B1: ((Criticize)) vs. R.D. Famous

[STRONGARM]

10 Bars Due Friday. Vote On Other Battles..!

[R.D.]

In..

[Criticize]

ok i did 9 bars. feel free to go the full 10. good luck.

your records a laughing stock your just a shitty house thug,
now the sites
despising famous like actors who didnt make it past the mickey mouse club
i got 2 matches this week and im glad you suck with no bars blazing
coz i dont have to try and can save my focus for beyond like star gazing
your writing is a slur on the site and if your sick il give you soup,
the league hopes u bite
so we can campaign to get dis pawn banned like religious groups/
my left and right combo will daze and torture ya,
when i unleash the Chin music like an asian orchestra/4
been here since 02 and ya still whack your verses cause shrink brain,
cause youve 'sucked at writing so long' your 'baby teeth have ink stains'/
i bet your girl gets lonely when your on army duty and she miss you the most,
all i needs 10 mins w/ ya chick and bet i get blow like drug hunting off columbia's coast/
your always dropping whack verses and opinions on the net your crashing,
your personalities starting to wear thin but you shop in xl fashion/
the rfbl is crits home kid and in my world you will lose,
coz im out of your league son...and your girl is too/
this is an effortless victory u av no chance the voters will watch u and witness fail,
why drop 10 when i can bet u w/ 9 bars and save 10% like a christmas sale/



ok so i think its pretty self explanatory, have a look at his picture, saving 10% of my bars by writing 9 bars instead of 10
sucked at writing/baby teeth had ink stains. i.e like sucking on pens back before hes baby teeth fell out. i doubt you need these explanations

[R.D.]

what will crit bitch about today, the topic is open for discussion..
i'll even make my first bar not rhyme so you got something to cry about..

i got a whole 'fitness plan' for this man and i'll beat him how i 'see fit'..
im tellin this guy 'things in confidence' cause RD will just 'See-Crit(secret)'..

the results will include a many of rose pedals as a sentiment..
Hell!.. i'll bring heat to wreck you like the devil in an accident..

pull up a chair, i have a serious interest in sittin with the victim..
cause this guys about to see exactly how far the criticism gets him..

leagues dead an you wont get a battle for he belt even if con-exists..
cause comparin me to you is like comparin Australia to six other continents..

pimp this drag, bitch i see you try to get dolled up and shit for RD..
fuck shrimp or snag, man im about to just throw crit on the barbie..

i can either lose or win like firemen i think i'll go in with the ladder..
cause after this battle, even females will agree that cize(size) doesn't matter..

over 8,000 posts plus, and im looking for any lines of relevance..
so when you say nice battle RD its the first sign of your intelligence..

kids a bitch, i'm laughin while he runnin off cryin tears and stuff..
i'd say you could beat me but i dont think you meet the criteria..

i took a bar out so its even.. and fuck explainin' if you dont get it your blind

[Criticize]

no rush, guys whever you are ready. me and rd only post early so we have to wait longer for votes, not so it gets voted on quicker.

[Pembroke]

Stfu before I deport you back to New Zealand..

Lemme vote 'fo I depart..

Crit

your records a laughing stock your just a shitty house thug,
now the sites
despising famous like actors who didnt make it past the mickey mouse club

Cute and playful, at best.

i got 2 matches this week and im glad you suck with no bars blazing
coz i dont have to try and can save my focus for beyond like star gazing

Okay..

your writing is a slur on the site and if your sick il give you soup,
the league hopes u bite
so we can campaign to get dis pawn banned like religious groups/

?

my left and right combo will daze and torture ya,
when i unleash the Chin music like an asian orchestra/4

Not bad..

been here since 02 and ya still whack your verses cause shrink brain,
cause youve 'sucked at writing so long' your 'baby teeth have ink stains'/

Cute and playful.. but okay.

i bet your girl gets lonely when your on army duty and she miss you the most,
all i needs 10 mins w/ ya chick and bet i get blow like drug hunting off columbia's coast/

Creative, but slightly stretched..

your always dropping whack verses and opinions on the net your crashing,
your personalities starting to wear thin but you shop in xl fashion/

Eh..

the rfbl is crits home kid and in my world you will lose,
coz im out of your league son...and your girl is too/

Nah..

this is an effortless victory u av no chance the voters will watch u and witness fail,
why drop 10 when i can bet u w/ 9 bars and save 10% like a christmas sale/

No..

R.D.

what will crit bitch about today, the topic is open for discussion..
i'll even make my first bar not rhyme so you got something to cry about..

Hahah.. but nahnah?

i got a whole 'fitness plan' for this man and i'll beat him how i 'see fit'..
im tellin this guy 'things in confidence' cause RD will just 'See-Crit(secret)'..

Okay..

the results will include a many of rose pedals as a sentiment..
Hell!.. i'll bring heat to wreck you like the devil in an accident..

The rhyme doesn't really work, the concept is ehh..

pull up a chair, i have a serious interest in sittin with the victim..
cause this guys about to see exactly how far the criticism gets him..

Grimey..

leagues dead an you wont get a battle for he belt even if con-exists..
cause comparin me to you is like comparin Australia to six other continents..

Barely.. not feeling the turnout of this.

pimp this drag, bitch i see you try to get dolled up and shit for RD..
fuck shrimp or snag, man im about to just throw crit on the barbie..

Not bad.

i can either lose or win like firemen i think i'll go in with the ladder..
cause after this battle, even females will agree that cize(size) doesn't matter..

DOPE.. ................... !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

..just playing. This is one of those nameplays that've been used against Crit 75 times.. so it has no impact anymore. Played.

over 8,000 posts plus, and im looking for any lines of relevance..
so when you say nice battle RD its the first sign of your intelligence..

No.

kids a bitch, i'm laughin while he runnin off cryin tears and stuff..
i'd say you could beat me but i dont think you meet the criteria..

Somewhat of another played concept.. the starts-with-his-nameplay concepts don't work against Crit.. he has 8,000 posts, think of how many times people have used these against him in battles..

I thought this would be really close as I was getting towards the midpoint of R.D's verse, but those played nameplays and misses hurt him significantly.. it's not your fault, RD, but you have to search for more original concepts cause I've seen these many times before in many fashions of delivery..

v/ Crit

For the harder jab.

Stay up ladies

[R.D.]

eh!.. i though they were respectable flips, i've never really seen any battles against him though..

thank you for voting Pem your one person good at doing that..

1-0 Crit UP

[1/2 Wit It]

Crit;

your records a laughing stock your just a shitty house thug,
now the sites
despising famous like actors who didnt make it past the mickey mouse club
seems alittle stretched but i still thought it was cool
i got 2 matches this week and im glad you suck with no bars blazing
coz i dont have to try and can save my focus for beyond like star gazing
that was nice..
your writing is a slur on the site and if your sick il give you soup,
the league hopes u bite
so we can campaign to get dis pawn banned like religious groups/
also thought this was nice..
my left and right combo will daze and torture ya,
when i unleash the Chin music like an asian orchestra/4
lol..if anything i thought this was hilarious..isn't very effective though
been here since 02 and ya still whack your verses cause shrink brain,
cause youve 'sucked at writing so long' your 'baby teeth have ink stains'/
damn..pretty hot
i bet your girl gets lonely when your on army duty and she miss you the most,
all i needs 10 mins w/ ya chick and bet i get blow like drug hunting off columbia's coast/
eh, i thought this was okay..almost forced seeing as how you couldn't have used the word 'blowed' and made sense.
your always dropping whack verses and opinions on the net your crashing,
your personalities starting to wear thin but you shop in xl fashion/
this was decent. alittle on the basic side..
the rfbl is crits home kid and in my world you will lose,
coz im out of your league son...and your girl is too/
this was both clever and simple..
this is an effortless victory u av no chance the voters will watch u and witness fail,
why drop 10 when i can bet u w/ 9 bars and save 10% like a christmas sale/
the "witness fail" is pretty forced..felt this lacked as a closer

Famous;

what will crit bitch about today, the topic is open for discussion..
i'll even make my first bar not rhyme so you got something to cry about..
not feeling this..
i got a whole 'fitness plan' for this man and i'll beat him how i 'see fit'..
im tellin this guy 'things in confidence' cause RD will just 'See-Crit(secret)'..
nah, this didn't work..
the results will include a many of rose pedals as a sentiment..
Hell!.. i'll bring heat to wreck you like the devil in an accident..
doesn't rhyme..
pull up a chair, i have a serious interest in sittin with the victim..
cause this guys about to see exactly how far the criticism gets him..
hah. that's pretty nice..
leagues dead an you wont get a battle for he belt even if con-exists..
cause comparin me to you is like comparin Australia to six other continents..
hottest bar so far imo..the wording is dope
pimp this drag, bitch i see you try to get dolled up and shit for RD..
fuck shrimp or snag, man im about to just throw crit on the barbie..
decent attempt..
i can either lose or win like firemen i think i'll go in with the ladder..
cause after this battle, even females will agree that cize(size) doesn't matter..
not really feeling the set up..but i liked the punch
over 8,000 posts plus, and im looking for any lines of relevance..
so when you say nice battle RD its the first sign of your intelligence..
lol..cool bar
kids a bitch, i'm laughin while he runnin off cryin tears and stuff..
i'd say you could beat me but i dont think you meet the criteria..
decent closer..


Overall; I felt Crit's verse was hot at the beginning and then cooled off, while R.D's verse was pretty cold at the beginning and then heated up..Wasn't really feeling either closer, so in my eyes this battle was fairly close..In the end though I think Criticize takes it just because his concepts were more original/creative, which makes his punches stronger/more effective..Enjoyed reading both verses though. Peace

[STRONGARM]

2 - 0 Crit..

[R!canTheoryz]

Crit;

your records a laughing stock your just a shitty house thug,
now the sites
despising famous like actors who didnt make it past the mickey mouse club
Its Okay Nothing Speical.
i got 2 matches this week and im glad you suck with no bars blazing
coz i dont have to try and can save my focus for beyond like star gazing
Pretty Nice^
your writing is a slur on the site and if your sick il give you soup,
the league hopes u bite
so we can campaign to get dis pawn banned like religious groups/
lol Nice ^
my left and right combo will daze and torture ya,
when i unleash the Chin music like an asian orchestra/
Humor Was On Point^ Solid Punch.
been here since 02 and ya still whack your verses cause shrink brain,
cause youve 'sucked at writing so long' your 'baby teeth have ink stains'/
Nice Punch, Good Set up
i bet your girl gets lonely when your on army duty and she miss you the most,
all i needs 10 mins w/ ya chick and bet i get blow like drug hunting off columbia's coast/
This Had Potential, But Wording Fucked it Up.
your always dropping whack verses and opinions on the net your crashing,
your personalities starting to wear thin but you shop in xl fashion/
Decent Swing Here^
the rfbl is crits home kid and in my world you will lose,
coz im out of your league son...and your girl is too/
Short N Simple, Decent
this is an effortless victory u av no chance the voters will watch u and witness fail,
why drop 10 when i can bet u w/ 9 bars and save 10% like a christmas sale/
Forced, The Set Up Was Nice, Good Closer






Famous;
what will crit bitch about today, the topic is open for discussion..
i'll even make my first bar not rhyme so you got something to cry about..
Nah Weak Opener^
i got a whole 'fitness plan' for this man and i'll beat him how i 'see fit'..
im tellin this guy 'things in confidence' cause RD will just 'See-Crit(secret)'..
This Was Alright, I Like the See Crit/Secret Flip. Decent Bar.
the results will include a many of rose pedals as a sentiment..
Hell!.. i'll bring heat to wreck you like the devil in an accident..
Rhyme'n Is Poor Here^ But the Punch Linkage is Nice.
pull up a chair, i have a serious interest in sittin with the victim..
cause this guys about to see exactly how far the criticism gets him..
Cool ^
leagues dead an you wont get a battle for he belt even if con-exists..
cause comparin me to you is like comparin Australia to six other continents..
Comparing word is twice in the same line, thats a NO NO!
pimp this drag, bitch i see you try to get dolled up and shit for RD..
fuck shrimp or snag, man im about to just throw crit on the barbie..
It Was Ok ^
i can either lose or win like firemen i think i'll go in with the ladder..
cause after this battle, even females will agree that cize(size) doesn't matter..
Nah .. Wording is Off^
over 8,000 posts plus, and im looking for any lines of relevance..
so when you say nice battle RD its the first sign of your intelligence..
This Was Ok
kids a bitch, i'm laughin while he runnin off cryin tears and stuff..
i'd say you could beat me but i dont think you meet the criteria..
Decent.


Overall Vote - Criticize, For having better consistency, and his punches was alot more well connected then RD's now he did have some bars with good potential, he slacked on a few other's .. which cost him the match. crit stayed on point, with having MORE better consistent Bars.

[STRONGARM]

3 - 0 KO.. Crit Wins..!