuff better... guess u know that already... had some pretty original material, but touched on played stuff once or twice... alot of clowning going on and alot of humor involved, so i was diggin it... this is the type of shit i used to always write, havent done one in awhile, so i think i might be droppin one soon... with punches like these i doubt you'll have much trouble in punches battles... overall looks like your gettin that rust off nicely and had a couple tetnis shots too.... favorite line:


crits the future of this rap game while dudes hang in the past,
gratuated school bully of my anger management class..with extravegent marks/

the end part threw off the flow, but a good line none the less...

im known to strike on my turf, until your biting the earth,
coz im so far above you i should be sky writing my verse/

ouch...

been exciting since birth; but im never acting my own age,
a veteran junkie! i was high of cocaine in the stone age/

nice, ive had similar lines formed in my head...

i was cut from a cloth that still has rising perfections,
i put this site on the map you still ask for directions/

this was coo...

so please just hop of it, criticize is hot gossip
im the 'talk of the town' while your 'just off topic'/

lol...

good shit


OVERALL - i think if crit would've come with anything else, Nick would've got this battle... both had monstrous verses...and this is kind of the downfall of an open mic battle, both can come entirely fuckin different, both have sick shit, its really incomparable, but ones gotta win... and im pretty sure 99 out of 100 times crit would get this with his wit and humor... i too must go that way... but this was close as fuck...both had exceptional shit... and will be huge contenders in their matches to come....

vote = crit