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Old 09-04-2005, 03:34 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Fuck a Group Therapy..I see right through yall niggas..Shady mother fuckers tryna be cool and throw subliminals at us..Yeah i Caught that shit, and guess what? We are number One. We just playin with yall half ass faggots


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kids fresh out of therapy, these feins flock to see me
but like a broken down mustang, i'm gonna drop a GT
asked some dudes to join, guess they caught stage fright
we just wanted ya'll to see, what droppin' flames like
shread will hate us for a minute, and then ride our peak
he's mad he didn't catch a invite like the high school geek
you wanna roll some l's, man you're gonna have enough
truth is, you couldn't shread contact, playin two-hand touch
tell me i'm not hot, people are dyin' by my snippets
h2o bench pressin' ya whole crew, and this survial of the fittest
but nobody can pull you up, these dudes truley suck
shread pink slipped con, but it was strictly newbies luck
in the explorer, hunt you down and make you cross the boarder
duke shread's like a arcade token, just a wanna be quarter
don't wonder, i'm so hot they callin' me the sound summer
water will drag you to the bottom, and crit will hold you down under
droppin' these pests quick, so i know what swattin' flies like
i'm just walkin' on the board, h2o monopolizin' this site
say you got nothin' but respect, but me i'm hatin'
nobody's touchin' h2o while i'm here, prepare for dehydration

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Shread is childsplay! rapflava's self proclaimed "veteran dude",
ur writing sucks!
u could tell me you were going to kill me..and i wouldnt feel threated by you/
you tried to cypher with me on aim and failed with low stealth and beam,
you follow me around all day! and cant get criticize of your mind like low self esteem'/
a known child sex offender! aim stalker with scary agression,
you type trash! no wonder 'just talking' is a 'therapy session'/
share you a lesson; il pass teks just to see you spray,
il hit up therapy! and leave 'bitch group split' like 'b2k'/
your not touching h20 your crews all bitch so listen,
you write story songs,
and besides that phades a 'basic fuck' like 'missionary position'/
khlam and ideal aint worth a mention shoulnt av unleashed these toys,
kik the u.k kid out! and get "phade out group" like the beastie boys/(faded out)
speak w/ noise; re piece your toys; i see what his bitch-ment,
shread agrees with his girl! and even admits hes short of equipment/
il start this shit, everytime medicore spits, depart your lips,
after this! my diss owned contract like failed partnerships/ (disowned)

Subb Diesel

You wanna take shots with H20? You drowning..so why step?
Cause y'all niggas aint even got guns when flexin those biceps
These faggots is nobodies, its no suprise you feel hidden
Pull my card and I'll give you my hand 52 times, so deal with it
Shred think he invincible..I'm a redneck and you on the wrong farm
Cause I'll smack you down even harder, without using my "strongarm"
You aint no tank..please excuse this rap madonna
When you said 80 ton war machine.. i was thinking of ya momma
How yall gonna diss a select few in my Crew and get away with it
Phade fuckin with graffitti, but MY sprays different
Run through ya people, This bitch gone, and that bitch soft
Legend is Calm..so he rather be pissed on then pissed off
Get chumped bitch, I make the rules so wrestle these parliaments
Deuce have niggas screaming 'Kahlm(s) down!' like settling arguments
My shit so hard when you read, best get ya glasses
GT like a branch of BangBros, A Parade of asses
I was already hot but now im steamin, call me tea kettle
Yeah H20 might not be #1, but yall below sea level
Inn Deppth? You a queef..dont get me started..
This Virgin only heard of pussy..like when she farted
These niggas vegetables, they ain't about to stand up
Ya face a runway and my punches flyin, imma have to land one
With hand guns, its a hate crime killin faggots when I shoot
Cause Shred like a tomato, he's disputed as a fruit
Group therapy idol me..I'm the one they wanna be a fan of
So keep fuckin with H20, And I'll leave you like Louisiana

http://www.rapflava.com/forums/showthread.php?t=91379 (The King Of The Disses is Back)
http://www.rapflava.com/forums/showthread.php?t=91199 (Look, I wrote another long rant about what a piece of shit Criticize is)
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Old 09-04-2005, 03:43 PM   #2 (permalink)
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1st off this was more like a Shred diss than anything. i dont see why i was mentioned at all. and once again I am not Legend. Criticize said so himself. but Crit dissed me? LOL he just conceded a loss to me in the BVT. i was up 2-0 and he gave up. LOL... but anyways there were sum ups and downs in this one. i didnt really read it all the way through cuz i just dont have the time right now but. i'll get at this later
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Old 09-04-2005, 04:00 PM   #3 (permalink)
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yes, yes ,yes sir

Alotta quotables in this
really hard hitting...all 3 verses
...made me laugh some too


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Old 09-05-2005, 12:05 AM   #6 (permalink)
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upping, ive dropped links on ghosts shit twice, mals shit, sto and stocks shit.
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very nice diss.. you all came with creative bars and new ideas...

nicest diss track ive seen in a while.... lets see what happens next
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Old 09-05-2005, 12:52 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Ill Drop Feed on this when i wake up lata
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Old 09-05-2005, 04:02 AM   #9 (permalink)
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that would be dope.
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PRESTIGE
in the explorer, hunt you down and make you cross the boarder
duke shread's like a arcade token, just a wanna be quarter
^
Lmao The one that made me laugh out of all your bars

CRIT

speak w/ noise; re piece your toys; i see what his bitch-ment,
shread agrees with his girl! and even admits hes short of equipment/
LOL i Like this one because its a dis not a text battle bar it made me Laugh

SUBB

Run through ya people, This bitch gone, and that bitch soft
Legend is Calm..so he rather be pissed on then pissed off
My shit so hard when you read, best get ya glasses
GT like a branch of BangBros, A Parade of asses
^ There were hott had the flow the DIss a great two bars there Tight

Overall Great work from all You I feel sometimes its moe of like text battle bars than actual diss's if you feel me.. but dont get me wrong this came hard n was a tight read! Peace
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wtf was that "short of equipment" line - that wasn't a reference to anything, the hell were you even talking about?

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Old 09-05-2005, 12:27 PM   #12 (permalink)
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Press:
kids fresh out of therapy, these feins flock to see me
but like a broken down mustang, i'm gonna drop a GT
nice

tell me i'm not hot, people are dyin' by my snippets
h2o bench pressin' ya whole crew, and this survial of the fittest
was feeling this

don't wonder, i'm so hot they callin' me the sound summer
water will drag you to the bottom, and crit will hold you down under
ha cool

Crit:
khlam and ideal aint worth a mention shoulnt av unleashed these toys,
kik the u.k kid out! and get "phade out group" like the beastie boys/
ha nice

speak w/ noise; re piece your toys; i see what his bitch-ment,
shread agrees with his girl! and even admits hes short of equipment
ouch

il start this shit, everytime medicore spits, depart your lips,
after this! my diss owned contract like failed partnerships
nice

Subb:
You aint no tank..please excuse this rap madonna
When you said 80 ton war machine.. i was thinking of ya momma
ahahaha nice

Get chumped bitch, I make the rules so wrestle these parliaments
Deuce have niggas screaming 'Kahlm(s) down!' like settling arguments
Cool

This was a Nice Diss..Strong Verses from all..Punches/Personals were Fire
i was feeling this..flow was on point..creativity was nice
Keep Dropping shit Like this
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First, I am Group Therapy, but I drop honest feed as I hope you will to us even if your name is mentioned.


Anger Management


Press tha tige:
Quote:
kids fresh out of therapy, these feins flock to see me
but like a broken down mustang, i'm gonna drop a GT
Good name play on the second line.
Quote:
asked some dudes to join, guess they caught stage fright
we just wanted ya'll to see, what droppin' flames like
Not a bad personal because everyone knows what you are talking about, but seems like an excuse.
Quote:
shread will hate us for a minute, and then ride our peak
he's mad he didn't catch a invite like the high school geek
didn't like the first line, but liked the second and it mad the bar. I don't know why, but I think you could have made it better with a better beginning.
Quote:
you wanna roll some l's, man you're gonna have enough
truth is, you couldn't shread contact, playin two-hand touch
Not bad, but filler compared to what I expect from you.
Quote:
tell me i'm not hot, people are dyin' by my snippets
h2o bench pressin' ya whole crew, and this survial of the fittest
Filler.
Quote:
but nobody can pull you up, these dudes truley suck
shread pink slipped con, but it was strictly newbies luck
Sounds like an excuse again, getting better though.
Quote:
in the explorer, hunt you down and make you cross the boarder
duke shread's like a arcade token, just a wanna be quarter
Good personal.
Quote:
don't wonder, i'm so hot they callin' me the sound summer
water will drag you to the bottom, and crit will hold you down under
Not bad, but not feeling it.
Quote:
droppin' these pests quick, so i know what swattin' flies like
i'm just walkin' on the board, h2o monopolizin' this site
Not bad, but still lacking.
Quote:
say you got nothin' but respect, but me i'm hatin'
nobody's touchin' h2o while i'm here, prepare for dehydration
Good ass punch, Illness.

Not a bad verse overall, with the illest bars being the first and the second, alot of filler. Not talking shit, but I expected more fire from you

Crit-a-size:
Quote:
Shread is childsplay! rapflava's self proclaimed "veteran dude",
ur writing sucks!
u could tell me you were going to kill me..and i wouldnt feel threated by you/
Filler
Quote:
you tried to cypher with me on aim and failed with low stealth and beam,
you follow me around all day! and cant get criticize of your mind like low self esteem'/
Nice punch.
Quote:
a known child sex offender! aim stalker with scary agression,
you type trash! no wonder 'just talking' is a 'therapy session'/
Not bad nameplay & personal.
Quote:
share you a lesson; il pass teks just to see you spray,
il hit up therapy! and leave 'bitch group split' like 'b2k'/
Nice punch, Illness. Not personal, but you can feel the anger.
Quote:
your not touching h20 your crews all bitch so listen,
you write story songs,
and besides that phades a 'basic fuck' like 'missionary position'/
Good meta4, weak personal, not a bad bar overall.
Quote:
khlam and ideal aint worth a mention shoulnt av unleashed these toys,
kik the u.k kid out! and get "phade out group" like the beastie boys/(faded out)
Wasn't really feeling, but above filler level, I just didn't feel it.
Quote:
speak w/ noise; re piece your toys; i see what his bitch-ment,
shread agrees with his girl! and even admits hes short of equipment/
I like the flow and good rhymes, nice bar, solid punch.
Quote:
il start this shit, everytime medicore spits, depart your lips,
after this! my diss owned contract like failed partnerships/ (disowned)
Not a bad nameplay, but you have done better.

A good diss verse, but yet again was expecting more hatred and anger. Solid overall, I would have been proud of it.

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Quote:
You wanna take shots with H20? You drowning..so why step?
Cause y'all niggas aint even got guns when flexin those biceps
Not bad good droppin of your names and good meta4
Quote:
These faggots is nobodies, its no suprise you feel hidden
Pull my card and I'll give you my hand 52 times, so deal with it
I like the simile I guess you would call it not sure and am too tired to think on it, but Illness.
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Shred think he invincible..I'm a redneck and you on the wrong farm
Cause I'll smack you down even harder, without using my "strongarm"
not bad, good name drop again.
Quote:
You aint no tank..please excuse this rap madonna
When you said 80 ton war machine.. i was thinking of ya momma
O.K. personal, good twist on his diss.
Quote:
How yall gonna diss a select few in my Crew and get away with it
Phade fuckin with graffitti, but MY sprays different
Filler
Quote:
Run through ya people, This bitch gone, and that bitch soft
Legend is Calm..so he rather be pissed on then pissed off
Legend is not calm, but nice flow, the inaccurate accusation messes it all up though.
Quote:
Get chumped bitch, I make the rules so wrestle these parliaments
Deuce have niggas screaming 'Kahlm(s) down!' like settling arguments
Nice name play. Illness.
Quote:
My shit so hard when you read, best get ya glasses
GT like a branch of BangBros, A Parade of asses
I like Bang Bros and Ass Parade, so I liked this punch.
Quote:
I was already hot but now im steamin, call me tea kettle
Yeah H20 might not be #1, but yall below sea level
Nice name drop again and good punch.
Quote:
Inn Deppth? You a queef..dont get me started..
This Virgin only heard of pussy..like when she farted
O.K., not great.
Quote:
These niggas vegetables, they ain't about to stand up
Ya face a runway and my punches flyin, imma have to land one
I didn't get this punch at all, I was completely lost.
Quote:
With hand guns, its a hate crime killin faggots when I shoot
Cause Shred like a tomato, he's disputed as a fruit
Not bad punch and meta4.
Quote:
Group therapy idol me..I'm the one they wanna be a fan of
So keep fuckin with H20, And I'll leave you like Louisiana
Good second line, good overall bar.

Gopod diss verse, I liked most of it, you lost me on the one bar, but oh well, I liked the aggression, that's the way all diss tracks should be

Nice Overall Diss Verse. I felt it. 8/10 Good, but room for Improvement. I'm sure that a reply will be forthcoming.
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I thought this shit was absolute fire.

Pres, verse was hot... some kinda weak nameplays, but the quarter line was hilarious.
survival of the fittest, real nice... this was a real nice verse... good shit.

Crit...
those 3 line bars... i dunno, you don't seem to need to use them, they come off as forced... when you need to set the stage for a mroe complex punch, they're necesary but in general i could do with out them...

had a real nice feel to your verse... content was dope as far as set-ups and stuff. Your wordplay is getting alot better, still would like to see it develop, but its getting there fast.

Diesel...
shit was fire... best diss flow, best diss style, so grimey, been saying it for so long... liked this piece it was hot.


You wanna take shots with H20? You drowning..so why step?
Cause y'all niggas aint even got guns when flexin those biceps
These faggots is nobodies, its no suprise you feel hidden
Pull my card and I'll give you my hand 52 times, so deal with it

so hard.

the only thing i didn't like about this shit, is too many water/h20 lines... it's played when they do it, it's played when we do it...overall hard shit, liked illit's verse more, but this was still so sick.
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