[Plot]

refreshing to see that in some places it was reminiscent of the mumbo-jumbo style of 'Dinosaur semen', while in others perfect bars showed a coherent understanding of 'rap'
A few grammaticla mistakes throughout but these can be looked over.
The vocabualry & various excerpts of history & various cultures shows your well-read.
Nice piece overall. It seems to me that your works are evolving into a philiosophical style with nonsenscial sounds-like mulites to illustrate concepts. Perhaps the perfect Phonix piece when we finally see it will abandon the nonsense & all the multie/soundlike will have referential conherence to the lines? Who knows... In the words of Vulgar, keep doing you.

"remain cautious as sunlight on silver aggresively draws dust
products of men slaying their creators..HAIL THE RISE OF THE ABORTIONS"
..thats got a kinda nice doomish nice ring to, abortshuns

"these hollow punching bags gutted, they won scars solemn
homage to the prince of waste management..junkyard golemns"
..thats cool.

happy time cannibalism legalises harvest of the poor
the worlds no longer round..grab your slinkys from the floor
..I enjoyed this one too.
The ability to reference Popular culture is the poets gift to the common man.

Pre-emptive strikes..the third reich even deserves light in an eclipse
Lord of the rings..a Kossack Jesus attempts to fight Brittany mist
..dope. (might have punched better with the Nazi ref.)

outside hotel Rwuanda..political presbyterianisms burn at the stake
sustaining iron infra-structure styling the a perm of a quake
.. Rwandas all war torn, perm of a quake, wow. thats cool, nice visual.

Robocop ripped a slip of his pulse and let it evaporate with his breath
computing "do you treasure your heart? is that why you keep it in a chest?"
..Pretty dope man

greed is free along with hebrew
RC rode on that night of the long knifes..leaving brick windows see through
..Whut? thats crazy

in the funeral parlour with more rats to see the air
the best tribute available...
Borat the legionaire...." I MAKE LOVE TO YOUR CORPSE!!!! "
..funny ending.