H'Core No.2: ((BlackHand)) vs. Diamondz

[Plot]

8-10 bars. Due on Sunday
Please check, match, & Pm your opponent

[Ruck]

murda mike.

[..::23::..]

check

[Ruck]

i just about to drop some 8 minute shit, just incase i wont be back for a couple days

Watch this kid Fry more then characters from futurama
ill sign him up to acting lessons and save him the drama
beef? front, its past jokes we at the malice stage
you like jay-z, stole ya whole swag from dallas page*
Hazard warning, your shits all played out and most unstable
and just to get a leg on the rest, he needs a 5 post table
beat black? its impossible and mastercard concreted the fact
its a wrap,added up your nice stuff and came up with -0.8 to be exact
so i layed my shit down, wondered how this kid made the middle
then he spat his freshest dopest bar, and everyone said it was played alittle
this guys a newbie and id be suprise if he decides to show
after i school duke, wouldnt be suprised he slides to low.

**--im serious now like clipse songs--**

everyone know hes shit and couldnt "bmore" sittin ona toilet*
woulda been a sick battle but his name on the title spoilt it
due sunday? i wanted him to die-mon, like his name says
and have d breakin up more then complicated name plays

-----------------------------------------------------------
*Diamond Dallas Page is sueing jayz for the diamond
*bmore is his location

first half took about 6 minutes, then second two about 4.

[..::23::..]

Blackhand..pssss

.watch me smackman L from blahkhand drop it my punches like backhands/
when i kill em watch rf start laugh-and only when next to athletes ima stat fan/

flip blackhand give em a taste of his on medicine and let em feel the knukles/
scars and holes only leavin a couplewatch me kut blackhand off like slavery struggles/

ya flows old. hand's a fraud watch me dispose of this rubber glove/
it takes more than a hand to break diamondz try like strength of mother love/

check beef and bullsh1t i was the underdog every1 had black winnin by guessin/
but in real the only time a hands ahead is when im askin a question/

black please stop the hatin or ni99a will get decapitated/
hand pleese face it if ya bars like water i must be heat kause it look like the evaporated/

i gotta steam flow like the iron on the jeans yo and still smak every1 of blacks team tho/
leave bows a lil competition but quik `mean blows`/

hitem 4 days when black try to step i'll spray like cleaning products/
pain from punches is the only time he'll ever be dealin wit narcauticts /

loss to his status beatin black wit all tactics punches hittin rapid/
sick..not ill cure this cold wit a tablet bullets bounce like rabbits
let em see the black when i close casket/


*old name was stat
*if u drop L from blackhand its backhand
*in slave times they cut off hands and feet sumtimes so they culdnt escape
*diamondz hard to break
*black gloves
*ever1 thinks he gonna win the battle
*his sig says his flows like water

http://www.rapflava.com/forums/d-men...=1#post1237676 (D.mEnTeD.sOuL vs. ((WYSIWYG)))

[Ruck]

my last bar = KO.. :)

ups for votes.

[Pembroke]

BlackH

Watch this kid Fry more then characters from futurama
ill sign him up to acting lessons and save him the drama

Basic

beef? front, its past jokes we at the malice stage
you like jay-z, stole ya whole swag from dallas page*

Nice.

Hazard warning, your shits all played out and most unstable
and just to get a leg on the rest, he needs a 5 post table

Mostly unstable*

beat black? its impossible and mastercard concreted the fact
its a wrap,added up your nice stuff and came up with -0.8 to be exact

"Its a wrap" doesn't do anything. Remove that and it's okay

so i layed my shit down, wondered how this kid made the middle
then he spat his freshest dopest bar, and everyone said it was played alittle

K

this guys a newbie and id be suprise if he decides to show
after i school duke, wouldnt be suprised he slides to low.

Eh

everyone know hes shit and couldnt "bmore" sittin ona toilet*
woulda been a sick battle but his name on the title spoilt it

Same as the previous

due sunday? i wanted him to die-mon, like his name says
and have d breakin up more then complicated name plays

Doesn't rhyme and it's probably played, but I know it wasn't intentional. Welcome back to the battle scene.. sorry if I seem a little harsh. I have to type and post fast because of time limits..

Diamondz

.watch me smackman L from blahkhand drop it my punches like backhands/
when i kill em watch rf start laugh-and only when next to athletes ima stat fan/

Indirect hit

flip blackhand give em a taste of his on medicine and let em feel the knukles/
scars and holes only leavin a couplewatch me kut blackhand off like slavery struggles/

Nameplay doesn't work, need to shorten the length

ya flows old. hand's a fraud watch me dispose of this rubber glove/
it takes more than a hand to break diamondz try like strength of mother love/

Cool for self praise, but not for a text battle.

check beef and bullsh1t i was the underdog every1 had black winnin by guessin/
but in real the only time a hands ahead is when im askin a question/

In reality* Spelling error messed up the concept

black please stop the hatin or ni99a will get decapitated/
hand pleese face it if ya bars like water i must be heat kause it look like the evaporated/

...

i gotta steam flow like the iron on the jeans yo and still smak every1 of blacks team tho/
leave bows a lil competition but quik `mean blows`/

Downhill

hitem 4 days when black try to step i'll spray like cleaning products/
pain from punches is the only time he'll ever be dealin wit narcauticts /

Narcotics*

loss to his status beatin black wit all tactics punches hittin rapid/
sick..not ill cure this cold wit a tablet bullets bounce like rabbits
let em see the black when i close casket/

Weak

v/ Blackhand

Good effort from Diamondz, who I suspect to be 7. Stay in the league!

[Ruck]

thanks 1-0 and ayo with the last bar u said it doesnt rhyme but im saying it like sais not sez.. know what i mean?

[..::23::..]

0-1 uppin

[Phonix]

BlackH:

Watch this kid Fry more then characters from futurama
ill sign him up to acting lessons and save him the drama

Save him the drama is a played idea and the flip on it was way to predictable...how about

i'll record episodes of "insert your american program here" to save him the drama

beef? front, its past jokes we at the malice stage
you like jay-z, stole ya whole swag from dallas page*

That's pretty cool.

Hazard warning, your shits all played out and most unstable
and just to get a leg on the rest, he needs a 5 post table

Lol ok.

beat black? its impossible and mastercard concreted the fact
its a wrap,added up your nice stuff and came up with -0.8 to be exact

Not feeling.

so i layed my shit down, wondered how this kid made the middle
then he spat his freshest dopest bar, and everyone said it was played alittle

Not feeling...it's just not..good..no effort put into it..not even vaguely interesting.

this guys a newbie and id be suprise if he decides to show
after i school duke, wouldnt be suprised he slides to low.

WTF?

everyone know hes shit and couldnt "bmore" sittin ona toilet*
woulda been a sick battle but his name on the title spoilt it

Balti more could of been flippd so well it was good..the b more thing had potential but the fact you:

a. put it in your setup
b. didn't word it well..

completley ruined it...second line was weak too.

due sunday? i wanted him to die-mon, like his name says
and have d breakin up more then complicated name plays

rhyming is gay..name says and nameplays...it rhymes but i mean comone..your rhyming the same word...punch was decent at best.

VS

Diamondz:

.watch me smackman L from blahkhand drop it my punches like backhands/
when i kill em watch rf start laugh-and only when next to athletes ima stat fan/

Not feeling..at all.

flip blackhand give em a taste of his on medicine and let em feel the knukles/
scars and holes only leavin a couplewatch me kut blackhand off like slavery struggles/

They chopped off their feet traditionally so they wouldn't run away..haven't heard anything about their hands..nameplay attempt was way too basic to begin with and your wording is atrocious. First of all it's Cut, not "kut"..secondly, cutting him off from what?...oh! you mean cutting him...that sucked.

ya flows old. hand's a fraud watch me dispose of this rubber glove/
it takes more than a hand to break diamondz try like strength of mother love/

Despite what pem said..i'm quite liking this..was pretty fresh.

check beef and bullsh1t i was the underdog every1 had black winnin by guessin/
but in real the only time a hands ahead is when im askin a question/

Dude get away from hand nameplays..no matter how good they could be..you are starting to completlely lose my interest...do something different.

black please stop the hatin or ni99a will get decapitated/
hand pleese face it if ya bars like water i must be heat kause it look like the evaporated/

Ok so you went away from the nameplay..good..i meant go to something atleast decent..this was weak to give you the most credit for it possible..i suppose atleast you're attempting metaphors....well you should of worded them that way anyway.

i gotta steam flow like the iron on the jeans yo and still smak every1 of blacks team tho/
leave bows a lil competition but quik `mean blows`/

Why did you completly change style..i mean a little bit of flow chopping up and abstractness is always appreciated and good..but it looks like you just went to battle on another site. this wasn't even close to weak.

hitem 4 days when black try to step i'll spray like cleaning products/
pain from punches is the only time he'll ever be dealin wit narcauticts /

Ok..back to a normal style now..better length than when you started with irrelevant stretched multi's....no lol this doesn't work with the punch though.

loss to his status beatin black wit all tactics punches hittin rapid/
sick..not ill cure this cold wit a tablet bullets bounce like rabbits
let em see the black when i close casket/

Homo.



Vote - BlackHand.

[Ruck]

lol word, effort was sitting on around 13%

[..::23::..]

0-2 gettin my ass wooped

[Noggah]

bhand fav line :

you like jay-z, stole ya whole swag from dallas page*

coulda flipped the ending some like i said...


Diamondz didnt really have one, either the wording was off on it or the metaphor wasnt as hard...

i gotta go wit blackhand, for basically the same reasons as the two people above me... he just edged it out with harder hittin more polished punches...

[..::23::..]

0-3 ko good battle BH

[Ruck]

no sweat brah