 Re: Death B4 Dishonor
he charged forth, unsheathing his sword, seek to destroy
the boy as his blade seeps through his core
he fought a lil more then collapsed to the floor
she screamed as he killed the one her passion was for
^^hot start right here , nice flow with good multies and word choice
his eyes fastened on the queen, in the rapture of things
guards dashed in on the scene as he gathered a swing
took a spear to the knee still he managed to cling
to the sword, in remembering the oath that he swore
"protect the king from enemies and fortunate whores"
killed the 3rd guard as the King bolts through the door
^^flow here is beautiful...very fluent indeed
this is the first piece I have gotten at and it's dope Kahlm.everything from flow to content to imagery to story telling is tight in this drop without doubt.this a real good topic choice and you stayed on point from start to finish painting beautiful pictures thru words , very enjoyable man.
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