[7]Alter.E.Go -vs- [14] Spray.Slugz

[Malone]

LW Tourny Round1
8 bars (no more .. no less)
3-0 KO
4-1 Tko
First To 5 Votes
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All votes will be processed by battlers in the LW and credible heads
Verses Due *Friday December 09th
Check In's Due *Thursday December 08th

[Ruck]

chea..

[iLLushun]

checkity, i'm going to school right now, but i'll get something when i get back...

[iLLushun]

i'll have mine you dropp first...

[iLLushun]

fuck it man i'm post up now incase i dont get a chance tomorrow...good luck...

Slugs shit is trash, so i think i'll just toss you out...
and it'll be Jesus all over again, when i cross you out...
Man that must suck, being the underdog in the first round..
But like Dog catchers, its my job to take this bitch to the pound..
seriously man, whose gonna be impressed with ya sluggish punches..
So i'm just gonna eat, like birds dinning on buggish lunches...
My verses are twisted, two evil minds are better than one...
you meetin me is more historic, like Oprah and Letterman son...
I sprinkle my flows with salt, just to torture you slowly...
Burn holes in you, so you can see what its like to be holy...
Bitch you should have told Mal not to put you against the kid...
cuz one swing will leave ya Skull like a removeable lid...
listen, on some real talk, do really think you'll come away wit a win...
shove ya brain in ur torso, so your verse can be thoughts from within...
Sorry i had to end ya chances of Lightweight champ so soon...
But to me your not champ material, sorta like a fresh poon...

uppin for your verse and votes..

[Ruck]

uh huh yeh..
To me in this game, you aint nothin but dead weight..
sorry to break your dreams, and fast forward to your end fate!
but me? ill put the blam to ya head, so metal aint all you feelin'
i be rippin, so your top end crooked like a drug house ceilin'
and duke, my aim on point, there aint nothin wrong with the L (loss)
take it how you like, cuz there aint no escapin from this hell
but little dudes dont scare me, and my palm'll-push-ya
Dc is the truth? you just another failed religion, like islam-n-buddah!
ill grip techs, without talkin bout guns, cuz you loosin with lead!
i was wrong, but id thought u be better now that elushun is dead
and watch, ill put a GAP in your teeth and i aint talkin bout clothin brands
i thought u were cool, but im wrong, so now you freeze, like u had frozen hands!
but i take a snapshot as you fall and crawl to your death
you OM's were alright, but you aint got no fresh ideas left
now im through to the next round, i feel like i shoulda given u a chance
so please just step down, so i can shake your hand and advance!!

alright, i tried a whole new style..took out all the gun stuff cuz i will get
voted against..so vote up dudes

[Dopar..]

ELUSHUN:
Slugs shit is trash, so i think i'll just toss you out...
and it'll be Jesus all over again, when i cross you out...
^no, was a really weak punch

Man that must suck, being the underdog in the first round..
But like Dog catchers, its my job to take this bitch to the pound..
^nice, first line was real nice

seriously man, whose gonna be impressed with ya sluggish punches..
So i'm just gonna eat, like birds dinning on buggish lunches...
^nah, way to forced, and wordered wrong

My verses are twisted, two evil minds are better than one...
you meetin me is more historic, like Oprah and Letterman son...
^Oproah And Letterman is a punch? NOPE, slef hype

I sprinkle my flows with salt, just to torture you slowly...
Burn holes in you, so you can see what its like to be holy...
^ok

Bitch you should have told Mal not to put you against the kid...
cuz one swing will leave ya Skull like a removeable lid...
^im really not feeling your punches

listen, on some real talk, do really think you'll come away wit a win...
shove ya brain in ur torso, so your verse can be thoughts from within...
^now thats what im use to from u, nice

Sorry i had to end ya chances of Lightweight champ so soon...
But to me your not champ material, sorta like a fresh poon
^uhh, that was wack

OVERALL: this verse was SOOOOOOOOOO inconsistant, 5 maybe 6/10
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DOUBLE:
To me in this game, you aint nothin but dead weight..
sorry to break your dreams, and fast forward to your end fate!
^ok

but me? ill put the blam to ya head, so metal aint all you feelin'
i be rippin, so your top end crooked like a drug house ceilin'
^not a punch, just another 'net threat'

and duke, my aim on point, there aint nothin wrong with the L (loss)
take it how you like, cuz there aint no escapin from this hell
^no

but little dudes dont scare me, and my palm'll-push-ya
Dc is the truth? you just another failed religion, like islam-n-buddah!
^nice

ill grip techs, without talkin bout guns, cuz you loosin with lead!
i was wrong, but id thought u be better now that elushun is dead
^lol

and watch, ill put a GAP in your teeth and i aint talkin bout clothin brands
i thought u were cool, but im wrong, so now you freeze, like u had frozen hands!
^no

but i take a snapshot as you fall and crawl to your death
you OM's were alright, but you aint got no fresh ideas left
^ehh, ok

now im through to the next round, i feel like i shoulda given u a chance
so please just step down, so i can shake your hand and advance!!
^nice closer

overall-ok,but still inconsistant...7.7/10

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VOTE: Spray
reason: more consistant

[Plot]

ALTAR
Slugs shit is trash, so i think i'll just toss you out...
and it'll be Jesus all over again, when i cross you out...
~eh
Man that must suck, being the underdog in the first round..
But like Dog catchers, its my job to take this bitch to the pound..
~eh
seriously man, whose gonna be impressed with ya sluggish punches..
So i'm just gonna eat, like birds dinning on buggish lunches...
~nah
My verses are twisted, two evil minds are better than one...
you meetin me is more historic, like Oprah and Letterman son...
~nah
I sprinkle my flows with salt, just to torture you slowly...
Burn holes in you, so you can see what its like to be holy...
~ok
Bitch you should have told Mal not to put you against the kid...
cuz one swing will leave ya Skull like a removeable lid...
~ok
listen, on some real talk, do really think you'll come away wit a win...
shove ya brain in ur torso, so your verse can be thoughts from within...
~ok
Sorry i had to end ya chances of Lightweight champ so soon...
But to me your not champ material, sorta like a fresh poon...
~nah

SPRAY
To me in this game, you aint nothin but dead weight..
sorry to break your dreams, and fast forward to your end fate!
~eh
but me? ill put the blam to ya head, so metal aint all you feelin'
i be rippin, so your top end crooked like a drug house ceilin'
~huh?
and duke, my aim on point, there aint nothin wrong with the L (loss)
take it how you like, cuz there aint no escapin from this hell
~nah
but little dudes dont scare me, and my palm'll-push-ya
Dc is the truth? you just another failed religion, like islam-n-buddah!
~nah!!
ill grip techs, without talkin bout guns, cuz you loosin with lead!
i was wrong, but id thought u be better now that elushun is dead
~ehh. almost a punch
and watch, ill put a GAP in your teeth and i aint talkin bout clothin brands
i thought u were cool, but im wrong, so now you freeze, like u had frozen hands!
~eh, terrible wordin, should have stuck with the setup & expanded it
but i take a snapshot as you fall and crawl to your death
you OM's were alright, but you aint got no fresh ideas left
~no punch
now im through to the next round, i feel like i shoulda given u a chance
so please just step down, so i can shake your hand and advance!!
~eh
Bad battle, both need to learn some punches...
Vote- Altar.

[iLLushun]

1-1... thanks just a quick shit, i'm not really into battlin much anymore, but i decided to do tha tourny...oh well, uppin

[Malone]

ALTAR E. GOE
Slugs shit is trash, so i think i'll just toss you out...
and it'll be Jesus all over again, when i cross you out...
Nope
Man that must suck, being the underdog in the first round..
But like Dog catchers, its my job to take this bitch to the pound..
Played
seriously man, whose gonna be impressed with ya sluggish punches..
So i'm just gonna eat, like birds dinning on buggish lunches...
No
My verses are twisted, two evil minds are better than one...
you meetin me is more historic, like Oprah and Letterman son...
Nah
I sprinkle my flows with salt, just to torture you slowly...
Burn holes in you, so you can see what its like to be holy...
Holy has no relation to anything in the punch
Bitch you should have told Mal not to put you against the kid...
cuz one swing will leave ya Skull like a removeable lid...
ok, but this isnt a punch
listen, on some real talk, do really think you'll come away wit a win...
shove ya brain in ur torso, so your verse can be thoughts from within...
ok
Sorry i had to end ya chances of Lightweight champ so soon...
But to me your not champ material, sorta like a fresh poon...
No

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SPRAY.SLUGZ
To me in this game, you aint nothin but dead weight..
sorry to break your dreams, and fast forward to your end fate!
No
but me? ill put the blam to ya head, so metal aint all you feelin'
i be rippin, so your top end crooked like a drug house ceilin'
Nope
and duke, my aim on point, there aint nothin wrong with the L (loss)
take it how you like, cuz there aint no escapin from this hell
Nope
but little dudes dont scare me, and my palm'll-push-ya
Dc is the truth? you just another failed religion, like islam-n-buddah!
Islam isnt a failed religion
ill grip techs, without talkin bout guns, cuz you loosin with lead!
i was wrong, but id thought u be better now that elushun is dead
No
and watch, ill put a GAP in your teeth and i aint talkin bout clothin brands
i thought u were cool, but im wrong, so now you freeze, like u had frozen hands!
Dont Use Diffrent Tenses Of The Same Word.. Freeze/Frozen
but i take a snapshot as you fall and crawl to your death
you OM's were alright, but you aint got no fresh ideas left
wheres your punches?
now im through to the next round, i feel like i shoulda given u a chance
so please just step down, so i can shake your hand and advance!!
Naw


After reading Alter's Verse i thought for sure that spray would ko him, but spray you didnt have one punch in your whole verse.. it was all filler and mostly trash (real talk) alter had ok punches, but some really really like terrible ones that were just really bad.. no hate to either of you, but step yall game up.. this is a tourny, and i know i seen alot better verses from both of you. (v - elushun)

[iLLushun]

2-1 uppin, i'll come harder next time..but i really didn't think i need to come really really hard on this one...

oh and the holy line is talkin about buring holes in you so you see what its like to be holy/holely or filled with holes...

[Malone]

Yea but holey/holy i understand that, but where do you get the biblical term holy from? If you did it like that, it should of wrote holey and not holy.. and this is a tourny, if you dont come hard one of these times, your gonna get ko'd..

[iLLushun]

holy as in respected, praised...

[Ruck]

oh well..Malone's set the trend..thanks for voting

*waits for the other voters to vote exactly like Malone*
by that i mean use No...and Weak..in the same spots

good battle elu.....dont come talkin like u aint never tried and your over text battlin

[H-B]

ALTAR E. GOE
Slugs shit is trash, so i think i'll just toss you out...
and it'll be Jesus all over again, when i cross you out...
Naw
Man that must suck, being the underdog in the first round..
But like Dog catchers, its my job to take this bitch to the pound..
Played
seriously man, whose gonna be impressed with ya sluggish punches..
So i'm just gonna eat, like birds dinning on buggish lunches...
Naw
My verses are twisted, two evil minds are better than one...
you meetin me is more historic, like Oprah and Letterman son...
Naw
I sprinkle my flows with salt, just to torture you slowly...
Burn holes in you, so you can see what its like to be holy...
Naw
Bitch you should have told Mal not to put you against the kid...
cuz one swing will leave ya Skull like a removeable lid...
Played, and could be worded better .. honestly.
listen, on some real talk, do really think you'll come away wit a win...
shove ya brain in ur torso, so your verse can be thoughts from within...
Best Bar, Coo
Sorry i had to end ya chances of Lightweight champ so soon...
But to me your not champ material, sorta like a fresh poon...
No

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SPRAY.SLUGZ
To me in this game, you aint nothin but dead weight..
sorry to break your dreams, and fast forward to your end fate!
Ehh
but me? ill put the blam to ya head, so metal aint all you feelin'
i be rippin, so your top end crooked like a drug house ceilin'
Decent
and duke, my aim on point, there aint nothin wrong with the L (loss)
take it how you like, cuz there aint no escapin from this hell
Naw
but little dudes dont scare me, and my palm'll-push-ya
Dc is the truth? you just another failed religion, like islam-n-buddah!
DC isnt a religion... Naw man
ill grip techs, without talkin bout guns, cuz you loosin with lead!
i was wrong, but id thought u be better now that elushun is dead
Nah man, use some better nameplay kid.
and watch, ill put a GAP in your teeth and i aint talkin bout clothin brands
i thought u were cool, but im wrong, so now you freeze, like u had frozen hands!
What malone said about this bar...
but i take a snapshot as you fall and crawl to your death
you OM's were alright, but you aint got no fresh ideas left
This was a punch, people are reading it wrong.. but needs more complexity.
now im through to the next round, i feel like i shoulda given u a chance
so please just step down, so i can shake your hand and advance!!
Naw

Vote- Elushun
Reason; He came with much more wordplay and creative punches, Spray I know you didn't take any time on this battle man when this should have been one of your most important ones.. so therfore my votes stands.

Spray, in a tourney dawg ....you gotta come wit it.

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