[Phade]

nice collab guys. Av seemed on a real laidback tip, in terms of the lyrics and the flow, like you were just kicking it and being yourself. I guess nothing that made me sit up and be like 'woah' like you do with some of your verses, but it fit in with the topic and feel of the piece perfectly.

Destined from rubble, gin, cotton its
What got the fix for stomach rumbles
Some would stumble
Love was humbled, sun beat backs
Some bleed black
Some reach back while some just stumble
^you done upped those rhyme schemes on the past month man, dope.

cuz the poor man knows the true sign of wealth
just check how I breathe in life, sigh and well
tell the beaten path that’s down with gravity
let the bad just sleep
give a dap, a peace and ask what’s good?
^really liked the ending and the thoughts you presented here.

Narcist I liked your thoughts but I kinda felt the way you transferred them into lyrics was a little disappointing. Just that there wasn't so many multis or interesting rhymeschemes happening and it kinda didn't keep it interesting and funky. I couldn't always catch the flow, but i realise that could be my fault not yours. But yeah, I'd say try work on saying stuff in a different way to just stating the obvious, maybe focussin a little more subtlety and a little more complexity at the same time would really help you improve.

no psyche above substance
just matter over mind
shatter of the line
grandfathers gathered in the mine

started off strong, dope flow in this part too.
stay up fellas
pz