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Old 12-08-2006, 03:37 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Default Re: "Royaltie's Place" by: Queenspittah

The queen of the pack - expression her specialty. As a suggestion, for breeding purposes, keep your words alive and breathing - with needed limitation. When the word choice is loaded to a point where it becomes a resistance barrier, the accumulation becomes an outer layer. When it's cured - there will be an emergence of a celestial body in poetry.

concetration consumed in various pages or print,
^Concentration*

grimey and mucked to repulsiveness by daily intaking,
^From daily intake*

expelled degenerates making a hastey escape,
^Hasty*

"The quiet boredom of micro-organisms lost in porcelain,"
^Excellent.

Try to control excess comparison and analagous function. Language words can grow confusing - calmly construct. A viewpoint from your space. Jube Jube and you should write a poem together.

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