HW Criticize(5-3) vs Fluent(3-0)

[Con]

8-12

Sign ins due on Thursday, if u dont, we'll take it as a noshow.

DUE SATURDAY at 11:59 pm, CENTRAL..lets see if this changes anything.
if u vote fast, then we can begin earlier.. unless im at work so it'll
take longer sometimes.

excuses we wont accept anymore:

'i got fucked up!', 'i wasnt on a computer!', 'he didnt sign in!',
'i forgot', 'thought i was ontime!'.thats why u read the rules on the top page.

if ya opponent noshows u need to post SOMETHING, a bar will
do or both of u r dq'd BUT! u better have a verse ready incase ya opponent does show!!!
those single bars r only da guarantee that yall showing up..COME READY EVERYTIME.


vote on at least TWO battles in the league afterwards. but it'd b nice if u do
more.
if u dont want to wait..pm or aim us ur verses and we'll gladly post it for u
right on the deadline hour.
u may get an extension only if its an emergency and u aint got shit done.
and it better be good.





read the fukin rules.

[Fluent]

screw it, let's do this quick, i don't feel like waiting all week.

Give up, ya style's outdated and I'll have you slumping dude
I can see ya behind on the Times but ya ass ain't front page news
Last time you were unable to leave my smart spit wrecked
Now you couldn't top ya Arch rival as a skilled St. Louis architect
You can't blow me out the water with your verse's shit details
Become a mermaid police informant if you wanna Tip the Scales
This title's remaining mine cuz you ain't contendin', you shaking
Mimic Kahlm in the womb if you wanna be a Legend in the making
Don't front like you'd really fight me cuz you prolly dread hostility
I'll embarrass you in the streets and show you've got no cred-ability
Ya prolly been dumped more times than you've been told ya wack
You suck and after you mis-fire, don't try getting an old flame back
I'll arrange for the death of you and ya fam in run down places
Get ya'll burned at the Stakes without riggin Triple Crown races
This skinny punk's through, Con should make this one closed
Crit was a bag of bones before he got sealed and decomposed

[Criticize]

i was gonna ask if you wanted to do 15, oh well.
im at uni now home tonight post tommorow.

[Fluent]

oh my bad, if we meet in the tourney we'll go 15 for sure.

[Criticize]

blah at having to shorted 4 bars.

ask my girl im a womaniser who beats bitches out of habbit,
shit! il win by a hair(hare) and then give you the rabbit/
uv never ventured out of the rfbl! your type are boring,
il take the title match by storm..this is a cyclone warning/
ul find the results in the lost and found cost of fucking with me,
you got played punches that dont hit/land like ships lost at sea/
your full of bull like the rings containing spains prize fighters,
il shank-ya! and have your appendix turning over like an essay writer/ (if you dont know how to format an essay at a post gradute level dont vote)

my actual steeze, is murder the threads factual believe,
il throw ya limbs round the room and spread flu like bacterial disease/
so bring ya crew and troops its time to rally this peaseant,
right now il serve fresh up(r) cuts like a delicatesent/ (deli's serve up fresh cuts of meat)
iv got the heaters on aim to ensure that i roast spines,
ul get ya carrear washed up 4sure (foreshore) like waves on the coast line/
fluent will end up in plastic and wrapped to prove how this toy is,
il plunge my knife in ya vein! and sink vessels like a bermuda tiangle voyage.(blood vessels)


if you dont understand a bar dont vote simple as that, and if you cant understand and vote it will obvisouly be discounted.

[Ruck]

Give up, ya style's outdated and I'll have you slumping dude
I can see ya behind on the Times but ya ass ain't front page news
^nice..kinda like my bar :)
Last time you were unable to leave my smart spit wrecked
Now you couldn't top ya Arch rival as a skilled St. Louis architect
hah cool
You can't blow me out the water with your verse's shit details
Become a mermaid police informant if you wanna Tip the Scales
hm nah
This title's remaining mine cuz you ain't contendin', you shaking
Mimic Kahlm in the womb if you wanna be a Legend in the making
cool
Don't front like you'd really fight me cuz you prolly dread hostility
I'll embarrass you in the streets and show you've got no cred-ability
alright
Ya prolly been dumped more times than you've been told ya wack
You suck and after you mis-fire, don't try getting an old flame back
decent
I'll arrange for the death of you and ya fam in run down places
Get ya'll burned at the Stakes without riggin Triple Crown races
nice
This skinny punk's through, Con should make this one closed
Crit was a bag of bones before he got sealed and decomposed
nice

v

ask my girl im a womaniser who beats bitches out of habbit,
shit! il win by a hair(hare) and then give you the rabbit/
alright
uv never ventured out of the rfbl! your type are boring,
il take the title match by storm..this is a cyclone warning/
lol cool
ul find the results in the lost and found cost of fucking with me,
you got played punches that dont hit/land like ships lost at sea/
decent
your full of bull like the rings containing spains prize fighters,
il shank-ya! and have your appendix turning over like an essay writer/ (if you dont know how to format an essay at a post gradute level dont vote)
nice
my actual steeze, is murder the threads factual believe,
il throw ya limbs round the room and spread flu like bacterial disease/
dopppppppe
so bring ya crew and troops its time to rally this peaseant,
right now il serve fresh up(r) cuts like a delicatesent/ (deli's serve up fresh cuts of meat)
lol cool
iv got the heaters on aim to ensure that i roast spines,
ul get ya carrear washed up 4sure (foreshore) like waves on the coast line/
nice
fluent will end up in plastic and wrapped to prove how this toy is,
il plunge my knife in ya vein! and sink vessels like a bermuda tiangle voyage.(blood vessels)
nice

v/ crit...close battle, but crits last few were nice as hell.

good battle.

[Jack]

Give up, ya style's outdated and I'll have you slumping dude
I can see ya behind on the Times but ya ass ain't front page news
lol nice
Last time you were unable to leave my smart spit wrecked
Now you couldn't top ya Arch rival as a skilled St. Louis architect
ok
You can't blow me out the water with your verse's shit details
Become a mermaid police informant if you wanna Tip the Scales
lol nice
This title's remaining mine cuz you ain't contendin', you shaking
Mimic Kahlm in the womb if you wanna be a Legend in the making
haha,nice
Don't front like you'd really fight me cuz you prolly dread hostility
I'll embarrass you in the streets and show you've got no cred-ability
str8
Ya prolly been dumped more times than you've been told ya wack
You suck and after you mis-fire, don't try getting an old flame back
eh
I'll arrange for the death of you and ya fam in run down places
Get ya'll burned at the Stakes without riggin Triple Crown races
good
This skinny punk's through, Con should make this one closed
Crit was a bag of bones before he got sealed and decomposed
dope








ask my girl im a womaniser who beats bitches out of habbit,
shit! il win by a hair(hare) and then give you the rabbit/
played
uv never ventured out of the rfbl! your type are boring,
il take the title match by storm..this is a cyclone warning/
lol good
ul find the results in the lost and found cost of fucking with me,
you got played punches that dont hit/land like ships lost at sea/
why didnt u just asy land?.lol.um ok
your full of bull like the rings containing spains prize fighters,
il shank-ya! and have your appendix turning over like an essay writer/ (if you dont know how to format an essay at a post gradute level dont vote)
haha nice
my actual steeze, is murder the threads factual believe,
il throw ya limbs round the room and spread flu like bacterial disease/
lol im guessing the flu name play is played??either way u flipped it quite nicely
so bring ya crew and troops its time to rally this peaseant,
right now il serve fresh up(r) cuts like a delicatesent/ (deli's serve up fresh cuts of meat)
hmmm..str8
iv got the heaters on aim to ensure that i roast spines,
ul get ya carrear washed up 4sure (foreshore) like waves on the coast line/
nice
fluent will end up in plastic and wrapped to prove how this toy is,
il plunge my knife in ya vein! and sink vessels like a bermuda tiangle voyage.(blood vessels)
dope

v= damn..this is hard..honestly i wanna say tie...but i dont wanna just take up space so..Criticize i honestly thought u were done with when i seen fluents verse but you came dope...both had dope closers...crit u started off a little eh..but ended up catching lost ground..fluent i feel was more consistant..started nice with maybe 1-2 lines that were ok...but followed threw the whole way,thats why im voting for him...dope verses by both..i look forward to reading both of your verses next week..

[Criticize]

"why didnt u just asy land?.lol.um ok" check the wording and the wordplay it makes it 10x more effective,



i THINK correct me if im wrong you vote is for fluent lol
crazyyyyy
1-1

[Dopar...]

Give up, ya style's outdated and I'll have you slumping dude
I can see ya behind on the Times but ya ass ain't front page news
^Click said sumthing similar to this 2 weeks back

Last time you were unable to leave my smart spit wrecked
Now you couldn't top ya Arch rival as a skilled St. Louis architect
^decent

You can't blow me out the water with your verse's shit details
Become a mermaid police informant if you wanna Tip the Scales
^lol

This title's remaining mine cuz you ain't contendin', you shaking
Mimic Kahlm in the womb if you wanna be a Legend in the making
^hahaha..but C.Jack used this b4

Don't front like you'd really fight me cuz you prolly dread hostility
I'll embarrass you in the streets and show you've got no cred-ability
^been done b4, but still decent

Ya prolly been dumped more times than you've been told ya wack
You suck and after you mis-fire, don't try getting an old flame back
^nice personal

I'll arrange for the death of you and ya fam in run down places
Get ya'll burned at the Stakes without riggin Triple Crown races
^i dont get this..

This skinny punk's through, Con should make this one closed
Crit was a bag of bones before he got sealed and decomposed
^LMFAO!

vs.

ask my girl im a womaniser who beats bitches out of habbit,
shit! il win by a hair(hare) and then give you the rabbit/
^played as hell

uv never ventured out of the rfbl! your type are boring,
il take the title match by storm..this is a cyclone warning/
^decent

ul find the results in the lost and found cost of fucking with me,
you got played punches that dont hit/land like ships lost at sea/
^i see what Jack Meant..and then what u meant..either way its iffy

your full of bull like the rings containing spains prize fighters,
il shank-ya! and have your appendix turning over like an essay writer/
^nice

my actual steeze, is murder the threads factual believe,
il throw ya limbs round the room and spread flu like bacterial disease/
^Played

so bring ya crew and troops its time to rally this peaseant,
right now il serve fresh up(r) cuts like a delicatesent/ (deli's serve up fresh cuts of meat)
^decent..atleats its not played

iv got the heaters on aim to ensure that i roast spines,
ul get ya carrear washed up 4sure (foreshore) like waves on the coast line/
^played played played!

fluent will end up in plastic and wrapped to prove how this toy is,
il plunge my knife in ya vein! and sink vessels like a bermuda tiangle voyage.
^decent

Overall=this was under my expectations for both, especially Fluent...i expected to read n for him to have every catagory won..but he didnt...thoe he still did have the majority..both had very played concepts..especially the NP that crit used on flu..horibly played..that personal Flu ahd took it for me

So V/Fluent

[Fluent]

Triple Crown Races=Kentucky Derby, Preakness Stakes, and Belmont Stakes

Two of them have Stakes in their name. Burned as in I rigged it so they'd lose no matter what (people bet on horse races).

And yeah, I remember Click saying something like it but I've had the idea for ages now myself and thought I did it way better.

Anyway, 2-1, I'll return the favor later.

[Criticize]

this isnt finished yet ladies.

[Kaeo.Seru]

yo I'm not breaking this down bar for bar. i thought i'd just let you know that now...

This battle was dissappointing. i was expecting more fire from you two. i'm hoping u're just saving shots for the tourny. but u shoulda went all out for this. Fluent came with a couple of nice punches that connected well with metas n wordplay like the Arch Rival line and front page news. but others just werent that strong in my eyes like the cred ability line... Crit your verse was more or less the same. only difference is that your weak bars wer played as fuck and thats what lost you this battle. please bring sum fire to the tourny.

v=Fluent

[Criticize]

ha, i havent battled for a month im rusty

3-1 to flu,

upiin 1 more.

[Fluent]

Nah, I already posted before you made the tourney signups thread, I was saving shots so you can add another name to your loss record next week, it could use one more.

[iLLushun]

Give up, ya style's outdated and I'll have you slumping dude
I can see ya behind on the Times but ya ass ain't front page news
Pretty nice
Last time you were unable to leave my smart spit wrecked
Now you couldn't top ya Arch rival as a skilled St. Louis architect
Straight
You can't blow me out the water with your verse's shit details
Become a mermaid police informant if you wanna Tip the Scales
Ehh pretty decent
This title's remaining mine cuz you ain't contendin', you shaking
Mimic Kahlm in the womb if you wanna be a Legend in the making
cool
Don't front like you'd really fight me cuz you prolly dread hostility
I'll embarrass you in the streets and show you've got no cred-ability
ok
Ya prolly been dumped more times than you've been told ya wack
You suck and after you mis-fire, don't try getting an old flame back
decent
I'll arrange for the death of you and ya fam in run down places
Get ya'll burned at the Stakes without riggin Triple Crown races
dope
This skinny punk's through, Con should make this one closed
Crit was a bag of bones before he got sealed and decomposed
haha nice closer

Overall...pretty consistent verse...dope concepts and all..very nice

vs

ask my girl im a womaniser who beats bitches out of habbit,
shit! il win by a hair(hare) and then give you the rabbit/
Ehh decent...
uv never ventured out of the rfbl! your type are boring,
il take the title match by storm..this is a cyclone warning/
haha Nice
ul find the results in the lost and found cost of fucking with me,
you got played punches that dont hit/land like ships lost at sea/
ehh ok
your full of bull like the rings containing spains prize fighters,
il shank-ya! and have your appendix turning over like an essay writer/
dope
my actual steeze, is murder the threads factual believe,
il throw ya limbs round the room and spread flu like bacterial disease/
nice
so bring ya crew and troops its time to rally this peaseant,
right now il serve fresh up(r) cuts like a delicatesent/ (deli's serve up fresh cuts of meat)
ok
iv got the heaters on aim to ensure that i roast spines,
ul get ya carrear washed up 4sure (foreshore) like waves on the coast line/
ehh ok
fluent will end up in plastic and wrapped to prove how this toy is,
il plunge my knife in ya vein! and sink vessels like a bermuda tiangle voyage.(blood vessels)
nice

Overall...pretty nice.but i felt you could have came so much harder...so....

Vote..Flu

good battle.