jewber...
i left feed on a previous site, but i doubt you read it. if not it wasnt that detailed...and i would be enlightened to re-read it and give you some much more indepth feed. poetic, yet on point. abstract, yet still very blunt. a very nice balance of elements. lets embark....
the opening quote, caught the interest; and brings the serious notion early. the pic of Borat, was a good add...to make it a semi balanced read of different attitudes in reading this lengthy but well written piece.
then you continue the literary expedition with a good balance.... a ying-yang effect that worked to your benefit. the abstract still connected with a common theme through the whole entire piece that made it that much more interesting to read. excellent content, and it was illio.
Lets play a game of RISK..and
enter the metallic aura
where hispanic taurus, saw rust decapitate the fleshy pourus
Stalin prototype 7
parading the head of the gorgeous riding bicentennial walrus!
^flowed very well...good attention getter.
products of men slaying their creators..HAIL THE RISE OF THE ABORTIONS
^ill..... enough said. greatly worded
One man stood strong with a blood bong inhaling his ancestors pride
Moustache of innocent sattire covering his molestor side
A Baltic swastica burned into his aging veins on his forehead
King Arthur high fiving dragons as the sapphire gore spread
^crazy wording. quite disturbing actually.
if money grew on trees perhaps rainforests would sprout once again
untll then Adams snake dusts the applause..
in the funeral parlour with more rats to see the air
the best tribute available...
Borat the legionaire...." I MAKE LOVE TO YOUR CORPSE!!!! "
^lovely, lovely. excellent ender. how conclusive.
the world is a zombie, yet to realize we're already dead.
life is only a dream for the dead.
`1
ps. if you could return the favor on my poem, "a grievance of a snow angel' in the poetry section of RF, that would be appreciated totally. thx