Re: "Royaltie's Place" by: Queenspittah The queen of the pack - expression her specialty. As a suggestion, for breeding purposes, keep your words alive and breathing - with needed limitation. When the word choice is loaded to a point where it becomes a resistance barrier, the accumulation becomes an outer layer. When it's cured - there will be an emergence of a celestial body in poetry.
concetration consumed in various pages or print,
^Concentration*
grimey and mucked to repulsiveness by daily intaking,
^From daily intake*
expelled degenerates making a hastey escape,
^Hasty*
"The quiet boredom of micro-organisms lost in porcelain,"
^Excellent.
Try to control excess comparison and analagous function. Language words can grow confusing - calmly construct. A viewpoint from your space. Jube Jube and you should write a poem together.
Keep doing you
__________________ When I'm on the skytrain headed for the centersphere 
Last edited by Vulgar; 12-08-2006 at 03:39 PM.
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