Champ Belt: ((Beyond)) vs. Criticize (Punches)

[STRONGARM]

12 Bars Due Friday. Vote On Other Battles..!

[Criticize]

you know im here right, like i said i want to like 14/15 but if you would prefer go 12, let me know and thats cool.

i will post in like 22 hours.

[Beyond]

Good luck.

[Criticize]

i better post early coz you know beyond is anal about due dates, come 1 min before the dead line dude is here posting "i win you lose" no show verses, trying to take the easy win in all his battles. please check the explanations at the end i dont think you will need all of them, but just in case you arnt familiar with some of the plays... thank you and good night.

you always hoping for no show wins your whole text is denial
because your anal about due dates like fags who aint had sex in awhile/
i could beat you black and blue or leave you neon green,
how these herbs feel your iffy wordplay is beyond me/
your a teflon g; i planted the rfbl seeds you should have bore the fruits,
the league was hott when i ran it and was champ.. whats your excuse?
you need a gun license to beat crit and you aint earnt the right to shoot,
sure you won last time
but you wont 'measure up' to go 'back 2 back' like settling height disputes/*
you want to up the stakes? ul get done even if its petty you'l lose,
so il take this beyond a knife...i got guns that im ready to use/
pem beat you and you can add crit to the list when i make this final,
coz my punch will have be on da backside like the 80's vinyls/*
il put a bullet in your flesh a little shot to inspire me,
av u ooze/whooze blood like questions at a murder inquiry/7
if i tried to iron out your flaws all your denim would shrink,
il take your title while your 'out of the running' like white guys in a sprint/
truth is your just a lazy fat fuck fact is this man slobs,
beat me? ul need the 'rub of the green' like the hulks hand jobs/
i wish i culd kill you now and not have to peep your whack verse,
my aims to position you 'under the gun' like poker players who act first/
your the champ but you dont do shit for RF except air the boredom,
your just a leech on the site like members who abuse the sharing forum/
il attack when i charge, coz you need major elevation to be rapping it large,
il knife you
and thats the pain youl have to deal with like attacks on floor workers@ the mirage/**



measure up to go back to back height disputes like when your debating who is tallest you stand back to back and it’s the easiest way to see. Dude wont go back to back beating me twice.
80’s vinyls used to have an a side and a b side. My punches will leave be on da (beyond) da backside of the record. And backside like his back side when I knock him down. see pic.
Um attacks on the mirage, like poker/black jack dealers at the casino will have to still deal with the pain.
Under the gun is a poker term used for the person who has to act first after the flop comes out. Ussualy known as the worst or 2nd worse spot.

[Beyond]

Trying your hardest don’t cut it, watch the plasma splitscreen,
You can’t beat me going at maximum… ’s why you asked for 15.
You’re the type of guy who’d have ten thousand with no clout,
But I have to admit, that’s still a good 10,000 — in postcount.
So arrogant and dares to spit with a snaggletooth bookbag,
You’re the type to make a full-of-yourself… attitude look bad.
You-aren’t-dope, you-aren’t-great; you’ll see when you lose.
Those two multies don’t rhyme — and NEITHER SHOULD YOU.
Nation’s gonna take a spill ‘cause Australia’s royals are runts.
It wouldn’t take much ^ all you do is put an oil in front.
Delayed battling me ‘til “it” was back, but shit ends swiftly.
You’ve got a hold-off method that patient hitmen envy.
Gave you two losses already, I’m the Celtics with scripts.
And this is the 3rd… degree burn I’m meltin’ you with.
Me for mod has your full support, I’m ready to intercept.
That’s something you gotta sign-off on… another is the internet.
Last week you said I had a killer bar, so what I’ll do is recount.
Your bars are more like victims ― of bad execution throughout.
My no fear of vengeance is namely true even if you feign abuse.
How’ll you pick me out of a line-up when all blacks look the same to you?!
You complaining about too many belts on a whim is dumb.
‘Cause only my belt would stand;
Congrats, your chances just went from slim to none.
This is the end of the line, faggot, and THIS time ya’ done quick.
3G’s not your pay, it’s the phone the onlookers are calling 911 with. :(

[Exis]

Crit:

you always hoping for no show wins your whole text is denial
because your anal about due dates like fags who aint had sex in awhile/

^^first line is worded poorly , second is stretched...content is blah.

i could beat you black and blue or leave you neon green,
how these herbs feel your iffy wordplay is beyond me/

^^hmm...

your a teflon g; i planted the rfbl seeds you should have bore the fruits,
the league was hott when i ran it and was champ.. whats your excuse?

^^second line is aight...

you need a gun license to beat crit and you aint earnt the right to shoot,
sure you won last time
but you wont 'measure up' to go 'back 2 back' like settling height disputes/*

^^your usage of words is on some wack shit , ain't feelin' the lack of multies and bland material...

I was gonna breakdown each yada yada , but got to here and thought nah...I find it pretty much unfathomable how you can say my structure is all over the place when yours is sloppy as fuck...seriously , word choices leave alot to be desired and this is a punches battle that you hardly took swings in...thought this was real weak and borin' to read.

Beyond:

Trying your hardest don’t cut it, watch the plasma splitscreen,
You can’t beat me going at maximum… ’s why you asked for 15.

^^nah...

You’re the type of guy who’d have ten thousand with no clout,
But I have to admit, that’s still a good 10,000 — in postcount.

^^aight...

So arrogant and dares to spit with a snaggletooth bookbag,
You’re the type to make a full-of-yourself… attitude look bad.

^^cool bar...

You-aren’t-dope, you-aren’t-great; you’ll see when you lose.
Those two multies don’t rhyme — and NEITHER SHOULD YOU.

^^lol , pretty nice...

Nation’s gonna take a spill ‘cause Australia’s royals are runts.
It wouldn’t take much ^ all you do is put an oil in front.

^^first line is cool , second I ain't feelin'...

Delayed battling me ‘til “it” was back, but shit ends swiftly.
You’ve got a hold-off method that patient hitmen envy.

^^not bad...

Gave you two losses already, I’m the Celtics with scripts.
And this is the 3rd… degree burn I’m meltin’ you with.

^^second line is hot , no pun intended...

Me for mod has your full support, I’m ready to intercept.
That’s something you gotta sign-off on… another is the internet.

^^ok...

Last week you said I had a killer bar, so what I’ll do is recount.
Your bars are more like victims ― of bad execution throughout.

^^don't like it...

My no fear of vengeance is namely true even if you feign abuse.
How’ll you pick me out of a line-up when all blacks look the same to you?!

^^wordin' in the first line seems iffy , second is tight...

You complaining about too many belts on a whim is dumb.
‘Cause only my belt would stand;
Congrats, your chances just went from slim to none.

^^decent...

This is the end of the line, faggot, and THIS time ya’ done quick.
3G’s not your pay, it’s the phone the onlookers are calling 911 with.

^^ok...

thought the middle of your verse was flames , some nice lines man...punches were alot more direct and flow thru to word choice was solid for the most part.A few inconsistencies but a much stronger verse than what Crit dropped , harder hittin' and better lyrically imo...

one sided no doubt.

...vote - Beyond , stay up.

[Pembroke]

Crit

you always hoping for no show wins your whole text is denial
because your anal about due dates like fags who aint had sex in awhile/

Beyond is actually pretty leniant with due dates.. he edits in his verse if the opponent shows up.

i could beat you black and blue or leave you neon green,
how these herbs feel your iffy wordplay is beyond me/

It kind of disses him... and then kind of doesn't. This is iffy, so I guess I'm a herb..

your a teflon g; i planted the rfbl seeds you should have bore the fruits,
the league was hott when i ran it and was champ.. whats your excuse?

Ehh..

you need a gun license to beat crit and you aint earnt the right to shoot,
sure you won last time
but you wont 'measure up' to go 'back 2 back' like settling height disputes/*

Okay

you want to up the stakes? ul get done even if its petty you'l lose,
so il take this beyond a knife...i got guns that im ready to use/

Alright..

pem beat you and you can add crit to the list when i make this final,
coz my punch will have be on da backside like the 80's vinyls/*

It would've been better if you'd said "B spinnin' on da backside" but as is, decent punch.

il put a bullet in your flesh a little shot to inspire me,
av u ooze/whooze blood like questions at a murder inquiry/7

No..

if i tried to iron out your flaws all your denim would shrink,
il take your title while your 'out of the running' like white guys in a sprint/

Basic?

truth is your just a lazy fat fuck fact is this man slobs,
beat me? ul need the 'rub of the green' like the hulks hand jobs/

Okay.

i wish i culd kill you now and not have to peep your whack verse,
my aims to position you 'under the gun' like poker players who act first/

Basic?

your the champ but you dont do shit for RF except air the boredom,
your just a leech on the site like members who abuse the sharing forum/

First line was nice, second wasn't doing it..

il attack when i charge, coz you need major elevation to be rapping it large,
il knife you
and thats the pain youl have to deal with like attacks on floor workers@ the mirage/**

Okay.

Beyond

Trying your hardest don’t cut it, watch the plasma splitscreen,
You can’t beat me going at maximum… ’s why you asked for 15.

Not sure about this one..

You’re the type of guy who’d have ten thousand with no clout,
But I have to admit, that’s still a good 10,000 — in postcount.

Raw, but could've been harder..

So arrogant and dares to spit with a snaggletooth bookbag,
You’re the type to make a full-of-yourself… attitude look bad.

Okay

You-aren’t-dope, you-aren’t-great; you’ll see when you lose.
Those two multies don’t rhyme — and NEITHER SHOULD YOU.

Hah.. okay.

Nation’s gonna take a spill ‘cause Australia’s royals are runts.
It wouldn’t take much ^ all you do is put an oil in front.

?

Delayed battling me ‘til “it” was back, but shit ends swiftly.
You’ve got a hold-off method that patient hitmen envy.

Nice, but skims on basic.

Gave you two losses already, I’m the Celtics with scripts.
And this is the 3rd… degree burn I’m meltin’ you with.

Nah

Me for mod has your full support, I’m ready to intercept.
That’s something you gotta sign-off on… another is the internet.

Okay

Last week you said I had a killer bar, so what I’ll do is recount.
Your bars are more like victims ― of bad execution throughout.

Not bad

My no fear of vengeance is namely true even if you feign abuse.
How’ll you pick me out of a line-up when all blacks look the same to you?!

So that means he's got you behind bars?

You complaining about too many belts on a whim is dumb.
‘Cause only my belt would stand;
Congrats, your chances just went from slim to none.

Aggressive, but sounds plain.

This is the end of the line, faggot, and THIS time ya’ done quick.
3G’s not your pay, it’s the phone the onlookers are calling 911 with. :(

Eh..

Beyond came with the stronger macabre and jammed his victor's card into the slot once again. This was one of the better shows of effort I've seen in a battle lately.. good job to both.

v/ Beyond

Stay up

[STRONGARM]

2 - 0 or 1 - 0.. Beyond, Crit has a problem with Exis and his vote. He's asked that you decide if it counts or not. It's up to you cuz I could care less personally.. lol. So decide..

[1/2 Wit It]

Crit;
you always hoping for no show wins your whole text is denial
because your anal about due dates like fags who aint had sex in awhile/
hah. pretty cool opener.
i could beat you black and blue or leave you neon green,
how these herbs feel your iffy wordplay is beyond me/
i thought this was decent. alittle too basic though.
your a teflon g; i planted the rfbl seeds you should have bore the fruits,
the league was hott when i ran it and was champ.. whats your excuse?
that's hot..liked how you got semi personal with it
you need a gun license to beat crit and you aint earnt the right to shoot,
sure you won last time
but you wont 'measure up' to go 'back 2 back' like settling height disputes/*
i think the wording could be tweaked slightly..because it seems slightly forced..but other than that i actually enjoyed the punch
you want to up the stakes? ul get done even if its petty you'l lose,
so il take this beyond a knife...i got guns that im ready to use/
eh, this was okay..just as the nameplay you used before, i thought it was too simple
pem beat you and you can add crit to the list when i make this final,
coz my punch will have be on da backside like the 80's vinyls/*
nice!..probaly my favorite bar out of your verse so far
il put a bullet in your flesh a little shot to inspire me,
av u ooze/whooze blood like questions at a murder inquiry/7
a tad forced but i honestly thought it was still cool
if i tried to iron out your flaws all your denim would shrink,
il take your title while your 'out of the running' like white guys in a sprint/
eh, wasn't feeling this..i know you have an accent and all, but shrink/sprint just sounds awkward to me..
truth is your just a lazy fat fuck fact is this man slobs,
beat me? ul need the 'rub of the green' like the hulks hand jobs/
hahah. pretty damn clever..
i wish i culd kill you now and not have to peep your whack verse,
my aims to position you 'under the gun' like poker players who act first/
this was hot..even for a gunplay punch
your the champ but you dont do shit for RF except air the boredom,
your just a leech on the site like members who abuse the sharing forum/
made me chuckle..another cool bar
il attack when i charge, coz you need major elevation to be rapping it large,
il knife you
and thats the pain youl have to deal with like attacks on floor workers@ the mirage/**
don't like how you had to use attack twice..decent way to close things out


Beyond;
Trying your hardest don’t cut it, watch the plasma splitscreen,
You can’t beat me going at maximum… ’s why you asked for 15.
cool opener..wording's on point
You’re the type of guy who’d have ten thousand with no clout,
But I have to admit, that’s still a good 10,000 — in postcount.
Hah. Very slick..
So arrogant and dares to spit with a snaggletooth bookbag,
You’re the type to make a full-of-yourself… attitude look bad.
came together very nicely..don't know if the punch was very effective, but it was definately creative..
You-aren’t-dope, you-aren’t-great; you’ll see when you lose.
Those two multies don’t rhyme — and NEITHER SHOULD YOU.
this was so simple..and yet i find it to be humorous..hah
Nation’s gonna take a spill ‘cause Australia’s royals are runts.
It wouldn’t take much ^ all you do is put an oil in front.
Ehh, I have mixed feelings about this bar..thought it was witty, but I just plain don't like it.
Delayed battling me ‘til “it” was back, but shit ends swiftly.
You’ve got a hold-off method that patient hitmen envy.
Hot..
Gave you two losses already, I’m the Celtics with scripts.
And this is the 3rd… degree burn I’m meltin’ you with.
Also hot...nice set up and precise delivery..
Me for mod has your full support, I’m ready to intercept.
That’s something you gotta sign-off on… another is the internet.
intercept/internet is a tad iffy imo..you cut it close with this bar, but i still thought it was cool..simply because i think it's funny
Last week you said I had a killer bar, so what I’ll do is recount.
Your bars are more like victims ― of bad execution throughout.
Eh, not feeling this..it rhymes poorly
My no fear of vengeance is namely true even if you feign abuse.
How’ll you pick me out of a line-up when all blacks look the same to you?!
Damn. that was pretty sick..
You complaining about too many belts on a whim is dumb.
‘Cause only my belt would stand;
Congrats, your chances just went from slim to none.
Damn, again! that was also sick..
This is the end of the line, faggot, and THIS time ya’ done quick.
3G’s not your pay, it’s the phone the onlookers are calling 911 with. :(
I thought this was a decent closer..


Okay,

Overall; I definately felt like Crit held his own..his verse had some pretty hot punches, as well as funny ones..Wording became a problem in certain bars, and I wasn't really feeling either nameplay he used, neither did I like his closer much..Although you had quite a few bars that I really enjoyed, I didn't read anything killer in the verse..Nothing that just made me hault completely and read it over again..That's the only thing I felt you were missing..Beyond, one thing I can definately say about your verse is that is was really consistent..There were very few bars you had that I wasn't feeling much..Other than that, everything was pretty much creative or humorous..which is an automatic plus..You also had a few bars towards the end of your verse that secured the battle for you in my eyes...Your closer was okay..but your verse overall was the strongest of the two imo..So my vote goes to Beyond..really dope battle though..I enjoyed both reads. Peace

[Criticize]

thanks.
i will get at you and pem tommorow.

[7th Crescent]

Crit

you always hoping for no show wins your whole text is denial
because your anal about due dates like fags who aint had sex in awhile/
--ehh not really effective…
i could beat you black and blue or leave you neon green,
how these herbs feel your iffy wordplay is beyond me/
--aight this better..like the approach..not really a punch..personal..
your a teflon g; i planted the rfbl seeds you should have bore the fruits,
the league was hott when i ran it and was champ.. whats your excuse?
--felt the last line..but the execution was off..a little too wordy
you need a gun license to beat crit and you aint earnt the right to shoot,
sure you won last time
but you wont 'measure up' to go 'back 2 back' like settling height disputes/*
--wayyyy too strectched for my liking
you want to up the stakes? ul get done even if its petty you'l lose,
so il take this beyond a knife...i got guns that im ready to use/
--the aggression is there but this seems more like a set up to something ..rather than an actual attack..be more direct
pem beat you and you can add crit to the list when i make this final,
coz my punch will have be on da backside like the 80's vinyls/*
--feeling this shit…nice combo of personal, punch and wordplay..best two bars of the verse so far..
il put a bullet in your flesh a little shot to inspire me,
av u ooze/whooze blood like questions at a murder inquiry/7
--fell a bit short here..
if i tried to iron out your flaws all your denim would shrink,
il take your title while your 'out of the running' like white guys in a sprint/
--lol funny as shit..nice!!!
truth is your just a lazy fat fuck fact is this man slobs,
beat me? ul need the 'rub of the green' like the hulks hand jobs/
--just all around disturbing..lol…
i wish i culd kill you now and not have to peep your whack verse,
my aims to position you 'under the gun' like poker players who act first/
--wordplay was there but the content was liking
your the champ but you dont do shit for RF except air the boredom,
your just a leech on the site like members who abuse the sharing forum/
--aight could’ve been better crafted but still effective..
il attack when i charge, coz you need major elevation to be rapping it large,
il knife you
and thats the pain youl have to deal with like attacks on floor workers@ the mirage
--not feeling the closer

Overall I have seen waaaaaay better from you…I was hoping for some more personal hard shit from you..would have went over better..IMO.. Only on a couple lines did it seem like you went at Beyond directly..It just seem like a bragg verse with some personals sprinkled in..not a bad verse..but for your standards this was subpar…Nice job…good to see you back around these parts..






Beyond

Trying your hardest don’t cut it, watch the plasma splitscreen,
You can’t beat me going at maximum… ’s why you asked for 15.
--aight nice opener…
You’re the type of guy who’d have ten thousand with no clout,
But I have to admit, that’s still a good 10,000 — in postcount.
--nice..couldve flipped it better..
So arrogant and dares to spit with a snaggletooth bookbag,
You’re the type to make a full-of-yourself… attitude look bad.
--LMAO…nice
You-aren’t-dope, you-aren’t-great; you’ll see when you lose.
Those two multies don’t rhyme — and NEITHER SHOULD YOU.
--Damn!!!lmao that shit is hilarious..
Nation’s gonna take a spill ‘cause Australia’s royals are runts.
It wouldn’t take much ^ all you do is put an oil in front.
--lost me on this one honestly..
Delayed battling me ‘til “it” was back, but shit ends swiftly.
You’ve got a hold-off method that patient hitmen envy.
--ok feeling this..
Gave you two losses already, I’m the Celtics with scripts.
And this is the 3rd… degree burn I’m meltin’ you with.
--ooooh nice
Me for mod has your full support, I’m ready to intercept.
That’s something you gotta sign-off on… another is the internet.
--bland after the previous bars..
Last week you said I had a killer bar, so what I’ll do is recount.
Your bars are more like victims ― of bad execution throughout.
--lol nice flip
My no fear of vengeance is namely true even if you feign abuse.
How’ll you pick me out of a line-up when all blacks look the same to you?!
--lol funny but not effective..
You complaining about too many belts on a whim is dumb.
‘Cause only my belt would stand;
Congrats, your chances just went from slim to none.
--fire!!!!
This is the end of the line, faggot, and THIS time ya’ done quick.
3G’s not your pay, it’s the phone the onlookers are calling 911 with. :(
--decent ender…

Overall nice job..yet again..you brought the right mix of intensity, personal, wordplay..basically the entire package.some places could’ve been worded different but still your were very effective in your verse..I like the in your face type shit..makes the shit seem real personal..especially when u pull out info or history on your opponent…well crafted...


Vote-Beyond

Reason: Overall better verse..over-powered his opponent…flow was better..over all better crafted battle verse this week..

nice job felllaz!!!

[Criticize]

You’re the type of guy who’d have ten thousand with no clout,
But I have to admit, that’s still a good 10,000 — in postcount.

You-aren’t-dope, you-aren’t-great; you’ll see when you lose.
Those two multies don’t rhyme — and NEITHER SHOULD YOU.



Me for mod has your full support, I’m ready to intercept.
That’s something you gotta sign-off on… another is the internet.


You complaining about too many belts on a whim is dumb.
‘Cause only my belt would stand;
Congrats, your chances just went from slim to none.



good verse beyond, the best i have seen on here since i returned over the last 3 weeks. nice win.

[STRONGARM]

Beyond Wins.. KO..!