HellRazor vs. ((Rck Bndles)) - Topical

[Plot]

topical battle: go 12 bars at least, if more PM your opponent.
Due:Friday.
By DAM, ...chosen by PLOT...

"The Mathematics of Life"

[HellRazor]

newbish mod and your double thread.....lol

[Ruck]

topic is original...that doesnt mean it good though.

goodluck.

[HellRazor]

Saw 4 was sold out so I'm going to the 10 o'clock showing I'm sending this from my phone but ill post up when I get back to my barracks room

[Ruck]

im in the concrete jungle, the cinderblock city
laughin at a stupid gimmick and it hit me.....
whats with life in 2007?
most niggas makin a quick 20 and coppin a sick 7-11
to ride through, becomin bosses and makin orders like a drive thru
.....now just read.

Once Upon A Time....Math was Cool......
We wanted to live, needed that set square'n'triangle but the cost was great
told my teacher i wanted to learn and he gave me that steve austin face
stone cold, i reflect on society and how maths helped armstrong reach the sky
sittin in bed writin logistics and spittin out 3.14 everytime someone speak pie
no one wanted to learn me, calculators and text books wanted to see me go
Tom Renolds said "numbers are useless and boring" so why is there a tv show?
kids despised maths, searched for one who didnt and i only found one
now i realise why we in 2007 and the whole town dumb
whats with all the hatin? smart thoughts dont figure like the equators equation
sure, we're chillin, while in africa they tryna solve the square root of starvation
n' political issues, we fear em
all the fightin, kids crying but mothers cant hear em
12 years old gettin raped and we worried about the pythagoras theroem?
fucks with that, these days, manners are so rare, like common courtesy
its the nerve of me, to look at a bus stop and figure out variables and vertices
the point of existance is to wine, dine and primarily survive
so why is it when the countries got a problem we divide?
sent to war, to die, at first kids we're wonderin what happened to us
but in truth..
they wondering how real gangsters claim they move O's like an abacus
where'd the old heroes go?
my pasttimes included noble prize winners and sudoko's before sleep
life became about drugs and money, now im hopeless without reef
to relive it visit the old country, behind mountains, like where the days would go
3.53 deaths to 1.4 births per day and i didnt kill no one, i just simplified the ratio...
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FIN - rushed most of it, couldnt get an ideas for the topic.
note - i did no editing so excuse the mispelt words or w.e//

[HellRazor]

I'm back matter of fact...you'll notice you'll see...
not really a no show post, but its for you noticing me...
My verse is ready to post, its ready to go...
But I'll only put it up after you since you ain't wrote it before...
guaranteed to be up within 5 mins after you show...
it'll be gay for me to win without you broadcasting your flow...
but they know i'm the sickest to step in the do'...
elevating to the sky i'll be the first to grow...

[HellRazor]

just woke up..lol

*Enters MetaPhor.......*

Born on the birthday of my mother minus half of the day of my brothers...
8 months alone, mothers gone and we long for each other...
Take our division, and envision whats missin from this equation...
perpendicular thoughts leads to numerous twitches...summations...
Groomed through bliss, pissy occassions, there was no giving no thanks and...
Father...add 10yrs to his sentence...knew him through pictures with braces...
Never part of the sum, Stepfather could COSINE for the fact...
That life is blind as a bat, can't see a SINE on a track...
stepfather left us... numerous times... but... we had each other...
me, my brother and mother... Pythagoraus would've loved us...
That triangle was broken though, when that woman became spoken fo'...
got married and released chemicals that Mendeleev would've left alone...
^^A Scientific fact, based my life on algorithms and such...
A defined list of combined shit... and now we picking it up...
This lack of complacency facing me, debating is defacing my legacy...
Edging me to dumb down...not to even reach for those vertices...
Not to focus on politics... unopened packages bagging it up...
Letters from my father...sent back to the truck... equals me laughing it up...
Too much to factor in... mothers gone, brothers studying law...
Learning how to be a useful addition to a society that doesn't want him involved...
Doesn't want him at all... subtract 500 yrs...they'll put us back on the boat...
Before the shapeage of geometrical figures from Passionate folk...11
Minus my mother grooming us to be a household full of lovers...
Before she gave her life to provide comfort for us bashful lil fuckers...
She died on the birthday of my grandmothers, plus that of my brothers...
12 yrs alones...shes gone...and now I long for my Mother...
A new addition...my daughter, envision whats missin from this equation...
Parallal thoughts leads to the same bitchings and complaining...

[Ruck]

votes please.

[Schematic]

Hell- The flow was lock and chain. Your take on the topic was basic though. Solid writing, nothing really surprised me. Some real lyrics there though.

Rck- I liked the theme. Parts of it were pretty creative. Flow was on for most of the piece, the numbers kinda mess with it. Looks like you put alot of thought into this.

Vote- Rck Bundles

Rcks verse stood out more. You both used alot of the same words, and the way it looks to me Razor wrote his after Rck. Either way, close battle.

[HellRazor]

lmao.......i wrote my verse a day before deadline? wow....we used 2? of the same words...vertices and pythagaurus? how is that using alot of the same words? fuck outta here...lol..uppin...

[STRONGARM]

Rck Bndles - Very nice man..!

whats with all the hatin? smart thoughts dont figure like the equators equation
sure, we're chillin, while in africa they tryna solve the square root of starvation

Liked this..!

n' political issues, we fear em
all the fightin, kids crying but mothers cant hear em
12 years old gettin raped and we worried about the pythagoras theroem?

hahaha.. nice. Mispelled "Theorem" but it's still nice..!

fucks with that, these days, manners are so rare, like common courtesy
its the nerve of me, to look at a bus stop and figure out variables and vertices
the point of existance is to wine, dine and primarily survive
so why is it when the countries got a problem we divide?
sent to war, to die, at first kids we're wonderin what happened to us
but in truth..
they wondering how real gangsters claim they move O's like an abacus

Very nice shit here.. that Abacus line is nuts..! Real Shit: I had to look that up. Dope..!

to relive it visit the old country, behind mountains, like where the days would go
3.53 deaths to 1.4 births per day and i didnt kill no one, i just simplified the ratio...

Nice ending..!


Overall man, like your verse against Beyond, I'm impressed. I read you didn't want to edit your shit so I understand the typos.. but in the future you should really try to avoid those. It'll make your shit come out cleaner and easier to read. No one likes to have to guess what the fuck someone was TRYING to write..! Considering the theme.. I think you definitely laid down a solid verse that carried the Topic throughout the entire verse. Fresh concepts.. stinging harsh truths.. cynical observations.. it all works and easily shows growth in your writing. You came correct on this man. Enjoyed the read..!





HellRazor

Groomed through bliss, pissy occassions, there was no giving no thanks and...
Father...add 10yrs to his sentence...knew him through pictures with braces...

Liked this...

I honestly don't think you handled the Topic as well as Rck. For me reading your verse, I got the impression you kinda forced the whole "Math" angle into your own personal story. The biggest problem with that was the total lack of anything really spectacular rhyme/creative wise. Most of your concepts were just Math key words like "Minus" "Equals" "Subtract" thrown together with an existing idea.. it made it feel like your personal story was the focus.. and the Topic was a secondary afterthought.

That approach ended up weakening BOTH Topics imo. I felt like the personal story aspect would have been better without the Math shit thrown in.. and the Math Topic would have been better without your personal story mixed in. Rck had a mix of creative and witty concepts while your entire verse was a single story with the Math Topic tacked on.


MY VOTE = Rck Bndles

Originally Posted by Schematic

You both used alot of the same words, and the way it looks to me Razor wrote his after Rck.

I found that odd as well.

Originally Posted by HellRazor

wow....we used 2? of the same words...vertices and pythagaurus?

They're not common words.. that's why it's odd. Who cares.. it's just odd to see two people in the same battle using the same two uncommon words.

[Ruck]

thanks for the votes.

ups.

[Jay-Rede]

ruck, flow suprised me, it was much better than usual.. good approach to the topic, the steve austin line was great, kept me reading..

HR - was quite disapointed this week, you seemed to include multies, which is dope, but ionno, maybe it was the topic which never went your way..

anyway

V// Ruck.. i felt he had a better verse, HR wasnt on his best game, but still a decent battle, keep it up kids

[Ruck]

thanks ko.