((Criticize)) vs. Drei -OpenMic

[Plot]

10-12 bars due Friday, (gettim in before Sat nite know what Im saying)
Check etc...

[Criticize]

ko coming right up then.

[anier lexa.]

this friday?

geez.
in
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yall aint winners, yall whining, just bitter in rhyming,
hatin, wanting recognition, just my nigga Criticize-zing!
but yall dont know better, they coking up conscious
pretentious chicks inspire bricks; voguing in posters
and they ask for little skill now they choke on they vocals
got abuelita rooting for me to be callin out Oprah
and I dont care where u from, ya mom's uterus? (oh)
Im like Martha Stewart jokin, way I humor these hoes
and all the hate is just goodwill, shit aint new to me no
they talk to me with no balls like they been neutered before
sick of these stories like they out to kill ya
I preach no bullshit, Im astounding, its brilliant

dont struggle for content; Im humble in conscience
shake the hand of the better after cuttin her tonsils
slittin swiftly - u miss me?; victim in light speed
have u surrounded by yellow tape, like filming a taxi
splatter bullets all over ur neck like bugs in a hustle
my snails in Brick jungle bust slugs thru the tunnels
Im as dope as they come like Alicia playin them keys (kilos)
kill ya blues like Ike turner turn up dead; imitatin disease
and girl, I dont press buttons - my shit is auto type
I say the word once yea; and ya shit is off tonight

Im sorry if its late ...i was drunk last night and forgot about this ,, so posting. Idk if it will DQ me lol.

[Criticize]

you know what it is, im basicaly digging the multi word multi's..spitting it accapela cypher style with no clear direction in mind you will see, oh by the way ivan milat was a notorious murder of people back-packing around the country.


i got what your crew is missing, so you dudes just listen,
and be awe-struck at my lyrics and what i do with rhythm
or il make you dissapeer until its breaking news your missing
with no clues at the crimscene bout how i abuse my victims
so keep penning your battles kid and use your writtens,
while i bang your girls pussy so hard shes producing kittens
i let her choose position, so its true shes twitchin,
coz il give her a fully belly without having to use the kitchen
man you'l lose quit bitchin, put down the glue your sniffin,
most good text rappers are dope but its true your different
so quit trying to play me, baby you know i lie with the 80,
im always with the steel girl..like the bionic lady
you know my bling causes friction when i rub mics,
coz i got ice all over me like coco's love life/ (icet wife)
i attack where it hurts and have the beating inflicted
and if home is where the heart is il have you evicted/8
a terror on the beat when im abusing you rap gays,
til your between a rock and hard place like the musical cafe's/
im sick of battling shit cunts im only waiting to succueed,
got my eyes stuck beyond belts- dominating the league
i keep coming from left field yall topical mcs stay on the same page,
you think your creative? il fucking hang 10 on your brain wave
so when im rhyming a rap, i keep it live on the tracks,
til im killing you back pack rappers like ivan milat/

[Xylo]

nice Oms people!

Drie you had smoe nice visuals in you piece the section i like the best was this:

"dont struggle for content; Im humble in conscience
shake the hand of the better after cuttin her tonsils
slittin swiftly - u miss me?; victim in light speed
have u surrounded by yellow tape, like filming a taxi"
Pretty ill right there grammar a bit off as was the flow in spots but you more than made up for it with your wit!

-vs-


Crit

Man you had me dying laughing your flow and multies and word usage were crazy!

my favorite parts from you were:

"so keep penning your battles kid and use your writtens,
while i bang your girls pussy so hard shes producing kittens
i let her choose position, so its true shes twitchin,
coz il give her a fully belly without having to use the kitchen
man you'l lose quit bitchin, put down the glue your sniffin,
most good text rappers are dope but its true your different
so quit trying to play me, baby you know i lie with the 80,
im always with the steel girl..like the bionic lady"

STRAIGHT SICKNESS RIGHT THERE!

I enjoyed the way these two brought the heat but the one with the most flame to me was


Crit! ( i really enjoyed his way with words and flow)

Respect to both!

[Kaeo Seru]

VOTE= CHOPPER

A.Lexa: Your verse was decent. a couple nice meta's and visuals. punches could use a lil more effort. overall it seemed rushed or like a keystyle. feels under developed. i dunno just not what i was looking for from you. i feel as though you could have done better.

Chop: your verse was pretty good punchlines contained some comedic value. multis were decent. On par with most of your open mics. a few of your lines were a lil chooppy with the flow just off a syllabel or two. just needed a little re-wording but overall good showing.

[Pembroke]

Drei - Your verse had a streetwise, freeflowing current to it.. I felt myself tagging along wherever you were taking it. The rhyme techniques practiced were cool, lyrics not too engaging but I enjoyed the route you took and I could imagine Jean Grae delivering some of your lines.. since I've heard you on audio I'm able to get a sense of your vocal style and catch the rhythm better than I would have if I hadn't heard your Bronx accent. A fresh showing.

Im like Martha Stewart jokin, way I humor these hoes
and all the hate is just goodwill, shit aint new to me no
they talk to me with no balls like they been neutered before
sick of these stories like they out to kill ya
I preach no bullshit, Im astounding, its brilliant
^Nice section, ma..

Criticize - Crit, you hit the kangaroo on the asshole.. or whatever you Aussies say when it's all out contact. This was an excellent bragging verse with all the credentials, effective set-ups, and nice punchline ideas. The bionic lady bar was bananas.. and there's more quotables along with that. You've found your skill and you're currently using it to full potential..

a terror on the beat when im abusing you rap gays,
til your between a rock and hard place like the musical cafe's/
^Only weak spot.

i keep coming from left field yall topical mcs stay on the same page,
you think your creative? il fucking hang 10 on your brain wave
so when im rhyming a rap, i keep it live on the tracks,
til im killing you back pack rappers like ivan milat
^More bananas..

v/ Chop Suey

Keep doing this, both of you.